Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct plural and article usage, and add one linked supporting detail. Use linking words like “and” or “because.”

예시: I often visit educational websites, news platforms and social media sites. For example, I use educational sites to improve my English and follow news platforms to stay informed, which helps me keep up with my studies.

제안: Clarify which website you mean and avoid irrelevant words. Give one clear reason and one specific example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and fix vocabulary (e.g., 'content from education to entertainment').

예시: My favourite website is YouTube because it offers a wide variety of content, from educational tutorials to entertainment. I visit it almost every day to learn new skills like cooking or to relax with short videos.

제안: Be precise and correct word choice. Use linking words (e.g., “also” or “in addition”) and replace unclear phrases like “load factors” with specific features (e.g., “faster loading times”). Give one concrete example of personalization.

예시: Yes, definitely. Many websites have become more user-friendly and visually appealing, and they also load faster. In addition, they offer personalized content, such as news feeds tailored to my interests.

제안: Improve grammar (plural forms) and fluency by combining ideas with linking words. Remove fillers and expand with one specific example or comparison to support your point.

예시: In Vietnam, social networking sites, online shopping platforms and entertainment websites are extremely popular. People use them not only for communication but also for shopping and keeping up with current events, for example, using social apps to buy daily necessities.

제안: Answer the question directly (choose one) and explain why with clear grammar and vocabulary. Use linking words like “because” and contrast with “however” correctly. Replace vague words like “assess” with “access.”

예시: I prefer getting information from websites because they are updated very quickly and I can access them anywhere. However, books are still valuable for in-depth study and trustworthiness.

제안: Make a clear, concise statement of intent and give one concrete purpose. Remove hesitations and incorrect verbs (e.g., 'sew' and 'suppress' are wrong). Use correct phrasing like “share my interests” or “pursue my dreams.”

예시: Yes, I would like to have my own website so I can share my hobbies and interests, such as photography and writing. It would also help me showcase my work and pursue my dreams of becoming a content creator.

제안: Be specific about what you learned and use correct nouns and verb forms. Name real websites or resources and give a concrete example of a skill or problem solved. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

예시: I have learned many useful skills from websites like YouTube and online course platforms. For example, I learned basic video editing from tutorial videos, which helped me complete a school project more professionally.

× I often visit educational website, news platform and social media site.

✓ I often visit educational websites, news platforms and social media sites.

Missing plural markers and articles: when listing general types, use plural nouns or include articles. Use plural forms for 'website/platform/site' to indicate categories. Also adding 'the' is unnecessary for general statements.

× Educational website are particularly useful because they help me to improve my English and keep up with in my studies.

✓ Educational websites are particularly useful because they help me improve my English and keep up with my studies.

Subject-verb agreement and extraneous preposition: 'Educational website' should be plural to match 'are'. Remove 'to' after 'help me' (help + base verb), and remove 'with' after 'keep up'—use 'keep up with my studies' (keep up with + noun). Also remove unnecessary 'in'.

× My favorite restaurant you do too because it offers a few varieties of content form education to entertain I It is almost every day to learn new skills and relax in my free time.

✓ My favorite website is [name] because it offers a variety of content, from educational to entertainment. I use it almost every day to learn new skills and relax in my free time.

Incorrect noun 'restaurant' and broken sentence structure: the speaker meant 'website' and needs a linking verb ('is'). 'You do too' is irrelevant and removed. Use 'a variety of content' and correct preposition 'from educational to entertainment'. 'It is almost every day' was rephrased to 'I use it almost every day' to convey intended meaning.

× Many websites are becoming more user friendly and visually appealing.

✓ Many websites are becoming more user-friendly and visually appealing.

Hyphenation and compound adjective: 'user-friendly' as a compound adjective should be hyphenated. Otherwise sentence is correct.

× They are also load factors and more personalized content based on user interest.

✓ They also load faster and provide more personalized content based on user interests.

Wrong words and structure: 'load factors' is incorrect; intended meaning is 'load faster'. Add verb 'provide' for 'more personalized content' and use plural 'user interests' for generalization.

× In Vietnam, social networking site, online shopping platform and entertainment website are extremely popular.

✓ In Vietnam, social networking sites, online shopping platforms and entertainment websites are extremely popular.

When talking about types in general, use plural nouns. Also no articles needed for general statements.

× People use them not only for communications, but also for shopping and staying informed. Uh, current event.

✓ People use them not only for communication, but also for shopping and staying informed about current events.

Use uncountable 'communication' not plural, and add preposition 'about' plus plural 'current events' to convey the idea of following news.

× Yes, I prefer getting information for website because it's it's updates information very fast and quickly so I can easier to, uh assess.

✓ Yes, I prefer getting information from websites because they update information very quickly, so I can more easily access it.

Wrong preposition 'for' should be 'from'. Subject-verb agreement: 'websites' plural with 'they update'. Word order and adjective/adverb use: 'very fast and quickly' is redundant; use 'very quickly'. 'I can easier to assess' is incorrect—use 'I can more easily access it'.

× However, post also bring many of benefits so I can, umm, assess everywhere.

✓ However, printed books also bring many benefits, so I can access information anywhere.

Unclear reference 'post' likely meant 'printed books' or 'posts'; choose 'printed books' for contrast. 'Bring many of benefits' incorrect: 'bring many benefits'. 'Assess' should be 'access', and 'everywhere' changed to 'anywhere'.

× Yes, I like to have it on website because I can, uh, easier to, umm, to sew my favorites, uh, my hobbies and, uh, but and so I can, uh, suppress my dream and I can.

✓ Yes, I would like to have my own website because I can more easily share my favorite things and my hobbies, and I can pursue my dreams.

Many errors: 'have it on website' should be 'have my own website'. 'Easier to sew' wrong words—use 'more easily share'. 'Suppress my dream' is opposite meaning; correct verb is 'pursue my dreams'.

× I learned from websites such as YouTube or Accessibilities.

✓ I have learned from websites such as YouTube and accessibility resources.

Tense and word choice: use present perfect 'have learned' for experience up to now. 'Accessibilities' is incorrect; use 'accessibility resources' or 'accessible content'.

× They support me to learn new skill and help me through problems in other school.

✓ They help me learn new skills and help me work through problems at school.

Verb patterns: 'support me to learn' is unnatural in English; use 'help me learn' or 'support me in learning'. Plural 'skills'. 'Through problems in other school' unclear—use 'work through problems at school'.

× Uh, that's I can, uh, tour so.

✓ They let me explore topics I am interested in.

Unintelligible fragment: rephrase to a clear meaning consistent with context—'They let me explore topics I am interested in.'