Watch— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. Also limit to 3–4 sentences and use appropriate articles and verb tenses.

예시: I don't wear a watch very often. However, I like to wear a digital watch my brother gave me for special occasions such as weddings or birthdays. For example, I wore it last weekend to an engagement party because it matched my outfit and felt more formal.

제안: Improve grammar, cohesion and specificity. Use complete sentences, correct tense and linking words. Describe features clearly and avoid fragmented sentences. Keep answers focused and natural.

예시: Yes, I received a watch from my brother for my last birthday. It has a rectangular dial and a leather strap, which I really like. In addition, it has useful features such as a heart-rate monitor and a step counter, so I wear it for both style and fitness tracking.

제안: Make your opinion more developed and use linking words to explain reasons. Avoid hesitations and vague phrasing; give one or two clear reasons with examples. Use plural/singular forms correctly.

예시: I think some people buy expensive watches to show status and success. Moreover, luxury watches can be seen as investments or collectibles, so wearing one can signal wealth and good taste.

제안: Organize answer into past vs present with clear linking words. Use correct grammar and complete your final thought. Be concise and give a specific example comparing watches and phones for telling time and convenience.

예시: Wearing a watch was more important in the past because people relied on it to check the time while traveling. However, nowadays most people use smartphones or smart devices to tell the time, so watches are less essential for timekeeping and are often worn mainly for fashion or convenience.

× I don't wear watch quite often, but whenever I go to any occasion such as wedding or birthday, I prefer to wear my digital watch gifted by my brother.

✓ I don't wear a watch quite often, but whenever I go to an occasion such as a wedding or birthday, I prefer to wear the digital watch my brother gifted me.

Missing indefinite articles before singular countable nouns: 'watch' -> 'a watch', 'wedding'/'birthday' as singular events need 'a'. Also improved word order for natural English ('the digital watch my brother gifted me'). Use articles with countable nouns and follow typical English word order.

× For example, last weekend when I go on an engagement party, I wore the watch so that I can.

✓ For example, last weekend when I went to an engagement party, I wore the watch so that I could.

Tense inconsistency: 'last weekend' requires past tense 'went' not 'go'. Modal consistency: 'so that I can' should be in past form 'so that I could' to match the past context. Use past simple for completed past events.

× Yes definitely. I got watch as a gift from my brother on my last birthday.

✓ Yes, definitely. I got a watch as a gift from my brother on my last birthday.

Missing indefinite article before singular countable noun 'watch' -> 'a watch'. Also add comma after interjection 'Yes'.

× He gifted me a watch with a rectangular dial and leather strap and I love to wear that watch.

✓ He gifted me a watch with a rectangular dial and a leather strap, and I love wearing it.

Missing article before 'leather strap' -> 'a leather strap'. Use concise pronoun 'it' instead of repeating 'that watch', and use 'love wearing' (gerund) for natural expression.

× It also help.

✓ It also helps.

Missing third person singular present tense '-s'. Subject 'It' requires 'helps'. Ensure verb agrees with subject in present simple.

× It also has various apps such as heart rate checker check.

✓ It also has various apps, such as a heart rate checker.

Unnatural repetition and missing article: 'heart rate checker' needs 'a'. Remove redundant 'check'. Use comma before 'such as' for clarity.

× I think people usually wear expensive watch so that they can flaunt in front of others that they are wearing, uh, very high brands.

✓ I think people usually wear expensive watches so that they can flaunt to others that they are wearing high-end brands.

Countable noun should be plural 'watches'. Phrase 'flaunt in front of others' is unnatural; use 'flaunt to others'. 'Very high brands' is awkward; 'high-end brands' is a natural collocation.

× Yes, I think it is important in wearing a watch in the past because at that time whenever we have to travel from one place to another and we have to get in touch with time, we really have to use that.

✓ Yes, I think it used to be important to wear a watch, because in the past when we had to travel from one place to another and keep track of the time, we really needed it.

Awkward phrasing and tense issues: 'important in wearing a watch in the past' -> 'used to be important to wear a watch'. Change present 'have to travel' to past 'had to travel' and replace 'get in touch with time' with 'keep track of the time'. 'Use that' -> 'needed it'. Maintain consistent past reference.

× But nowadays with the advancement of technology, there are different type of things such as cell phones, headphones with a clock, so that whenever we.

✓ But nowadays, with the advancement of technology, there are different types of devices such as cell phones and smartwatches, so we no longer need them.

Number agreement: 'different type' should be 'different types'. 'Headphones with a clock' is odd; 'smartwatches' is more accurate. Sentence was incomplete; completed idea 'so we no longer need them.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and choose appropriate vocabulary.