Cars— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors; use a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and keep within 3–4 sentences. For example, correct plural/singular mistakes and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I loved traveling by car as a child. My father, who was an army officer, would drive long distances to visit us during holidays, and those trips created many cherished memories. I especially remember stopping at small roadside cafes and playing games during the journey.

제안: Fix grammar and word choice, make the answer shorter and clearer: start with a topic sentence naming preferred features, then add one specific reason. Replace incorrect words (e.g., 'commodit', 'as big', 'contain') and avoid repetition.

예시: I prefer spacious cars with a sleek design. For example, I recently bought an SUV because it comfortably fits my family and our luggage on long trips.

제안: Use correct grammar and smooth linking; begin with a clear topic sentence then give specific reasons and one brief example. Avoid awkward or irrelevant details (e.g., 'play with my hairs') or rephrase them more naturally.

예시: I prefer being a passenger because other people's driving makes me anxious. As a passenger I can relax, look out the window, and enjoy the scenery; for instance, I often chat with friends or listen to music while we travel.

제안: Good structure and relevant details; correct small errors and use linking words for coherence. Remove articles where not needed and avoid saying both redundant actions; pick one or two typical activities with a brief reason.

예시: I usually wait for the traffic to clear and check my phone for messages. If I put my phone away, I listen to music or people-watch to pass the time and stay alert for any updates.

제안: Avoid overgeneralisation and implausible suggestions (like government enforcing colours). Improve grammar, use precise language, and give one clear reason with supporting evidence. Use linking words and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I think car colour matters for safety. For instance, studies show white cars are more visible in fog and low light, which can reduce accidents; however, I wouldn't expect governments to restrict colours beyond safety guidelines.

제안: Answer is clear and relevant; fix small errors and be slightly more specific about priorities (e.g., which features matter most). Use linking words to show sequence (plan, reason, choice).

예시: Yes, I plan to buy a luxury car in the future. I'm saving now and researching models, focusing on reliability, advanced driver-assistance systems, and safety features, because those priorities matter most to me.

× Yes, I enjoyed car ride a lot as a child, especially when my father, who was an Army officer, came to visit us during the holidays.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed car rides a lot as a child, especially when my father, who was an Army officer, came to visit us during the holidays.

The noun 'ride' should be plural 'rides' because the speaker refers to repeated instances in childhood. Use plural for countable nouns when referring to multiple occurrences. Suggestion: use 'car rides' when talking about repeated experiences. ID:1

× We loved driving long distance with him and I still have many cherished memory of those trips.

✓ We loved driving long distances with him and I still have many cherished memories of those trips.

'Long distance' should be pluralized to 'long distances' when referring to repeated journeys. 'Memory' should be plural 'memories' because 'many' requires a plural noun. Suggestion: match plural quantifiers ('many') with plural nouns and pluralize nouns that denote multiple events. ID:1

× I like only those cars which are spacious enough and have sleek design and moreover, the car should be as big so that it can not only commodit my family but also have enough space to contain the luggage.

✓ I like only those cars which are spacious enough and have a sleek design; moreover, the car should be big enough so that it can not only accommodate my family but also have enough space for the luggage.

Multiple article and word choice issues: add 'a' before 'sleek design' because singular countable noun needs an article. Word order 'big enough' is standard. 'Commodit' is wrong form; correct verb is 'accommodate'. Use 'space for the luggage' or 'space for luggage'. Suggestion: include articles for singular countable nouns and use correct verbs ('accommodate') and typical adjective order ('big enough'). ID:22

× That's why I recently bought SUV.

✓ That's why I recently bought an SUV.

Before acronyms starting with a vowel sound like 'S-U-V' spoken 'ess' you need the indefinite article 'an'. Suggestion: use 'an SUV' or 'a sport utility vehicle' depending on formality. ID:22

× I prefer to be a passenger because other people's driving make me anxious.

✓ I prefer to be a passenger because other people's driving makes me anxious.

Subject 'other people's driving' is singular (the driving) so the verb must be third person singular 'makes'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement: singular subject needs singular verb ending in -s. ID:2

× I like to relax and look out of window and enjoy the passing scenery.

✓ I like to relax and look out of the window and enjoy the passing scenery.

English requires the definite article 'the' before 'window' when referring to a specific window (the one in the car). Suggestion: use 'the window' in this context. ID:22

× Sometimes let my friends play with my hairs while we chat.

✓ Sometimes I let my friends play with my hair while we chat.

'Let' needs a subject: add 'I'. 'Hairs' is incorrect in this context; 'hair' is an uncountable noun when referring to the hair on one's head. Suggestion: include explicit subject and use 'hair' not 'hairs'. ID:12

× If I'm not on my phone, I either listen to a music or observe the people around me to pass the time and stay alert for any changes.

✓ If I'm not on my phone, I either listen to music or observe the people around me to pass the time and stay alert for any changes.

'A music' is incorrect because 'music' is an uncountable noun and does not take the indefinite article 'a'. Suggestion: use 'listen to music' or specify a countable item (e.g., 'a song'). ID:22

× If I'm not on my phone, I either listen to a music or observe the people around me to pass the time and stay alert for any changes.

✓ If I'm not on my phone, I either listen to music or observe the people around me to pass the time and stay alert for any changes.

Also 'people' is fine but left unchanged. Main issue was 'a music' pluralization/uncountable. Use uncountable nouns without 'a'. ID:1

× Definitely car colours are highly important.

✓ Definitely car colours are very important.

'Highly important' is not natural collocation; use 'very important'. Also consider article: 'Car colours' is acceptable plural but more natural 'Car colours are important.' Suggestion: use natural collocations ('very important') and include articles if referring to specific cars. ID:1

× Just recently I heard a study about car colour that white coloured car are more visible on crowded road as well as in foggy weather.

✓ Just recently I heard of a study about car colour that white-coloured cars are more visible on crowded roads as well as in foggy weather.

Pluralize 'car' to 'cars' because the statement generalizes about cars. 'Road' should be plural 'roads'. Use 'heard of a study' and hyphenate 'white-coloured' or 'white-colour cars/white cars'. Suggestion: pluralize when generalizing and use correct preposition 'heard of'. ID:1

× Just recently I heard a study about car colour that white coloured car are more visible on crowded road as well as in foggy weather.

✓ Just recently I heard of a study about car colour that white-coloured cars are more visible on crowded roads as well as in foggy weather.

'Heard of' is the correct verb-preposition collocation; 'on crowded road' should be 'on crowded roads' or 'in crowded traffic'. Suggestion: use 'heard of' and pluralize nouns when generalizing. ID:11

× So there should be safety and security while choosing a car.

✓ So safety and security should be considered when choosing a car.

'There should be safety and security' is awkward and unclear. Better to use active construction 'should be considered' and place subject before verb. Suggestion: use clearer subject-verb structure: 'Safety and security should be considered.' ID:12

× Moreover, government should decide which car colour should be allowed on a road so that they keep it keep its citizens.

✓ Moreover, the government should decide which car colours should be allowed on the road so that they can keep their citizens safe.

Missing article 'the' before 'government'. 'Car colour' should be plural 'car colours' when regulating generally. 'On a road' should be 'on the road' or 'on roads'. Pronoun reference 'they keep it keep its citizens' is incorrect; 'they can keep their citizens safe' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: add articles and ensure pronoun agreement and clear phrasing. ID:12

× I'm saving and working hard now so I can afford 1 and I have researched several luxury models for their safety and secure features.

✓ I'm saving and working hard now so I can afford one, and I have researched several luxury models for their safety and security features.

The numeral '1' should be written 'one' in normal prose. 'Secure features' is incorrect collocation; use 'security features'. Suggestion: write numbers as words in speech and use correct noun forms ('security features'). ID:7

× I would choose a brand known for reliability and advanced driver assistance.

✓ I would choose a brand known for reliability and advanced driver-assistance systems.

'Driver assistance' as a modifier is better expressed as 'driver-assistance systems' or 'advanced driver assistance features'. Suggestion: use the standard term 'driver-assistance systems' or 'driver-assistance features' for clarity. ID:13