Watch— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense/word choice, and avoid redundancy. Use one or two linking words to add a brief reason or contrast. Also limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually wear a watch. When I dress up for formal events I choose an analog watch, but on busy days I prefer a digital watch because it’s quicker to glance at than taking out my phone.

제안: Use correct verb forms and eliminate fillers. Give a concise topic sentence, then briefly explain context with a linking word (e.g., because or so). Be specific about timing and reason.

예시: Yes. My mother gave me a smartwatch for my birthday when I was a university freshman because smartwatches had become popular among students.

제안: Be more precise and avoid vague phrasing. Use clearer comparative grammar and linking phrases (e.g., firstly/secondly or moreover). Provide specific reasons with short explanations rather than tentative language like “might.”

예시: There are a few reasons. Firstly, high-quality watches are more durable and reliable than cheaper models. Secondly, luxury watches can signal social status or professional success, so some people buy them to make a good impression.

제안: Open with a clear stance (yes/no/it depends). Remove fillers and improve coherence by using linking words (for example, in addition). Give two concise, specific reasons and avoid trailing words like “yeah.”

예시: It depends, but I think wearing a watch can be important in certain situations. For example, during exams or formal meetings you may not be allowed or it may be impolite to check your phone, so a watch helps you keep track of time and also presents a more professional image.

× Yes I do someday.

✓ Yes, I do sometimes.

'Someday' refers to an indefinite time in the future and is incorrect here. The student means 'sometimes' to indicate occasional action in the present. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural speech punctuation. Suggestion: use 'sometimes' for habitual frequency and place adverbs of frequency before the main verb or after auxiliary verbs (I sometimes wear... / I do sometimes).

× I wear one of my analog watches when I am dressed up and the other days I wear an electronic one on busy days when I don't have enough time to check my phone easily.

✓ I wear one of my analog watches when I dress up, and on other days I wear an electronic one when I don't have enough time to check my phone.

Mixed and awkward tense: 'when I am dressed up' is passive-like and unnecessary; use simple present 'when I dress up' for habitual actions. 'the other days' should be 'on other days'. 'on busy days when I don't have enough time to check my phone easily' is repetitive; simplify to 'when I don't have enough time to check my phone.' Suggestion: keep habitual actions in simple present and streamline redundant phrases.

× Yes, the smart watch I've got was a gift from my mom when I was a freshman.

✓ Yes, the smartwatch I got was a gift from my mom when I was a freshman.

Mixing present perfect ('I've got') and simple past in the same clause with a past time expression ('when I was a freshman') is incorrect; use simple past 'I got'. Also 'smart watch' is commonly one word 'smartwatch'.

× It was kind of a a trend among university students to get 1, so I told that to my mom and she got it for my birthday gift.

✓ It was kind of a trend among university students to get one, so I told my mom and she got it for my birthday.

Remove duplicated 'a'. Use 'one' instead of '1' in writing. 'told that to my mom' is awkward; say 'told my mom'. 'got it for my birthday gift' is redundant; 'got it for my birthday' is natural. Keep conjunction 'so' but ensure clear clauses.

× Well, I think there might be several reasons.

✓ Well, I think there may be several reasons.

'might' is not wrong but 'may' fits better when stating possible explanations; both are acceptable. This is a mild stylistic choice; use 'may' when presenting likely reasons. (This sentence can be accepted as is.)

× Firstly, expensive ones tend not to break a lot than the cheaper ones.

✓ Firstly, expensive ones tend not to break as often as the cheaper ones.

Compare frequency; use 'as often as' for comparisons. 'break a lot than' is ungrammatical. Alternatively: 'are less likely to break than cheaper ones.'

× Secondly, the luxury ones kind of show the status of people who are wearing those so.

✓ Secondly, luxury watches tend to show the status of the people who wear them.

'the luxury ones' -> 'luxury watches' is clearer. 'kind of' is informal; replace with 'tend to'. 'people who are wearing those' is wordy; use 'people who wear them'. Remove trailing 'so'.

× But there are some specific occasions that wearing a watch is important, for example, if you have to take exams or if you are on an important appointment so you can't check your phone.

✓ There are some specific occasions when wearing a watch is important; for example, if you have to take exams or if you have an important appointment and cannot check your phone.

Avoid starting with 'But' in formal answers. Use 'occasions when' not 'that'. 'on an important appointment' is wrong; say 'have an important appointment'. Replace 'so you can't' with 'and cannot' to show consequence. Use semicolon or period to separate clauses.

× Wearing one might help you to check time or just make a good impression on other people.

✓ Wearing one might help you check the time or make a good impression on other people.

Use 'check the time' (include article) and remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help' when followed by a verb. Keep 'might' for possibility; sentence is otherwise fine.

× Yeah.

✓ Yes.

'Yeah' is informal spoken English; 'Yes' is more appropriate in a test context. Replace informal discourse markers with formal equivalents.'