Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid repetition of "to be honest" and filler words, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "because" or "however"). Keep the response to no more than five sentences and use clearer vocabulary (e.g., "skilled" instead of "talents").

예시: No, I don't really like drawing. I tried it but I'm not skilled, so I usually prefer imagining scenes alone instead. Because my drawings look messy, I avoid drawing in public and just sketch ideas privately.

제안: Give a clear answer first and avoid repeating the same reason. Use one concise supporting detail and a linking word (e.g., "because" or "so"). Replace vague phrases like "that kind of feel" with specific descriptions (e.g., "calming atmosphere").

예시: Not really. I often feel sleepy in galleries because the quiet, calming atmosphere relaxes me, so I don't usually stay long.

제안: Answer directly and avoid repeated negatives and fillers. State your main point, then briefly explain why, using clear vocabulary (e.g., "not my strength" or "not my field"). If relevant, mention a condition when you might study art to show openness (e.g., "unless I need it for work").

예시: No, I don't plan to study art further because it's not my strength and I prefer to focus on subjects I'm better at. However, I might take a basic course if it's useful for my career.

제안: Give a straightforward answer and clarify with a specific detail or short example. Avoid confusing phrases like "I deny to learn"; instead explain briefly whether you took lessons or just tried at home. Use linking words (e.g., "but", "because") correctly.

예시: Yes, I did learn some drawing as a child, but I don't remember much. I mostly practiced at home for a short time, and because I lost interest, those memories are vague.

× To be honest, I don't have the talents of drawing, so I don't like drawing umm, but if I have chance, I like to dream in a private space because I think my drawing is not beautiful.

✓ To be honest, I don't have the talent for drawing, so I don't like drawing. Umm, but if I had the chance, I would like to draw in private because I think my drawings are not beautiful.

Errors: 'talents of drawing' is incorrect noun phrase and requires singular 'talent' and preposition 'for' (Grammar problem type ID 22 Article errors / 11 Incorrect use of prepositions). 'If I have chance' needs past-subjunctive 'had' for hypothetical condition and 'would like to' for the result (Grammar problem type ID 7 Future tense issue / 6 Present tense issue). 'Dream in a private space' is likely wrong verb choice; 'draw in private' fits the meaning. 'My drawing is not beautiful' should be plural 'my drawings are not beautiful' if referring generally. Suggestion: use 'talent for drawing', use conditional 'if I had the chance' and 'would like to draw in private', and use plural when speaking generally about multiple drawings.

× Umm, to be honest, not really because I feel I'm sleepy when I go to the gallery because it gives me a sense of peace and that kind of feel made me feel so sleepy.

✓ Umm, to be honest, not really, because I feel sleepy when I go to the gallery; it gives me a sense of peace and makes me feel very sleepy.

Errors: Redundant 'I'm' in 'I feel I'm sleepy' is awkward; use 'I feel sleepy' (Grammar problem type ID 6 Present tense issue). 'That kind of feel made me feel so sleepy' mixes tenses; use present simple 'makes me feel very sleepy' to match habitual action (Grammar problem type ID 6 Present tense issue). Suggestion: use consistent present tense for habitual reactions and avoid redundant constructions.

× To be honest, umm, no really, I don't umm have a talent in arts uh, to be honest, I'm not good at arts so umm, and I believe arts is is not my uh, specialist.

✓ To be honest, umm, not really. I don't have a talent for the arts. I'm not good at art, and I believe art is not my specialty.

Errors: 'a talent in arts' should be 'a talent for the arts' or 'a talent for art' (Grammar problem type ID 11 Incorrect use of prepositions and 22 Article errors). 'I'm not good at arts' should be 'I'm not good at art' or 'the arts'. 'Arts is is not my specialist' uses wrong noun 'specialist' instead of 'specialty' and repeats 'is'. Correct noun is 'specialty' (Grammar problem type ID 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs / 12 Incorrect use of pronouns not applicable). Suggestion: use 'talent for the arts', 'good at art', and 'not my specialty'.

× Yet yes definitely. But I don't have so much memory about drawing. Umm, I believe it's because I deny to learn arts, so the kind of memory not in my head.

✓ Yes, definitely. But I don't have many memories of drawing. Umm, I think it's because I refused to learn art, so those memories are not in my head.

Errors: 'Yet yes definitely' is awkward; use 'Yes, definitely.' 'I don't have so much memory about drawing' should be 'I don't have many memories of drawing' (Grammar problem type ID 1 Singular and plural issue and 14 Incorrect use of quantifiers). 'I deny to learn arts' is incorrect verb and infinitive use; correct is 'I refused to learn art' or 'I didn't want to learn art' (Grammar problem type ID 5 Past tense issue and 8 Verb + -ing form). 'The kind of memory not in my head' lacks verb and definite article; use 'those memories are not in my head' (Grammar problem type ID 23 Sentence without a verb and 1 Singular and plural issue). Suggestion: use plural 'memories', correct past-tense verb 'refused' or 'didn't want to', and provide a full clause with verb 'are'.