Cars— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be careful with tense and grammar (use past tense consistently), reduce redundancy, and make sentences more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "because" or "and").

예시: Yes, I enjoyed traveling by car as a child because my family often took long drives to the countryside. I especially remember watching rolling hills and bright sunsets through the window, which made those trips feel relaxing and memorable.

제안: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence (state a type or feature you prefer), avoid vague phrasing, and correct grammar. Use one or two specific reasons or features and a linking word to connect them.

예시: I don't have a specific brand in mind, but I prefer comfortable family cars because they offer spacious seats and a smooth ride. For example, I like compact SUVs because they provide good visibility and enough room for luggage.

제안: Give a direct answer and use correct grammar (I didn't have → I don't have / I didn't have when I was younger). Provide a concise reason and one brief supporting detail with a linking word like "because" or "so".

예시: I prefer to be a passenger because I don't have a driver's license. Also, riding as a passenger feels more relaxing since I can rest or enjoy the scenery without concentrating on driving.

제안: Use simpler, clearer phrasing and correct tense. State one or two practical actions you take, with linking words for clarity. Avoid repeating words and be specific about the solutions you try.

예시: When there's a traffic jam, I stay calm and check how long it will take to arrive using my phone. If possible, I use a navigation app to find an alternative route or I listen to music and wait patiently until traffic clears.

제안: Answer directly and use correct grammar; avoid repetition. Give a clear opinion and one specific reason or example, using linking words like "because" or "however."

예시: I don't think car colour is very important because practicality matters more than appearance. For instance, many people choose neutral colours like white or silver because they hide dirt well and are easier to resell.

제안: Be concise and use correct grammar (avoid sentence fragments). State your opinion and give two clear reasons with linking words like "because" and "so."

예시: No, I wouldn't buy an expensive car because I prefer to spend money on experiences and savings. A practical, reliable car is enough for daily needs, so I would choose something affordable and fuel-efficient.

× Yes, when I was a child, I really enjoy travelling by car.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I really enjoyed travelling by car.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Change 'enjoy' to past tense 'enjoyed' to match the time frame and maintain tense consistency.

× This would let me feel a sense of comfortable.

✓ This would let me feel comfortable.

'Comfortable' is an adjective and does not require the noun 'sense of'. 'A sense of comfortable' is ungrammatical. Use 'feel comfortable' or 'have a sense of comfort'. Also keep modality consistent: 'would let me' is acceptable in this context.

× Moreover, on the way I can see a lot of stunning scenery and it is a unforgettable memory during my childhood.

✓ Moreover, on the way I could see a lot of stunning scenery, and it was an unforgettable memory from my childhood.

Mixed tenses and incorrect article: when describing past experiences, use past tense verbs: 'can see' -> 'could see', 'is' -> 'was'. Also use 'an unforgettable memory' (article 'an') and 'from my childhood' is more natural than 'during my childhood' in this context.

× Well, I didn't have a this specific type of car that I really like.

✓ Well, I didn't have a specific type of car that I really liked.

Incorrect use of articles: 'a this' is wrong; use either 'a' or 'this'. Also maintain past tense 'liked' to match 'didn't have' and refer to past preference.

× For me the car that I says will let me feel a sense of comfortable and this would be a great car.

✓ For me, the car that I say will let me feel comfortable would be a great car.

Pronoun and verb form errors: 'says' is incorrect for the speaker; use 'say'. 'A sense of comfortable' is incorrect; use 'feel comfortable'. Also tighten sentence structure and remove redundant 'this'.

× Well, for me, I would prefer to be a passenger because I didn't have a driver license.

✓ Well, for me, I would prefer to be a passenger because I don't have a driver's license.

Tense and noun phrase: 'didn't have' implies past, but preference is present so use present 'don't have'. Also use possessive form 'driver's license'.

× Moreover, sitting on the car and no need to drive will let me feel a sense of comfortable.

✓ Moreover, sitting in the car and not having to drive makes me feel comfortable.

Use correct preposition 'in the car' rather than 'on the car'. 'No need to drive' should be expressed as 'not having to drive'. 'Makes me feel comfortable' is natural and grammatically correct.

× When I met the situation of traffic congestion, I would calm down myself and and think I will have how much time that I can arrive the destination and try to find some solutions or even just wait for the police to tackle.

✓ When I encounter a traffic jam, I calm myself down and estimate how long it will take me to reach my destination, and I try to find solutions or sometimes wait for the police to handle it.

The original mixes tenses and has awkward phrasing. Use simple present 'encounter' for general habits or 'When I met' -> 'When I encounter'. 'Calm down myself' should be 'calm myself down'. 'Think I will have how much time that I can arrive the destination' is ungrammatical; use 'estimate how long it will take me to reach my destination'. 'Police to tackle' -> 'police to handle it'.

× From my perspective car car colors didn't very important.

✓ From my perspective, car colors aren't very important.

Tense inconsistency and duplication: 'car car' is duplicated. Use present tense 'aren't' for general opinion. 'Didn't very important' is ungrammatical; correct to 'aren't very important'.

× It just cars color that is comfortable and the driver or their family members they like and it is the most appropriate.

✓ It's just the car color that is comfortable and that the driver or their family members like, so it is the most appropriate.

Grammar and word order: use 'the car color' or better 'the color of the car'. Avoid repeating subject 'they'. Use relative clauses correctly: 'that the driver or their family members like'.

× No, I would not buy an expensive car because I think no need to cost too much on the car.

✓ No, I would not buy an expensive car because I think there is no need to spend too much on a car.

Unnatural phrasing and missing subject: add 'there is' and use 'spend' instead of 'cost'. Use 'a car' as general reference.

× It's just a transportation tools and this can help you to arrive your destination or even help you to tackle some of your daily lives problems and.

✓ It's just a means of transportation and it can help you get to your destination or even help you handle some of your daily life problems.

Plural/singular and article issues: 'a transportation tools' should be 'a means of transportation' or 'transportation' without 'a'. 'Arrive your destination' -> 'get to your destination'. 'Daily lives problems' -> 'daily life problems'. Remove trailing 'and' and use concise phrasing.