Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and pronunciation hesitations, and use correct verb forms and vocabulary (e.g., 'interested in', 'sculpture'). Add one brief reason to support your statement using a linking word.

예시: Not really. I'm not very interested in visual arts like drawing or sculpture because I prefer stories told through films. For example, movies engage me more with plot and characters, so I rarely draw.

제안: Begin with a direct response and correct grammar (use 'go to galleries' or 'visit galleries'). Use linking words like 'because' and give specific details (when, how often, what you didn't like). Keep it within 2–4 sentences and avoid contradictions like 'for an hour a day I did not go there anymore.'

예시: No, I don't usually visit galleries. I went once or twice as a child, but I didn't enjoy looking at the exhibits because they felt slow and abstract. Since then I rarely visit galleries unless there is a film- or history-related exhibition.

제안: Answer directly and organize reasons coherently. Use past and present tenses correctly ('I tried', 'I didn't do well'). Explain feelings briefly and positively (e.g., 'I would like to learn more, but I struggled in school art classes'). Provide a specific way you would like to learn to show motivation.

예시: Yes, I would like to learn more about art, but I struggled with art in high school and got low grades. However, I would try again by taking a short evening class or watching online tutorials to build my skills gradually.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary and tense (e.g., 'was a compulsory subject'), remove fillers, and clarify unclear phrases ('when I wore the shower' is unclear). Provide a short specific example of what you drew and why you enjoyed it.

예시: Yes. Drawing was a compulsory subject in primary and secondary school, and I used to draw simple things like fish and trees. I enjoyed coloring them because it let me be creative and relaxed after lessons.

× To be honest, I'm not a person who really into the art, so I do not like drawing or any kind of art like painting or, uh, sculpturing.

✓ To be honest, I'm not a person who is really into art, so I do not like drawing or any kind of art like painting or sculpture.

Missing verb 'is' after 'who' and incorrect preposition/article use: 'into the art' should be 'into art' (no definite article). 'Sculpturing' is the gerund; 'sculpture' is the noun for the art form. Suggestion: include the linking verb after the relative clause and use the correct noun forms and omit unnecessary articles.

× But I do like some kind like the films or movie rather than drawing.

✓ But I do like things like films or movies rather than drawing.

Awkward phrase 'some kind like' is incorrect; 'things like' is appropriate. Use plural 'films or movies' for general preference. Suggestion: use 'things like' or 'types of' and match number between nouns.

× Having said that, I'm not really into go to the gallery because actually I have been there once or twice time before when I was a child, but I do not enjoy to look or watch at the art that much as I expect to.

✓ Having said that, I'm not really into going to galleries because I went there once or twice when I was a child, but I did not enjoy looking at the art as much as I expected.

After 'into' use gerund 'going'. 'Go to the gallery' generalized becomes 'galleries'. 'I have been there once or twice time before' is awkward—use simple past 'I went there once or twice' for past experience at a specific time. 'Enjoy to look or watch at' should be 'enjoy looking at'. 'As much as I expect to' must be past 'expected'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms (gerund after 'into'), choose tense consistently, and use correct collocations ('looking at art').

× So for an hour a day I did not go there anymore.

✓ So after that I did not go there anymore.

The time expression is incorrect: 'for an hour a day' is irrelevant to context. Use 'after that' to indicate stopping visiting. 'Did not go there anymore' is past and acceptable; ensure time reference matches. Suggestion: choose clear time markers that fit intended meaning.

× Definitely yes. If if possible I would like to learn more.

✓ Definitely yes. If possible, I would like to learn more.

Repeated 'if' is redundancy. 'If possible' is the correct conditional phrase. Suggestion: avoid duplicated words and add a comma after the conditional phrase.

× However, as I have been tried before when I was a high school student, I'm not doing well at art and my score is quite bad.

✓ However, as I tried before when I was a high school student, I did not do well in art and my score was quite bad.

'Have been tried' incorrectly uses passive/present perfect; the student likely means simple past 'I tried'. 'I'm not doing well at art' conflicts with past reference; use past 'I did not do well in art'. Use preposition 'in' with subjects. Suggestion: use simple past for past experiences and correct prepositions for academic subjects.

× That is some kind like my trauma that lead to that lead me to like do not like the art for now.

✓ That is kind of a trauma that led me to not like art for now.

Sentence has extra words and incorrect verb forms: 'some kind like' should be 'kind of a', 'lead' should be past 'led' to match timeframe, and the phrase 'to like do not like' is incorrect — use 'to not like' or 'so I do not like'. Also 'the art' should be 'art' generally. Suggestion: simplify structure and match tense.

× Yes, it's kind like a compulsory subject in my, umm, primary school and also in the secondary and high school as well.

✓ Yes, it was kind of a compulsory subject in my primary school and also in secondary and high school.

Tense should be past 'was' because referring to childhood. 'Kind like' should be 'kind of'. 'Secondary and high school' sounds redundant—use 'secondary and high school' or simply 'secondary school and high school'. Suggestion: use 'was' for past and 'kind of' for informal hedging; keep school levels parallel.

× Actually, I try to draw a lot, like when I wore the shower.

✓ Actually, I used to try to draw a lot, like when I was in the shower.

Mix of tenses and wrong words: 'try' present conflicts with past context—use 'used to' or 'tried'. 'Wore the shower' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'was in the shower'. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions for habitual past actions ('used to') and correct verbs for states ('was').

× Just draw some kind like a fish in the 2D or just kind of like a tree.

✓ I would draw things like a fish in 2D or a tree.

Awkward phrasing 'some kind like a fish in the 2D'—use 'things like a fish in 2D' or 'a 2D fish'. Remove redundant 'just kind of like'. Suggestion: simplify and use standard collocations.

× I think I enjoy there because I can put a lot of color in it.

✓ I think I enjoyed it because I could use a lot of color in my drawings.

Tense consistency: use past 'enjoyed' to match past context. 'Enjoy there' is unnatural—use 'enjoyed it'. 'Put a lot of color in it' is awkward—use 'use a lot of color in my drawings'. Suggestion: maintain tense consistency and use natural collocations for artistic actions.