Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and simple grammar. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect ideas. Also correct sentence structure and pronouns (e.g. “my mother called it”) to improve clarity.

예시: Yes, I love drawing. I started when I was two because my mother encouraged me to try pencils and paper, and since then drawing has kept me motivated. Because I often draw portraits and landscapes, people can see my personality through my work.

제안: Use a clear present-tense statement and avoid tense errors and repetition. Give one specific reason and an example to support it. Use linking phrases such as because and for example to make the response logical.

예시: Yes, I definitely enjoy going to galleries because the quiet atmosphere makes me feel calm and relaxed. For example, when I stand in front of a large painting I feel absorbed by the scene and can imagine walking through it.

제안: Give a direct statement about your desire to learn, then add a specific reason and example. Avoid vague or contradictory words like “mature artist” without explanation. Keep sentences short and correct repeated words and grammar.

예시: Yes, I want to learn more about art because I enjoy improving my skills. Although I have some experience with painting, I still take classes to learn new techniques such as colour mixing and perspective, which helps my work grow.

제안: Answer directly in past tense and give specific details: who taught you, what they taught, and how it influenced you. Correct pronouns and verbs (e.g. “my grandpa taught me”), and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like so or therefore to show result.

예시: Yes, I learned to draw as a child. My grandpa taught me to sketch animals and people, especially how to draw horses, and that encouragement motivated me to practise every day, so I developed my skills early.

× Absolutely, I love drawing because when I was 2 years old I put my first pencil on the paper that my mother calls and drawings makes me keep motivated and you if you are looking at my art, you can see through my expression of personality.

✓ Absolutely, I love drawing because when I was 2 years old I put my first pencil on paper; my mother encouraged me, and drawing has kept me motivated. If you look at my art, you can see my personality through my expression.

Multiple sentence structure issues: run-on sentence, incorrect clauses and word order. Also subject-verb agreement ('drawings makes' should be 'drawing has kept' or 'drawings keep') and awkward phrasing ('the paper that my mother calls' unclear). Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, use clear subjects and verbs, and correct agreement. Use 'encouraged me' for intended meaning and 'If you look at my art' for conditional clause. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I would definitely yes because when I was enter into gallery, the atmosphere makes me feel calm and relaxed and when I was when I was look at art, I feel like walked in the artworks and I can see art.

✓ I would definitely say yes because when I enter a gallery, the atmosphere makes me feel calm and relaxed, and when I look at art, I feel like I am walking into the artworks and seeing them up close.

Errors include incorrect modal phrase ('I would definitely yes' should be 'I would definitely say yes'), wrong verb tense/form ('when I was enter' should be 'when I enter' or 'when I entered'), repetition ('when I was when I was'), and missing auxiliary verbs ('I feel like walked' should be 'I feel like I am walking'). Suggestion: use present simple for habitual experiences, include appropriate auxiliaries, and remove repetitions. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Absolutely, because I'm in a mature artist. I I know a lot of things about painting, but I'm still learning and learning painting is really the greatest thing I I have ever had. It's my personality.

✓ Absolutely, because I'm a mature artist. I know a lot about painting, but I'm still learning, and learning to paint has been one of the greatest things in my life. It's part of my personality.

Errors: incorrect preposition/article ('in a mature artist' should be 'a mature artist'), repeated words ('I I'), awkward tense and phrasing ('learning painting is really the greatest thing I have ever had' -> 'learning to paint has been one of the greatest things in my life'). Suggestion: use correct article, remove repetitions, use 'learning to paint' and 'has been' for present perfect, and use 'part of my personality' for clearer meaning. Grammar problem type ID:22

× When I was a kid, my grandpa always drive for me a lot of things such as animals, humans.

✓ When I was a kid, my grandpa always drew a lot of things for me, such as animals and people.

Incorrect verb tense/form: 'drive' is wrong; the correct past form of 'draw' is 'drew'. Also word order: 'drew a lot of things for me' is natural. Use 'people' instead of 'humans' for drawings context. Suggestion: use past tense 'drew' for habitual past actions and choose appropriate nouns. Grammar problem type ID:5

× That makes me motivated about it.

✓ That motivated me and made me interested in drawing.

Awkward phrasing: 'That makes me motivated about it' mixes present simple with past context and uses unnatural preposition 'about it.' Suggestion: align tense with previous sentence (past), use 'motivated me' and 'interested in drawing' for clearer meaning. Grammar problem type ID:26

× And I learned about what is drawing and she taught me how to draw horse and in my country if you can draw.

✓ I learned what drawing is, and she taught me how to draw horses. In my country, if you can draw, you are respected.

Several issues: awkward clause order ('learned about what is drawing' -> 'learned what drawing is'), missing plural ('draw horse' -> 'draw horses'), unclear pronoun/reference and incomplete final clause ('in my country if you can draw' needs a result). Suggestion: reorder to subject-verb-object form, pluralize nouns when appropriate, and complete conditional statements with the consequence. Grammar problem type ID:12