Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答を簡潔にし、文法と語順を直す必要があります。具体的には、導入文で直接質問に答え（肯定/否定）、その後に理由を一文で付け加えます。過去の出来事を説明する際は時制と語彙（例："scored one" は意味が不明瞭）を正しく使い、冗長な語を避けましょう。例えば「中学生のとき美術の成績が悪かったから」と言いたい場合は、"I wasn't good at art when I was in junior high" のようにシンプルに述べてください。

예시: No, I don't really like drawing. When I was in junior high I got low marks in art, so I never practiced much and lost interest.

제안: 構造を整理して意味を明確にする必要があります。まず直接の答えを述べ、その後で理由や頻度、誰と行くかなど具体的な詳細を1–2文で付け加えます。言いたいことが不明瞭な箇所（"major architecture" や "spelled sense"）は明確な語彙に置き換えましょう。連結詞（because, so, when）を使って文の流れを良くしてください。

예시: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries. I often go with friends because we all like architecture and enjoy discussing the design and details of the buildings.

제안: 否定と理由をはっきり分けて述べ、文法（不定詞、動名詞、時制）を正しましょう。理由を述べるときは具体例を一つ加えると良いです（例：難解だと感じる、専門用語が多い）。また、長すぎる文は分けて簡潔にすること。

예시: No, I don't want to study art in depth. I prefer just looking at beautiful artworks because I find some art and traditional pieces hard to fully understand, and I enjoy them visually.

제안: 回答を整理し、過去の経験を簡潔に述べてください。まず"Yes"で答え、次にどれくらい学んだか（a little）とその結果（上手く描けなかった）を明確に一文で説明します。文中の不明瞭な表現（"make a good address" など）を避け、具体的な詳細（どのくらい練習したか、なぜ難しかったか）を付け加えると良いです。

예시: Yes, I learned drawing a little when I was a child. I practiced for a short time but I couldn't improve much, so now I prefer looking at my friends' artwork rather than making my own.

× No, I'm not good at drawing because in my when I was a junior high school student I got scored one in my article arts.

✓ No, I'm not good at drawing because when I was in junior high school I scored only one in my art class.

The sentence has extra words and incorrect word order. 'in my when I was a junior high school student' is redundant and misordered; correct order is 'when I was in junior high school'. 'I got scored one' is ungrammatical; use active voice 'I scored only one'. 'article arts' should be 'art class'. Suggestion: simplify the clause, use proper subject-verb order and correct noun phrase. (日本語の説明は英語での要求でしたが、ご指示どおり説明は英語で記載しています.)

× Yes, I like to go to a galliley.

✓ Yes, I like to go to a gallery.

The noun 'gallery' was misspelled as 'galliley' and does not require an article unless referring to a specific gallery. 'to go to a gallery' is natural. Suggestion: correct spelling and use 'a' for a nonspecific gallery. (日本語の説明は英語での要求でしたが、ご指示どおり説明は英語で記載しています.)

× I often go with friends for major architecture and my girlfriends friends.

✓ I often go with friends who are majoring in architecture, including my girlfriend's friends.

Original has unclear structure and missing verb forms. Use 'majoring in architecture' to describe students studying a subject. Possessive 'girlfriend's friends' needs an apostrophe; also clarify inclusion. Suggestion: use a relative clause and correct possessive form. (日本語の説明は英語での要求でしたが、ご指示どおり説明は英語で記載しています.)

× Helly he has spelled sense of architecture and beautiful

✓ He really has a good sense of architecture and finds it beautiful.

This fragment has several issues: 'Helly' likely intended 'He really'; 'has spelled sense' is incorrect—use 'has a good sense of'. Also need a subject and verb for the second idea: 'finds it beautiful' or 'and thinks it is beautiful'. Suggestion: correct adverb, use noun phrase 'a good sense of', and complete the clause. (日本語の説明は英語での要求でしたが、ご指示どおり説明は英語で記載しています.)

× No I don't I want to just looking at the beautiful arts I can it's just fun to watch them because it's too difficult to comprehend art and traditions.

✓ No, I don't. I just want to look at beautiful art; it's fun to see them because it's too difficult for me to comprehend art and traditions.

Multiple issues: missing punctuation and wrong verb forms. 'I don't I want to' should be separated: 'No, I don't. I just want...'. 'just looking' should be infinitive 'to look' after 'want'. 'beautiful arts' is unnatural; use 'beautiful art'. 'I can it's just fun' is fragmented; combine appropriately. 'to comprehend art and traditions' needs 'for me' to clarify. Suggestion: split into sentences, use 'want to look', use singular 'art' as uncountable when speaking generally. (日本語の説明は英語での要求でしたが、ご指示どおり説明は英語で記載しています.)

× Yes, I learned a little but I had I made a good I don't make a good address in my ads It's difficult for me, but I enjoy just looking at the arts from my friends.

✓ Yes, I learned a little, but I didn't become very good; I still don't make good drawings. It's difficult for me, but I enjoy just looking at my friends' artworks.

Confused tense and phrases: 'I had I made a good' is jumbled. Use past simple negative 'I didn't become very good' to refer to past learning. 'I don't make a good address in my ads' is meaningless; likely intended 'I don't make good drawings' or 'I am not good at drawing'. 'arts' is better as 'artworks' or 'drawings' and possessive 'my friends' artworks' needs apostrophe. Suggestion: clarify intended meaning, use consistent tense, and correct nouns and possessive form. (日本語の説明は英語での要求でしたが、ご指示どおり説明は英語で記載しています.)