Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "a lot of websites" and "often"). Correct small pronunciation/grammar slips ("re realizing" -> "realizing").

예시: I usually visit social media and shopping websites. For example, I use TikTok every day to watch short, funny videos and discover trends, and I also browse online stores for convenient deals and fast delivery.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and provide two distinct, specific reasons linked logically. Avoid filler words like "uh" and finish the idea about the algorithm. Use linking words such as "firstly" and "also" for coherence.

예시: My favourite website is TikTok because it serves two main purposes. First, I relax by watching short, funny clips, and secondly I learn new skills—for example, cooking hacks or language tips—thanks to personalized recommendations.

제안: Provide a structured answer: state the change, explain reasons, and give a concise example. Avoid awkward phrasing ("more shorter", "the personalized, the recommendations"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example" correctly.

예시: Yes. Websites now favour shorter content because people's attention spans are shorter, so platforms prioritize short videos. For example, shopping apps now show personalized video ads that blend social media and e-commerce features.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and use plural/singular correctly. Remove hesitation and give one specific example for each type (social media, shopping). Use linking words such as "because" and "for instance" to connect ideas.

예시: Social media platforms and e-commerce sites are most popular in my country. For instance, many people spend hours on video apps to follow influencers, while online marketplaces are widely used because of fast delivery and convenient online payment.

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition and fillers. Give a clear reasoned statement and one specific example showing convenience or speed. Correct grammar ("websites become" not repeated). Limit to two or three sentences.

예시: I prefer websites because they are faster and more convenient. For example, I can quickly search for recent news, watch tutorial videos, or access study resources online instead of waiting to find the same information in a book.

제안: Avoid self-deprecating language like "computer idiot"; use neutral phrases. Give a brief topic sentence and a supporting reason, and optionally an alternative (e.g., use platforms instead). Keep language natural and grammatically correct.

예시: Not really. I feel creating and maintaining a website requires technical skills and original ideas, which I don't currently have, so I prefer using existing platforms like blogs or social media to share content.

제안: Organize the answer: start with a direct statement, then give one clear specific example and explain the benefit. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases ("lessen my stress and, uh, far of familiar"). Use linking words like "for example" and "as a result".

예시: Websites have helped me study by offering practice exams and interactive lessons. For example, Chinese online learning platforms let me simulate real tests, which improves my skills and reduces my anxiety before exams.

× I often visit a lot of websites.

✓ I often visit many websites.

'A lot of' can be informal and usually followed by 'of' plus a determiner; 'many' is more appropriate before countable plural noun 'websites'. Use 'many websites' for clarity and formality.

× I use Tiktok all the time because I like watching short videos and there are some funny and attractive videos on Tiktok.

✓ I use TikTok all the time because I like watching short videos, and there are some funny and engaging videos on TikTok.

Use commas to join independent clauses with 'and'. 'Attractive' is awkward for videos; 'engaging' or 'entertaining' is clearer. Also use consistent capitalization 'TikTok'.

× Sometimes I open those apps without even re realizing it.

✓ Sometimes I open those apps without even realizing it.

Remove extra fragment 're'. 'Realizing' is the correct -ing form; avoid typos. 'Without even realizing it' is the correct idiomatic phrase.

× I would say Tiktok because I can learn anything on there.

✓ I would say TikTok because I can learn anything there.

Use 'there' without 'on' after 'learn anything'. 'Learn on TikTok' is possible, but 'learn anything there' is more natural. Also capitalization 'TikTok'.

× Sometimes I go on Tiktok to relax and watch funny videos, but other times I use it almost like a search engine to learn a skill or solve a problem and algorithm knows me a little too well, which is kind of uh.

✓ Sometimes I go on TikTok to relax and watch funny videos, but other times I use it almost like a search engine to learn a skill or solve a problem, and the algorithm knows me a little too well, which is kind of...

Insert article 'the' before 'algorithm' because a specific algorithm (TikTok's) is meant. Add comma before 'and' joining clauses. Ellipsis can indicate hesitation; keep it minimal. Capitalize 'TikTok'.

× Yeah, definitely. Nowadays websites are becoming much more shorter in terms of content because everybody's attention span is getting shorter too, and a lot of websites are focusing on short videos and the personalized, the recommendations, for example online shopping and social media are blending together.

✓ Yeah, definitely. Nowadays websites are becoming much shorter in terms of content because everybody's attention span is getting shorter, and a lot of websites are focusing on short videos and personalized recommendations; for example, online shopping and social media are blending together.

Use 'much shorter' not 'much more shorter'. Remove redundant 'the' before 'recommendations'. Use 'personalized recommendations' as a noun phrase. Use semicolon or sentence break to separate the example. Add commas for clarity.

× I would say social media and online shopping website, uh, spend a lot of time on apps where you can watch videos or interact with influencer and shopping websites are also massive because people are used to faster delivery and online payment now.

✓ I would say social media and online shopping websites. I spend a lot of time on apps where you can watch videos or interact with influencers, and shopping websites are also massive because people are used to faster delivery and online payment now.

Use plural 'websites' and 'influencers'. The original run-on sentence needs splitting. 'Interact with influencers' requires plural. Add subject 'I' for the second clause.

× I prefer getting information from websites, uh, because I'm a Gen. Z and uh, websites become, becomes, uh, websites become a part of my life and my habit is completely influenced by social media.

✓ I prefer getting information from websites because I'm Gen Z, and websites have become a part of my life; my habits are completely influenced by social media.

Use 'have become' to indicate change up to present. Remove article 'a' before 'Gen Z'. Use plural 'habits'. Fix verb agreement and redundant hesitations.

× Uh, what's more, web websites are really convenient.

✓ What's more, websites are really convenient.

Remove redundant 'web' before 'websites' and extraneous filler 'Uh'. 'Websites' alone is sufficient.

× Honestly, not really, because I think if you want to have your own website you should have a large reserve of technical knowledge and a kind of interesting and new ideas about websites.

✓ Honestly, not really, because I think if you want to have your own website you should have a substantial amount of technical knowledge and some interesting, new ideas about the site.

'Large reserve' is unnatural; 'substantial amount' is better for uncountable 'knowledge'. 'A kind of interesting and new ideas' mixes countable/uncountable; use 'some interesting, new ideas'. Add 'the' or 'the site' for clarity.

× But I I'm a computer idiot so I can't do that.

✓ But I'm not good with computers, so I can't do that.

Avoid insulting language; 'computer idiot' is informal and ungrammatical. Use negative construction 'not good with computers'. Remove duplicated 'I'.

× Uh, I have learned a lot from websites that helped with my studies.

✓ I have learned a lot from websites that have helped with my studies.

Use present perfect 'have helped' to match 'have learned' and indicate continued relevance. Alternatively, simple past 'helped' could be used if referring to past only.

× For example, uh, I, uh, we have a lot else learning websites in China which help me to practice and imitate real exams.

✓ For example, we have a lot of online learning websites in China which help me practice and simulate real exams.

'A lot else' is incorrect; use 'a lot of online learning websites'. 'Simulate' is better than 'imitate' for exams. Remove excessive fillers and unnecessary 'to' after 'help' when followed by bare infinitive.

× I think this kind of websites help me to lessen my stress and, uh, far of familiar. Dear life.

✓ I think these kinds of websites help me reduce my stress and become more familiar with everyday life.

Use 'these kinds of websites' (plural) or 'this kind of website' (singular). 'Lessen my stress' is acceptable but 'reduce my stress' is more natural. 'Far of familiar. Dear life.' is unclear; likely meant 'become more familiar with daily life' so corrected to 'become more familiar with everyday life'.