Swimming— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct basic grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct verb forms and linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. saying you like swimming twice) and keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoy swimming. I learned to swim as a child at a large village pool with my cousins, so it became a fun family activity. Because of that, I still swim regularly for exercise and relaxation.

제안: Answer directly and use clearer grammar and linking words. Give a short opinion followed by a specific reason and an example. Use correct verb tenses and avoid unclear phrases like 'I fight' or 'jointly learned'.

예시: It can be difficult to learn to swim at first because you need to master breathing and floating. For example, I struggled with floating in my first lessons, but after practicing regularly I improved within a few weeks.

제안: Be confident and specific. If unsure, give a general but plausible answer and support it with examples and linking words. Correct unclear words ('puppy') and avoid hedging too much. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Many people in my country swim at private facilities such as condominium pools, since public pools are limited. Others go to sports centres or natural sites like rivers and beaches when they can.

제안: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and two specific contrasting points using linking words (e.g. 'first' and 'second'). Mention safety or physical differences as well as scenery. Use correct sentence structure and vocabulary.

예시: Swimming in the sea differs from pool swimming in two main ways. First, the sea offers natural scenery and waves, which can be more enjoyable but unpredictable; second, pools are calmer and safer for practising strokes and timing because of their controlled conditions.

× Since I was young I used to swimming with my cousins at my village because there is one big swimming pool in my village.

✓ Since I was young I used to swim with my cousins in my village because there is a big swimming pool there.

Used 'used to' requires base verb, not verb+ing. Also preposition 'at my village' is incorrect; use 'in my village'. 'There is one big' is unnatural; 'a big' or 'there is a big' is preferred. Suggestion: Use 'used to swim' for past habitual actions and 'in my village' for location.

× So I really enjoy playing and swimming with my cousin.

✓ So I really enjoy playing and swimming with my cousins.

The student previously mentioned 'cousins' plural, so singular 'my cousin' is inconsistent. Use plural 'my cousins' to match context. Ensure pronouns/nouns remain consistent across sentences.

× So what time I remembered that I jointly learned swim class, I fight it's quite not easy if I find difficult at first time.

✓ When I remember joining a swim class, I felt it was quite difficult at first.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and wrong lexical forms: 'what time' should be 'when', 'jointly learned swim class' should be 'joining a swim class', 'I fight it's quite not easy' is ungrammatical; use 'I felt it was quite difficult'. 'At first time' should be 'at first'. Suggestion: Keep subject-verb order and use appropriate verbs ('join' -> 'joining', 'feel' -> 'felt' for past).

× I think they need so much skills and you need to be practiced to float.

✓ I think it requires many skills and you need to practice to be able to float.

Original uses 'need so much skills' (incorrect quantifier and structure) and passive 'be practiced' incorrectly. Use 'requires many skills' or 'you need to practice' and 'to be able to float' for ability. Modal idea expressed with 'need to practice'. Suggestion: Use active verbs and correct quantifiers ('many skills').

× Well, I'm not quite sure about this because there's only limit limited swimming pool and the puppy.

✓ Well, I'm not quite sure about this because there are only a limited number of swimming pools and public pools.

Multiple errors: 'there's' with plural should be 'there are'; 'limit limited' is redundant; 'the puppy' likely intended 'public pool' or 'public facilities'. Correct to 'a limited number of swimming pools and public pools'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural and choose correct nouns ('public pool').

× However, I believe that the people usually swim in their public facility in their condominium for example.

✓ However, I believe that people usually swim in the public facilities of their condominiums, for example.

Use 'people' without 'the', 'their public facility in their condominium' is awkward; better 'the public facilities of their condominiums'. Ensure plural agreement between 'people' and 'condominiums'. Suggestion: Keep number agreement and use possessive structure 'the facilities of their condominiums'.

× Though I believe that he's quite good friends.

✓ I think people who are good swimmers are often quite comfortable in the water.

Original sentence 'Though I believe that he's quite good friends' is unrelated and contains incorrect pronoun and meaning. Likely intended to contrast; provide meaningful corrected version consistent with topic. Ensure pronouns match meaning. Suggestion: Replace unclear pronoun phrase with a clear statement relevant to the question.

× First of all is like the view and scenery, then you're swimming the sea.

✓ First of all, it's the view and scenery; when you swim in the sea,

Original lacks subject and has wrong verb forms: 'First of all is like the view' should be 'First of all, it's the view and scenery.' 'then you're swimming the sea' should be 'when you swim in the sea'. Suggestion: Use clear subjects ('it is') and correct prepositions ('swim in the sea').

× You can like saw the scenery, maybe like the trees or like natural view and you may be fine.

✓ You can see the scenery, like trees and other natural views, which can be pleasant.

Incorrect verb 'saw' (past) after modal 'can' should be base 'see'. Excessive use of 'like' is unnecessary. 'You may be fine' is vague; 'which can be pleasant' is clearer. Suggestion: Use base verb after modal auxiliaries and avoid redundant 'like'.