Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và độ tự nhiên: sửa thì (when I was a child), dùng động từ chính xác (I often drew / I still do), tránh lỗi từ vựng (read → redraw? or "sketch"). Nối ý rõ ràng hơn bằng liên từ và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về phong cách hoặc phương tiện vẽ. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

예시: Yes, I love drawing. When I was a child I often drew houses, trees and flowers because sketching helped me relax. For example, I used to sketch scenes from my neighbourhood in pencil during free time, and I still enjoy drawing landscapes with watercolours now.

제안: Làm rõ từ vựng và nối câu mượt mà: dùng từ phù hợp như "contemporary" hoặc "modern" thay cho "advanced", thêm liên từ (for example, and) và cụ thể hóa loại kỹ thuật hoặc một triển lãm đã thấy. Giữ câu ngắn, trực tiếp và tự nhiên.

예시: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries because I like to admire colourful paintings and contemporary artworks. I also study artists' techniques, such as brushwork and composition, to get inspiration for my own drawings.

제안: Sắp xếp câu mạch lạc, sửa ngữ pháp và phát âm ý: loại bỏ ngập ngừng, sửa lỗi từ (fur → for; inter → interesting), dùng thì phù hợp (lately → recently). Nên nêu một lý do rõ ràng và kết luận ngắn gọn về mức độ quan tâm (e.g. 'I'd like to learn basics in my free time'). Viết tối đa 5 câu.

예시: I don't plan to study art in depth because I need to focus on my main subjects for my future career. However, I find fine art interesting, so I would like to learn a few basics in my free time, such as colour theory and sketching techniques.

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp và ý lặp: 'at primary school', 'from my art teachers', 'used to take regular art classes'. Tránh lặp từ ('creative creativity') và hoàn thiện ý cuối câu. Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động học (ví dụ: mediums used or projects) và kết luận ngắn gọn.

예시: Yes, I learned drawing at primary school from my art teachers and I used to attend regular art classes. I enjoyed painting because it helped me relax and develop my creativity, especially when we worked on landscape and portrait projects.

× I used to draw a lot when I was child, houses, trees and flowers because it made me feel happy and relaxed.

✓ I used to draw a lot when I was a child: houses, trees, and flowers because it made me feel happy and relaxed.

'child' needs the article 'a' here because 'a child' is singular countable. Also add commas for clarity and a colon to introduce the list.

× For example, I often read scenes from my neighborhood when I had free time and that hobby still.

✓ For example, I often drew scenes from my neighborhood when I had free time, and I still enjoy that hobby.

The sentence has incorrect verbs and incomplete clause. 'read' is wrong tense/word for drawing; 'drew' matches past habit. 'that hobby still' is incomplete; convert to 'I still enjoy that hobby' to form a complete clause.

× I enjoy going to galleries because I like to admire different advanced artworks and colorful paintings.

✓ I enjoy going to galleries because I like to admire a variety of artworks and colorful paintings.

'advanced artworks' is awkward; use 'a variety of artworks' for clarity. 'different' with 'advanced' is unnecessary. Also add article 'a' before 'variety'.

× I also want to learn about artists techniques and to get inspirations for my own drawings.

✓ I also want to learn about artists' techniques and get inspiration for my own drawings.

Possessive apostrophe is needed: 'artists'' becomes 'artists'' with placement after plural; actually 'artists'' is written 'artists'' but correct form 'artists' techniques'. 'inspirations' is countable but usually 'inspiration' uncountable here; remove 'to' before 'get' for parallelism.

× I couldn't say I wanted to study a lot a lot more about art because I need to focus on subjects lately.

✓ I couldn't say I wanted to study a lot more about art because I needed to focus on my subjects lately.

Tense inconsistency: 'couldn't say I wanted' (past) should align with 'need' -> change to 'needed'. Also remove duplicated 'a lot' and add possessive 'my subjects' for clarity.

× Uh, relate to my fur future career. How? However, I do find a fine art inter interesting, so I would like to learn a few basics.

✓ It is related to my future career. However, I do find fine art interesting, so I would like to learn a few basics.

Fragment 'relate to my fur future career' is ungrammatical: use 'It is related to my future career.' Remove filler 'How?' and misspellings 'fur' and 'inter'. 'a fine art inter interesting' corrected to 'fine art interesting'.

× I learned drawing at the primary school from my AD teachers and you to take regular arts in classes.

✓ I learned drawing at primary school from my art teachers and took regular art classes.

Article 'the' before 'primary school' is unnecessary in general statements: use 'primary school'. 'AD teachers' unclear; interpret as 'art teachers'. 'you to take' is incorrect; change to 'took' for past tense and 'art classes' for natural collocation.

× I enjoy painting because it helped me relax and develop my creative creativity, especially like the.

✓ I enjoyed painting because it helped me relax and develop my creativity, especially at that time.

Tense alignment: 'enjoy' should be past 'enjoyed' if referring to past. 'creative creativity' is redundant; use 'creativity'. The fragment 'especially like the' is unclear; replace with 'especially at that time' to complete the thought.