Websites— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be natural, specific and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence naming types of sites you visit, then add 1–2 supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague words like “webs” and reduce hesitations.

예시: I often visit video-sharing and news websites. For example, I watch videos on YouTube for entertainment and tutorials, and I visit news sites like BBC to stay updated on current events.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence and then specific supporting examples with linking words. Remove fillers (uh, like) and avoid repeating the site name unnecessarily. Keep to 2–4 sentences max.

예시: My favourite website is YouTube because it offers a wide range of videos. For instance, I use it to watch news clips, gaming streams and music videos, so I can always find content that fits my mood.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear comparison using linking words (for example, however, compared to). Reduce repetition and correct grammar (e.g., “the most obvious change is more advertisements”). Provide a brief example of how ads affect use.

예시: Yes, websites have changed a lot over the years. For example, compared to ten years ago, there are many more advertisements now, which makes pages slower to load and sometimes interrupts videos.

제안: Start with a clear statement about which types of sites are popular, then explain why with specific reasons. Fix grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words like because or as a result.

예시: Social media platforms are very popular in my country, especially a site called Frats. Because users can post anonymously and share opinions freely, it attracts many young people and often becomes a place for trending discussions.

제안: Give a clear preference first, then 2 specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, however). Avoid long, ungrammatical sentences and filler words. Mention one exception where books are better to show balance.

예시: I prefer getting information from websites because they are faster and easier to search. However, for in-depth research or academic references, I still use books because they are more reliable and detailed.

제안: Give a clear yes/no with a reason, then add one supporting detail and a short example. Avoid repetitive phrasing and informal words like “dump” or vague statements. Mention how you would manage privacy if you did create one.

예시: I might like to have my own website because it would let me share my work and ideas. However, I would be careful about privacy by not posting personal details and using strong passwords and privacy settings.

제안: Answer with a clear topic sentence naming what you learned, then give 2 specific examples of how websites or AI tools helped you, using linking words. Correct unclear references (e.g., name the actual tool if possible) and avoid fillers. Explain a concrete result or benefit.

예시: AI websites have helped me improve my study efficiency by summarizing articles and generating practice questions. For example, I use an AI chatbot to explain difficult concepts and create quizzes, which saves me time and improves my understanding.

× I often visit webs, videos, platforms like YouTube.

✓ I often visit websites and platforms like YouTube to watch videos.

The noun 'webs' is incorrect; the correct plural form is 'websites'. Also 'videos' is a separate noun and should be linked properly. Use 'websites' and rephrase to clarify that websites/platforms are visited to watch videos. Use 'websites' (countable) instead of 'webs' and combine phrases for clarity.

× 'My favorite website is YouTube because, uh YouTube could bring me a vast majority of different types of videos.'

✓ 'My favorite website is YouTube because it brings me a wide variety of videos.'

Using 'could bring me' is an odd modal usage and unnecessary here. Replace with simple present 'brings' to express a general truth. 'A vast majority of different types of videos' is wordy; 'a wide variety of videos' is natural.

× So like I can watch news uh, I can watch gaming videos and also I can watch some music videos.

✓ For example, I can watch news, gaming videos, and music videos.

The original is repetitive with multiple 'I can watch' phrases. Streamline into a parallel list. Use 'for example' instead of 'so like' and remove filler words for clearer sentence structure.

× So basically whenever whatever I want could be.

✓ So basically I can find whatever I want.

'Could be' is incorrect here; use modal 'can' and an appropriate verb 'find' to express ability to obtain content. The original is ungrammatical in structure.

× I'm able to do so since I'm I was a child.

✓ I have been able to do so since I was a child.

Mixes present and past incorrectly. Use present perfect 'have been able' with 'since' to indicate an action starting in the past and continuing to the present.

× So I, I, I really know the changes a lot.

✓ So I really know a lot about the changes.

Redundant filler 'I, I, I' and awkward word order. Reorder to place 'a lot' after the verb phrase and use 'know a lot about'.

× The most obvious changes is the advertisement.

✓ The most obvious change is the advertisements.

Subject-verb agreement and count noun mismatch: 'changes' (plural) with 'is' (singular) is wrong. Either make the subject singular 'change' or verb plural 'are'. Also 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' or use 'advertising'.

× They added a lot more advertisement compared to 10 years before.

✓ There are a lot more advertisements now compared to ten years ago.

Passive construction with incorrect tense and preposition. Use 'There are' to introduce existence, plural 'advertisements', and 'ten years ago' is the correct time expression.

× My country the popular website may be frats because it is a trending social media platform in our country and every person could could speak their own speech and anonymously.

✓ In my country, a popular website may be Frats because it is a trending social media platform where people can speak anonymously and share their opinions.

Missing articles and punctuation. Add 'In my country,' and 'a popular website'. Capitalize proper noun 'Frats'. Replace 'could could' with 'can' and 'speak their own speech' with 'speak anonymously and share their opinions' for natural phrasing.

× So that makes it popular.

✓ That makes it popular.

Original is acceptable but remove 'So' for conciseness. No modal issue in corrected sentence; kept for flow.

× I personally prefer getting information from website because I used to search things and that since I was small so I was more skilled and acquire information from websites and using the online engine and personally things that is more efficient to you to get information from websites books requires a certain time for research.

✓ I personally prefer getting information from websites because I have been searching online since I was young, so I am more skilled at finding information using search engines. It is more efficient to get information from websites, while books require more time for research.

Many issues: 'from website' should be 'from websites' (plural), tense errors—use present perfect 'have been searching' for an action from past to present, 'since I was small' -> 'since I was young', 'using the online engine' -> 'using search engines', and sentence run-on requires splitting. Clarify contrast between websites and books.

× I think having a own website is kind of a cool thing, but at the same time you have to be aware of your privacy.

✓ I think having your own website is kind of cool, but at the same time you have to be aware of your privacy.

'a own website' is wrong; use 'your own website' or 'an own website' is not idiomatic. Also remove 'a' before 'cool'.

× It appears it may be leaked out due to your own website setup and you throw your dump your own information into that website.

✓ It may leak out because of how your website is set up or because you upload your personal information to it.

'Leaked out' passive is awkward; use active 'may leak out' or passive 'may be leaked'. 'Due to your own website setup' is awkward; rephrase to 'because of how your website is set up'. 'Throw your dump your own information' is informal and redundant—use 'upload your personal information'.

× I in my opinion AI website could really help my life for studies umm what I frequently use as deep sleep because I I would like to use ChatGPT or Gemini but it's blocked in Hong Kong so I could only use dipstick.

✓ In my opinion, AI websites can really help with my studies. I often use DeepL because I would like to use ChatGPT or Gemini, but they are blocked in Hong Kong, so I can only use DeepL.

Run-on sentence with many errors: 'AI website could' should be 'AI websites can' for general statement, 'help my life for studies' -> 'help with my studies', 'what I frequently use as deep sleep' unclear—assumed 'DeepL' translator; ensure proper nouns capitalized. Use plural 'they are blocked' for multiple services and correct 'could only use' to 'can only use' for present ability.

× Umm how I learned from it is umm he could assist.

✓ What I learned from it is that it can assist me.

Pronoun errors: 'he' is incorrect for a website or AI—use 'it'. Use 'what I learned' not 'how I learned'. Replace 'could' with 'can' to state capability, and add 'me' as the object.