Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct basic grammar, avoid repetitions and be more specific. Use linking words to add a brief example. Keep answer to 2–3 sentences and correct collocations (e.g., 'social media apps', 'websites', 'I read articles').

예시: Yes, I see a lot of advertisements on my phone, especially in social media apps like Instagram and Facebook. For example, when I scroll through Instagram I often notice short video ads for clothes or apps, which interrupt my browsing.

제안: Start with a clear statement and reduce hesitations. Give specific details (what product, why it impressed you, how it made you feel). Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–3 coherent sentences.

예시: Yes, I remember a TV advertisement from about 15 years ago that stayed with me. It showed a child washing her mother's feet, and it impressed me because it highlighted care and family values in a moving way.

제안: Provide a concise topic sentence, correct prepositions and plural/singular forms, and give specific examples of ads you see. Use linking words such as 'for example' or 'mainly' to structure the answer.

예시: Yes, I see many advertisements on trams and buses in Nottingham. For example, I often notice posters for hospitals, software companies and especially financial services like banks and insurance.

제안: Open with a clear opinion and give concise reasons using correct grammar and collocations ('I like shopping', 'fashion ads', 'get ideas or recommendations'). Avoid awkward nouns like 'attachments' and keep sentences short and logical with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I like some advertisements because I enjoy shopping. For example, fashion ads give me ideas and recommendations about clothes I might buy.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence describing which types you prefer. Use precise vocabulary ('fashion', 'design'), correct grammar and avoid repetition. Add a reason connected to your background and a brief example of what you notice in good ads.

예시: I prefer fashion and design advertisements because I care about my appearance and study environmental design. For instance, I pay attention to layout and color in a clothing ad to learn how designers create visual impact.

× Yeah, I often see the advertisement when I use my phone, especially when I use some I'm such as a social media app, write books or or Instagram.

✓ Yeah, I often see advertisements when I use my phone, especially when I use apps such as social media, WhatsApp, or Instagram.

The original uses 'the advertisement' incorrectly when speaking generally; use plural 'advertisements'. Also sentence is awkward: 'some I'm such as' is incorrect word order and words. Use 'apps such as' and list examples. Improve clarity and naturalness by using plural and correct phrase order. Grammar problem type's ID: 22

× There are a lot of advertisements.

✓ There are a lot of advertisements.

This sentence is actually correct; no change needed. Keeping it for continuity. (No grammar error detected.) Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× Yes, I remember, uh, about, about, uh, 15 years ago and uh, I see, I, I see uh, TV and there was a advertisement about the children who, who is washing for, uh, her mom's foot.

✓ Yes, I remember about 15 years ago I was watching TV and there was an advertisement about a child washing her mother's feet.

Use past continuous 'was watching' or simple past 'watched' for past actions. 'I see' is present and inconsistent with '15 years ago'. Use 'an advertisement' (article before singular countable noun) and 'a child' instead of 'the children who, who is' which is subject-verb disagreement. 'Washing for her mom's foot' is awkward; use 'washing her mother's feet.' Correct tense and article usage and subject-verb agreement. Grammar problem type's ID: 5

× Yes, definitely I always take by the tram in the Nottingham and I always see many advertisements about hospital and software something and but most advisement about financial.

✓ Yes, definitely. I always take the tram in Nottingham and I often see many advertisements for hospitals, software, and financial services.

Use 'take the tram' (no 'by'). Do not use 'the Nottingham' when naming the city; use 'Nottingham'. Use 'advertisements for' not 'about' in this context, and correct noun forms: 'hospitals', 'software' (no article), 'financial services' instead of 'financial'. Also remove redundant words and improve word order. Grammar problem type's ID: 11

× Actually I like it, although many people don't like advertisements but I like to shopping, so I usually like to watch some fashionable attachments and got some ideas or recommendation of about clothes.

✓ Actually I like them. Although many people don't like advertisements, I like shopping, so I usually watch fashion ads and get ideas or recommendations about clothes.

Pronoun 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'advertisements' (plural). 'Like to shopping' is incorrect; use 'like shopping' or 'like to shop'. 'Fashionable attachments' is wrong; use 'fashion ads' or 'fashionable items'. 'Got' should be 'get' to match present habit. 'Recommendation of about clothes' should be 'recommendations about clothes.' Fix pronouns, verb forms and word choice for clarity and correct tense/aspect. Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× Well, I like because I I really care about my appearance. So I like to see some advertisements about fashionable and designable. But so because I'm environment design student and I like I like see how to design the advertising.

✓ Well, I like them because I really care about my appearance. So I like to see advertisements about fashion and design. Also, because I'm an environmental design student, I like to see how advertisements are designed.

Use 'them' to refer to advertisements. 'Advertisements about fashionable and designable' is incorrect; use nouns 'fashion and design'. 'Environment design student' should be 'environmental design student' and needs the article 'an'. 'I like I like see' should be 'I like to see'. Use passive 'how advertisements are designed' or active 'how designers design advertisements' for natural phrasing. This fixes adjective use, noun forms, articles and word order. Grammar problem type's ID: 13}]}