Cars— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Keep answer concise and correct tense, avoid repetition, and add one specific memory or detail to make it more vivid. Use a clear topic sentence, one linking phrase, and a supporting detail. Limit to 3–4 short sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed traveling by car as a child. I rarely got car sick, so I liked sitting by the window and watching the countryside. For example, I remember seeing rice fields and coconut trees on long drives to my grandparents’ town.

제안: Use complete sentences, correct word choice (closed → enclosed), and avoid repetition. Give one clear reason and a brief consequence. Use a linking word for coherence.

예시: I prefer enclosed cars because I can use the air conditioning when it’s hot. Since the Philippines is humid, a well-sealed car keeps the interior cool and comfortable.

제안: Good direct answer. Improve by using more precise vocabulary (e.g., ‘deal with traffic’) and add a brief example or contrast. Keep it to two or three sentences and use a linking word like ‘because’ or ‘so’ appropriately.

예시: I prefer being a passenger because I can relax and avoid dealing with traffic. For example, I can read or listen to music while someone else focuses on driving.

제안: Remove repeated words and keep it natural. Start with a topic sentence, then add a specific detail about music choice or another activity. Use a linking phrase like ‘often’ or ‘typically’.

예시: In a traffic jam, I usually connect my phone to the car’s Bluetooth and play music to pass the time. Often I choose upbeat songs and sing along to stay relaxed.

제안: Complete your sentence and be specific about the effect of color. Use concise explanation and one supporting reason. Avoid repeating phrases and finish your thought.

예시: Yes, I think car colours matter. I prefer light colours because they reflect sunlight, which helps keep the car interior cooler in hot, humid weather.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two concise supporting reasons. Avoid redundant words like ‘of course’ and repeated phrases. Use linking words such as ‘however’ or ‘rather’ for contrast.

예시: I will buy a car in the future, but it doesn’t have to be expensive. I would choose a reliable, fuel-efficient model that fits my needs and daily routine.

× Yes, I enjoy travelling via car as a kid. I was fortunate enough not to experience car sickness so I generally enjoy enjoy sitting at the back by the window and enjoy sightseeing the scenery

✓ Yes, I enjoyed travelling by car as a kid. I was fortunate enough not to experience car sickness, so I generally enjoyed sitting at the back by the window and sightseeing the scenery.

The response refers to past experiences ('as a kid'), so present tense 'enjoy' is incorrect; past tense 'enjoyed' should be used consistently. Also remove the duplicate word 'enjoy' and simplify 'enjoy sightseeing the scenery' to 'sightseeing the scenery' to avoid repetitive verbs. Add a comma before 'so' to join clauses correctly.

× I like cars that are closed mainly because I love blasting the AC and not feel the hot summer wind on my skin because generally in the Philippines it's hot and humid, so battling it with a close

✓ I like cars that are closed, mainly because I love blasting the AC and not feeling the hot summer wind on my skin. Generally in the Philippines it's hot and humid, so I prefer to deal with it in a closed car.

Use the gerund 'feeling' after 'not' when describing an ongoing sensation. The phrase 'battling it with a close' is ungrammatical; replace with 'deal with it in a closed car' and split into two sentences for clarity. Add a comma after the introductory adverb 'Generally'.

× I prefer to be a passenger because I could just relax and be comfortable throughout the ride without the need to tackle the traffic and the incoming cars

✓ I prefer to be a passenger because I can just relax and be comfortable throughout the ride without needing to deal with traffic and oncoming cars.

Use 'can' instead of 'could' to express present ability or preference. Use the gerund 'needing' or the verb 'to deal with' rather than 'the need to tackle'. 'Incoming cars' is unnatural; use 'oncoming cars'.

× Whenever there's a traffic jam, I usually connect my phone to the car Bluetooth speaker so I can just play music and sing along while while passing time in the inside a car and not thinking about traffic at all.

✓ Whenever there's a traffic jam, I usually connect my phone to the car's Bluetooth speaker so I can play music and sing along while passing the time inside the car and not think about the traffic at all.

Remove the duplicate 'while'. Use the possessive 'car's Bluetooth speaker'. Use 'play' (not 'just play' is optional) and 'passing the time' is the correct idiom. 'In the inside a car' is ungrammatical; use 'inside the car'. Use 'not think about the traffic' for parallel structure.

× Yes, I think car colors are important. For instance, I prefer light colored cars because in the Philippines it's very hot and humid so having a light colored car would feel a lot less hot inside the car since it reflects light and the temperature inside the car would be

✓ Yes, I think car colors are important. For instance, I prefer light-colored cars because in the Philippines it's very hot and humid, so a light-colored car feels a lot cooler inside since it reflects light and reduces the interior temperature.

Use present simple 'prefer' and 'feels' when stating general preferences and facts. Hyphenate 'light-colored' as a compound adjective. 'Would feel a lot less hot' is awkward; use 'feels a lot cooler' and complete the sentence by specifying the effect 'reduces the interior temperature'.

× Of course I would definitely buy a car in the future not necessarily expensive but something that would suit my style and my lifestyle and overall a car that is just durable and can get me to places is enough for me.

✓ Of course, I will definitely buy a car in the future — not necessarily an expensive one, but something that suits my style and lifestyle. Overall, a car that is durable and can get me to places is enough for me.

Use 'will' for a definite future intention rather than 'would'. Add articles: 'an expensive one'. Use present simple 'suits' for general statements about what the car should do. Break into shorter sentences for clarity and add commas for natural pauses.