Cars— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify meaning and correct errors; give a clear topic sentence then 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases (e.g. “couldn't have fought 1,” “share with the relative”). Use linking words for coherence (for example, “because,” “so,” “also”). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed traveling by car when I was a child. Because my hometown was small, we often shared a car with relatives when we needed to visit the city. I liked looking at the countryside and talking with my parents during the journey, which made trips feel relaxed and fun.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the car type, then explain 1–2 reasons with correct vocabulary. Avoid unintelligible words (“FIFA”, “racist ceiling”); use accurate terms like “sunroof” or “high roof”. Keep sentences short and coherent using linking words such as “because” or “and”.

예시: I prefer SUVs because they are spacious and comfortable for long trips. For example, their high roof and large seats give passengers more legroom, and the better visibility makes driving easier in traffic.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then add 1–2 contrasting details using linking words like “however” or “but”. Correct grammar (e.g. “sometimes”, “being in control helps me”). Keep it concise and natural.

예시: I usually prefer to be a passenger because on long drives I can listen to music and enjoy the countryside. However, I sometimes like to drive when I feel stressed, because being in control helps me clear my mind.

제안: Provide a clear, direct answer and two realistic actions. Fix word choices and grammar (“driving aggressively,” “dangerous,” “get impatient”). Use linking words like “so” or “then.” Avoid unclear phrases like “being white” or “dentist.”

예시: I usually stay calm and avoid driving aggressively when there is a traffic jam, because that can be dangerous. So I listen to music or a podcast to stay relaxed and pass the time until the traffic clears.

제안: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons with correct vocabulary (“car”, “affect”). Use linking words like “because” and “for example.” Be concise and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I think car colour is important because it can affect our mood and practicality. For example, I prefer black or white since they look stylish and are easier to keep looking clean; white is also more visible at night, which can improve safety.

제안: Give a direct answer, then explain 1–2 reasons clearly. Correct vocabulary and phrasing (“financially comfortable,” brand name spelled correctly, tie reasons to consequences). Use linking words like “because” and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to buy an expensive car in the future when I am financially comfortable. I would choose a premium SUV, such as a BMW, because they have powerful engines and elegant designs, which would make me feel confident when driving to work or going out.

× Yes, I did enjoy traveling by car when I was younger.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed traveling by car when I was younger.

Using 'did enjoy' in a positive past simple sentence is unnecessary and can sound emphatic; the simple past 'enjoyed' is more natural for a regular statement about the past.

× Back in my hometown we couldn't have fought 1 so we often share with the relative when we need to travel to a city.

✓ Back in my hometown we didn't have a car, so we often shared with relatives when we needed to travel to a city.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'couldn't have fought 1' is unintelligible and likely a transcription error; 'share with the relative' should be plural 'shared with relatives'; tense must be past: 'needed'. Use negative past simple 'didn't have' for possession in the past.

× And I like looking at the countryside and talking with my parents during the journey.

✓ I liked looking at the countryside and talking with my parents during the journeys.

The question refers to childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past: 'liked' and 'journeys' (or 'the journey') to match habitual past actions.

× FIFA for example, SUVs because they're spacious and very comfortable for a long ride or shopping because the racist ceiling give a better view for the driver and also big roomy seat will make the drivers and the passengers feel comfortable and relaxed for long ride.

✓ For example, I like SUVs because they're spacious and comfortable for a long ride or shopping; the raised ceiling gives the driver a better view, and large, roomy seats make drivers and passengers comfortable on long journeys.

Fixed several issues: start with 'For example'; 'racist ceiling' is wrong — likely 'raised ceiling'; subject-verb agreement: 'ceiling gives'; plural agreement: 'seats make'; articles and plurality adjusted; 'long ride' -> 'long journeys' for consistency.

× I prefer to be a passenger all the time because on the long drive I can listen to the music and enjoy the distinctive view of the countryside.

✓ I prefer to be a passenger most of the time because on long drives I can listen to music and enjoy the distinctive countryside views.

'All the time' is too absolute; 'most of the time' is more natural. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'music'; pluralize 'drives' and 'views' for habitual actions.

× Sometime I can think about life and other things.

✓ Sometimes I think about life and other things.

Use 'Sometimes' (adverb) and present simple 'think' to describe habitual preference as passenger; 'can' is unnecessary here.

× However, sometimes I like to drive especially when I feel stressed because in being in control help me clear my mind.

✓ However, sometimes I like to drive, especially when I feel stressed, because being in control helps me clear my mind.

Remove extra 'in'; subject-verb agreement: 'being in control helps' needs third-person singular 'helps'; punctuation improved.

× I usually wait patiently for the green light to come or when the traffic slowed out because I avoid driving arrestedly because I know that could be dentist for me and other drivers.

✓ I usually wait patiently for the green light or when traffic slows down, because I avoid driving recklessly; I know that could be dangerous for me and other drivers.

Correct verb forms: 'slows down' present simple for habitual action; 'driving arrestedly' is incorrect — use 'recklessly'; 'could be dentist' is wrong — use 'dangerous'.

× So I often listen to music or a podcast just to keep my mind away from being white.

✓ So I often listen to music or a podcast just to take my mind off things.

'Keep my mind away from being white' is nonsensical; idiomatic expression is 'take my mind off things'.

× I think cars colour is important because we use cat every day, the colour affect our mood and also the practicality.

✓ I think car color is important because we use cars every day; the color affects our mood and also matters for practicality.

Grammar fixes: 'cars colour' -> 'car color' (singular noun as adjective), 'cat' -> 'cars', subject-verb agreement 'affects', and clarify 'matters for practicality'.

× I personally prefer black or white because they look stylish and are easier to keep looking clean and visible at night which can be safer.

✓ I personally prefer black or white because they look stylish, are easier to keep clean, and are more visible at night, which can be safer.

Streamline phrasing: 'keep looking clean' -> 'keep clean'; add commas and parallel structure; 'visible at night' may improve safety.

× Yes I will definitely.

✓ Yes, I definitely will.

Add comma and natural word order; both forms are acceptable, but 'I definitely will' sounds more natural in this short response.

× When I have a financial favorability I like to buy an SUV and I would choose ABMWI prefer this brand because they have powerful engines and elegant designs so car will look stylish and I will feel confident every time I drive to work or shopping or eating out.

✓ When I am financially well-off, I would like to buy an SUV and I would choose BMW. I prefer this brand because they have powerful engines and elegant designs, so the car would look stylish and I would feel confident every time I drive to work, go shopping, or eat out.

Multiple fixes: 'financial favorability' -> 'financially well-off'; 'I like to buy' -> 'I would like to buy' for hypothetical future; brand 'ABMWI' corrected to 'BMW'; add article 'the car'; parallel verbs 'drive to work, go shopping, or eat out'; conditional mood consistent with 'would'.