Watch— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct basic grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct pronouns and verb forms, and avoid repetition. Use one or two supporting reasons linked by a connector. For example, say you use your phone to check the time and mention fashion or practicality as a brief reason.

예시: No, I don't wear a watch. I usually check the time on my phone because it's more convenient, and many people wear watches mainly as a fashion accessory rather than for practical reasons.

제안: Improve accuracy and clarity: use correct tense and natural expressions, avoid awkward phrases like "I was over more". Provide one or two specific supporting details (how you used it or why you cherished it) linked by words like "because" or "so".

예시: Yes. When I was in middle school a friend gave me a pink digital watch for my birthday. I was really excited because it cost about $60, which was a lot for a child, so I treasured it and wore it every day.

제안: Use natural idioms correctly and avoid mixed metaphors. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words like "because" or "for example." Avoid awkward phrases such as "under my cup of tea"—use "not my cup of tea" instead.

예시: I think expensive watches are often worn as status symbols because they signal wealth and success; for example, business leaders and celebrities wear luxury brands to convey prestige, but that's not something I'm interested in.

제안: Good clear opinion with reason. Improve by tightening language, correcting small errors, and adding a brief contrasting point or example. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to show cause and support.

예시: No, I don't think it's important because people now use their phones to check the time. For example, I always use my smartphone for alarms and schedules, so a separate wristwatch feels unnecessary to me.

× No I don't wear or watch.

✓ No, I don't wear a watch.

The original sentence has a pronoun/word misuse: 'or' is incorrect and causes the sentence to lack the noun 'a watch'. Correct sentence inserts the article 'a' and removes the stray 'or'. Suggestion: include the correct noun phrase 'a watch' after 'wear' and use commas for clarity.

× I always use my to check the time and I don't feel like there is any need to will watch.

✓ I always use my phone to check the time and I don't feel there is any need for a watch.

Missing noun after 'my' and incorrect modal and noun phrases: 'will watch' is ungrammatical. Replace 'my' with 'my phone' and use 'there is no need for a watch' or 'I don't feel there is any need for a watch'. Suggestion: ensure nouns follow possessive pronouns and avoid doubling modals/verbs.

× But I have noticed that sometimes people will watch it for fashion but it's just not what I do.

✓ But I have noticed that sometimes people wear watches for fashion, but it's just not what I do.

The phrase 'will watch it' is incorrect: 'will' plus base verb implies future habit, and 'watch' is wrong noun/verb choice. Use present simple 'wear' to describe habitual action and the plural 'watches' as the object. Suggestion: use 'wear watches' for general habitual behavior.

× But if in the future I have enough savings I might get an Apple Watch.

✓ But if in the future I have enough savings, I might get an Apple Watch.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable but needs a comma after the conditional clause for clarity. Tense and modal 'might' are appropriate. Suggestion: add a comma after the introductory conditional clause.

× Yes, I got one where I was in middle school.

✓ Yes, I got one when I was in middle school.

The word 'where' is incorrect in this temporal context; use 'when' to refer to time. Suggestion: use 'when I was in middle school' to indicate time of event.

× My friend bought me a pink digital watch as a birthday gift for me.

✓ My friend bought me a pink digital watch as a birthday gift.

The phrase ends with redundant pronoun 'for me' because 'bought me' already indicates beneficiary. Remove the redundancy. Suggestion: avoid repeating the indirect object.

× I was over more when I received it and I remember it cost her about $60.00 at that time.

✓ I was so happy when I received it, and I remember it cost about $60.00 at that time.

'I was over more' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended 'I was so happy' or 'I was overjoyed'. Also 'cost her' is incorrect because the subject paid for the gift; use 'it cost about $60' or 'she paid about $60'. Suggestion: use clear adjective ('overjoyed') and correct agent for the cost.

× Actually it was a lot of money for a kid so I really cherished it.

✓ Actually, it was a lot of money for a kid, so I really cherished it.

Grammatically correct sentence needing commas for clarity. Tense and word choice are appropriate. Suggestion: add commas after introductory 'Actually' and before conjunction 'so'.

× Well, I guess expensive watches can be a symbol of wealth and social status, and I have noticed that a lot of businesses and celebrities tend to wear luxury watches to show their status.

✓ Well, I guess expensive watches can be a symbol of wealth and social status, and I have noticed that many businessmen and celebrities tend to wear luxury watches to show their status.

'A lot of businesses' is incorrect when referring to people; use 'businessmen' or 'business people'. 'A lot of' can be replaced with 'many'. Suggestion: choose the correct noun for people (businessmen/business people) rather than 'businesses' which means companies.

× But to be honest, it's just too far from my life and I don't want to be one of them expensive watches under my cup of tea.

✓ But to be honest, it's just too far from my life, and I don't want expensive watches; they are not my cup of tea.

Original mixes metaphors and misuses pronouns and determiners ('one of them expensive watches under my cup of tea' is ungrammatical). Use clear expression: 'not my cup of tea' and separate clauses. Suggestion: avoid mixing idioms and ensure subject and determiner agreement.

× No, I don't think it's important because back in old days people relied on watches to tell them time and to be punctual, but nowadays most people use their phones to check the time, so I don't think it's important.

✓ No, I don't think it's important because in the old days people relied on watches to tell the time and to be punctual, but nowadays most people use their phones to check the time, so I don't think it's important.

Use 'in the old days' instead of 'back in old days'; add 'the' before 'time' in 'tell the time'. The rest is acceptable though repetitive. Suggestion: use standard phrase 'in the old days' and 'tell the time' for natural English.