Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and use correct tenses; give a brief reason with one clear supporting detail. Avoid repetition and unnecessary filler. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and use linking words to connect ideas.

예시: No, I don't enjoy drawing. In high school I had to take art classes and I found the practical exercises difficult, so I never developed interest. Because of that experience, I feel art is not meaningful to me compared with my other interests.

제안: State your opinion first, then give a specific reason and a short example. Use correct article use and linking words (for example, because, so). Keep it concise and natural.

예시: Not really. I don't often visit galleries because during a high school trip I saw mainly abstract paintings that I couldn't relate to, so the visit felt confusing rather than enjoyable.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear, specific reason. Avoid hesitations and unnecessary words. Use parallel structure when listing subjects and correct prepositions (e.g., 'instead of').

예시: No, I don't plan to study art further. I would rather focus on subjects I find meaningful, such as science or philosophy, because they align better with my career goals.

제안: Provide a clear past description and one concise reflection. Use correct word choices (e.g., 'draw' not 'withdrawing') and avoid sentence fragments. Link the childhood memory to your current view briefly.

예시: Yes, I did. My father brought crayons and colored pencils when I was in kindergarten so I could explore drawing, but although I tried it, I never found it very interesting and stopped pursuing it.

× When I was in high school, I have to take the arts lessons and I have to draw a lot of pictures that I struggle with.

✓ When I was in high school, I had to take arts lessons and I had to draw a lot of pictures that I struggled with.

The sentence refers to a past period ('when I was in high school'), so past simple tense is required. 'Have to' indicates present obligation; change to 'had to' for past obligation. Also remove the article 'the' before 'arts lessons' because plural general noun doesn't need it. Suggestion: use past simple consistently for past events.

× And I realize that I don't like the arts because it is for me.

✓ And I realized that I didn't like art because it wasn't for me.

The rest of the narrative is in past tense, so 'realize' and 'don't like' should be past tense: 'realized' and 'didn't like'. 'The arts' is awkward here; use 'art' as an uncountable noun. 'It is for me' is incorrect phrasing; use 'it wasn't for me.' Maintain past tense consistency.

× It's meaningless.

✓ It felt meaningless to me.

The original short sentence is grammatical but abrupt. To match previous past-tense context and express personal judgment, use past tense 'felt' and add 'to me' for clarity. This is an improvement suggestion rather than strict grammatical correction.

× I don't like going to the gallery because I have a awful experience during my high school.

✓ I don't like going to galleries because I had an awful experience during high school.

Use plural 'galleries' for general preference. 'Have a awful experience' is ungrammatical: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'during my high school' and article needs 'an' before vowel sound: 'an awful experience.' Also 'during my high school' is better as 'during high school.' The first clause 'I don't like going' can remain present tense for current preference.

× I remember that I went to the gallery in high school and looking at the abstract arts hanging in the gallery, I couldn't understand it.

✓ I remember that I went to a gallery in high school, and when I looked at the abstract art hanging there, I couldn't understand it.

Parallel structure requires 'looked' (past simple) rather than the present participle 'looking' after 'and'. Use 'a gallery' (indefinite) for one visit and 'abstract art' (uncountable) rather than 'abstract arts.' 'Hanging there' is clearer than repeating 'in the gallery.' Maintain past tense throughout the recollection.

× I don't wish to pursue for further understanding of the arts.

✓ I don't wish to pursue further understanding of art.

'Pursue' should not be followed by 'for' here; use 'pursue further understanding' or 'pursue a further understanding.' Also use 'art' as an uncountable noun. 'Don't wish to' is acceptable but 'don't want to pursue' is more natural.

× I believe that I could have spent more time on something that is meaningful to me such as science or, uh, physio, uh, philosophy and instead of, uh, spending time in arts.

✓ I believe that I could have spent more time on things that are meaningful to me, such as science or philosophy, instead of spending time on art.

Remove filler 'uh' and correct structure: 'such as' should list parallel items; 'physio' is unclear and likely unnecessary. Use 'things that are meaningful' or 'subjects that are meaningful.' 'Instead of' should come before the gerund phrase 'spending time on art.' Use 'art' uncountable and 'on art' rather than 'in arts.' Maintain conditional perfect 'could have spent.'

× Yes, I did. Uh, I still remember when I was in kindergarten, my dad used to bring a lot of crayons and colouring pencils to me to explore my creativity and withdrawing.

✓ Yes, I did. I still remember that when I was in kindergarten my dad used to bring me a lot of crayons and colored pencils so I could explore my creativity and draw.

'Used to bring a lot of crayons and colouring pencils to me' is awkward; English prefers 'bring me.' 'Colouring' spelling is acceptable but 'colored pencils' is more common in American English; keep consistent regional spelling. 'Withdrawing' is wrong word choice; likely meant 'drawing.' Also use 'so I could' rather than infinitive 'to' for purpose clarity.

× However, it is something that I don't find is interesting and I wish.

✓ However, it was something I didn't find interesting, and I didn't want to continue.

Context is past, so use past tense 'was' and 'didn't find.' The phrase 'I wish' is incomplete and unclear; supply a clear intention such as 'I didn't want to continue.' This fixes pronoun and tense inconsistencies and provides a complete thought.