Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản và dùng từ chính xác; nói rõ ý chính trước (topic sentence), sau đó bổ sung 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể; tránh từ lặp và tiếng lóng/bập bẹ. Cụ thể: (1) Thay "growing/is a relations and district" bằng từ đúng như "drawing/relaxing"; (2) Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản khi thêm chi tiết (for example, because); (3) Giữ câu ngắn tối đa 3–4 câu. Thực hành câu mẫu có cấu trúc rõ ràng: chủ đề + lý do + ví dụ + kết luận ngắn.

예시: Yes, I do. I find drawing relaxing and satisfying because it helps me focus. For example, I often sketch landscapes from photos to improve my observation and technique. I enjoy practicing details like light and texture to make my drawings more realistic.

제안: Cần lựa chọn từ vựng chính xác và tránh lỗi số từ/giới từ; mở đầu trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi; đưa ra một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể, sử dụng liên từ như "because" hoặc "so" để liên kết ý. Ví dụ: nói "I would love to visit a gallery" thay vì các cụm sai ngữ pháp; mô tả chi tiết bạn muốn xem (styles, artists, lighting).

예시: Yes, I would love to visit a gallery because I have never been to one before. I want to see different styles of painting and learn how artists use light and color. I also enjoy the quiet atmosphere, which helps me study the works carefully.

제안: Câu trả lời có ý rõ ràng nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp và rút gọn cho tự nhiên; dùng liên từ hợp lý (However, but, so) và tránh lặp từ. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa cấu trúc "would like to learn"; (2) Nói rõ cách bạn học thêm (books, online tutorials); (3) Giữ 2–3 câu, mỗi câu rõ ràng, mạch lạc.

예시: Not at the moment, because I need to focus on my core subjects. However, I would like to learn a little about art in my free time, for example by reading books or watching online tutorials to gain basic knowledge.

제안: Cần chú ý thì động từ, trật tự từ và từ vựng chính xác; trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề ở quá khứ (Yes, I did / No, I didn't), sau đó nêu 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Sửa các lỗi như "When I were kid" → "When I was a kid"; "basics art lessons" → "basic art lessons"; diễn đạt cảm xúc đúng: "it made me feel relaxed and more creative". Giữ tối đa 2–3 câu.

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a kid I took basic art lessons at primary school, where my teacher taught drawing techniques. I enjoyed drawing landscapes and animals because it was relaxing and made me feel more creative.

× I really enjoy growing because I is a relations and district seems uh, satisfying.

✓ I really enjoy drawing because it is relaxing and, uh, satisfying.

Student used incorrect pronouns and words: 'growing' should be 'drawing'; 'I is a relations and district' is ungrammatical. Use the pronoun 'it' for the activity 'drawing' and the adjective 'relaxing'. Suggestion: identify the activity as a noun phrase (drawing) and refer to it with 'it' and a correct adjective (relaxing).

× I especially like sketching landscapes and scenery because we create places I have seen in photos.

✓ I especially like sketching landscapes and scenery because I can recreate places I have seen in photos.

Student used 'we' incorrectly when referring to their own action; 'create' is fine but 'recreate' better matches meaning. Use 'I' for personal preference and 'can recreate' to express ability. Suggestion: keep subject consistent (I) and choose the correct verb to convey meaning.

× Help me improve my observations and technique.

✓ It helps me improve my observation and technique.

Original is a fragment that looks like an imperative; context requires a statement about benefit. Use 'It helps me' to show cause and correct noun form 'observation' (singular or uncountable) and 'technique'. Suggestion: make full sentence with subject and verb and use uncountable noun where appropriate.

× Alright girls, I would love to visit our gallery because I have never been to 1 before.

✓ Alright, I would love to visit a gallery because I have never been to one before.

'girls' is inappropriate address and 'our gallery' implies ownership; '1' is numeric error for 'one'. Use 'a gallery' and refer to 'one' when meaning 'a gallery'. Suggestion: remove incorrect vocative and use 'one' as pronoun for 'a gallery'.

× I want to see different paintings and skeletal and enjoy the atmosphere and lighting.

✓ I want to see different paintings and sketches and enjoy the atmosphere and lighting.

Word 'skeletal' is incorrect; probably meant 'sketches' (noun). Ensure parallel structure: 'see different paintings and sketches' and 'enjoy the atmosphere and the lighting'. Suggestion: choose correct noun and maintain parallel nouns.

× Not really, because I need to focus on my core subjects at the moment.

✓ Not really, because I need to focus on my core subjects at the moment.

Sentence is grammatically correct for the context; no change needed. Suggestion: keep present continuous or simple present as appropriate.

× However I would like to be learn a little bit about art in the in my free time to gain some basic knowledge.

✓ However, I would like to learn a little bit about art in my free time to gain some basic knowledge.

Extra 'be' is incorrect; 'the in my' has redundant article and preposition. Remove 'be' and the extra 'the'. Suggestion: use infinitive 'learn' after 'would like' and 'in my free time' without extra article.

× When I were kid I learned drawing in about basics art lessons at primary school from my teacher.

✓ When I was a kid, I learned drawing basics in art lessons at primary school from my teacher.

Use 'was' not 'were' with singular subject 'I'; include article 'a kid'; word order: 'learning drawing basics' should be 'learned drawing basics in art lessons'. Suggestion: use correct past tense 'was' and proper article and noun order.

× I enjoyed not knowing pictures and of landscapes and animals because it was relaxing and have me pee more creative.

✓ I enjoyed drawing pictures of landscapes and animals because it was relaxing and made me feel more creative.

Original contains many errors: 'not knowing pictures' should be 'drawing pictures'; remove 'of' after 'pictures'; 'have me pee' is garbled — should be 'made me feel'. Use past tense 'made' to match 'enjoyed'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs and phrases ('drawing pictures', 'made me feel') and ensure tense consistency.