Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use linking words to explain conditions. Also correct small grammar errors (use present simple and correct time expressions) and keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

예시: I usually don't remember my dreams. Most of the time I forget them within an hour or two because they are quite bland. However, if a dream is highly emotional or unusual, I tend to remember it for much longer.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and word choice, and use a linking phrase to contrast personal preference with interest in others. Be specific about why you listen to others and avoid unclear words like 'june'.

예시: I usually don't share my dreams with others because I prefer to tell friends things directly. However, I enjoy listening to other people's dreams because they are often entertaining or reveal something about their feelings.

제안: Start with a clear opinion, use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), avoid repetition, and give a concise reason plus an example to support the view. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they reflect our subconscious thoughts. For example, dreaming about exams might show anxiety about work or study.

제안: Answer directly and use correct verb forms and tenses. Keep it concise: state desire, explain steps with linking words (e.g., 'to do that'), and end with a complete concluding sentence about the result or feeling.

예시: Yes, I want my dreams to come true because they represent my goals. To achieve them I need to work hard and stay focused on my daily tasks, and when I succeed I will feel very proud and rewarded.

× No I no I don't think so.

✓ No, I don't think so.

The repetition 'No I no I' is a redundancy and likely a hesitation; it should be simplified to a single 'No' followed by the clause. Remove the extra 'no' to make the sentence grammatical and natural.

× Most of the time I forget my dreams when I get up for one hour for one hour, one or two hours because they are bland and nonsense.

✓ Most of the time I forget my dreams within one or two hours after I get up because they are bland and nonsensical.

Timing and sequence require 'within one or two hours after I get up' to show when forgetting happens. Use adjective 'nonsensical' instead of noun 'nonsense' to describe dreams. Remove repeated phrase 'for one hour' and place time expression correctly.

× But But if the dream is something interesting or more emotional, I will I remember them for a long time.

✓ But if the dream is interesting or more emotional, I remember it for a long time.

Reduce repetition 'But But' and 'I will I'. Use present simple 'I remember' to show habitual result. Match number: 'dream' is singular so use 'it' rather than 'them'.

× I don't like sharing my dreams with others because if I have something want to tell my friends I can directly say with them and don't need to use my june as a tool but I like to listen to others' dreams because I think if they tell me their dreams the dreams must be interesting

✓ I don't like sharing my dreams with others because if I want to tell my friends something, I can say it to them directly and don't need to use my dreams as a tool, but I like to listen to other people's dreams because I think if they tell me their dreams, they must be interesting.

Pronouns and word order were incorrect: 'something want to tell my friends' should be 'if I want to tell my friends something.' Use 'say it to them' for reporting. 'my june' is unclear and likely 'my dreams'; replace with 'my dreams'. Use 'other people's' for possession. Add commas to separate clauses and change redundant 'the dreams must be interesting' to 'they must be interesting' for clarity.

× Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings because dreams is the activity of our brain.

✓ Yes, I believe dreams have special meanings because dreams are activities of our brain.

Subject-verb agreement: 'dreams' is plural and requires 'are' not 'is'. Also 'activity' was singular; use plural 'activities' to match 'dreams' or rephrase as 'the activity of the brain' for singular concept.

× So it reflects so it reflects our our head in our in hiding our hideous thoughts and sinking into the dreams you can find your own sort, your own

✓ So they reflect what is in our minds, including hidden or unpleasant thoughts, and by looking into dreams you can learn about yourself.

Original sentence has repetition, unclear phrases ('our our head in our in hiding') and fragmentary structure. Rephrase to clear subject 'they' (dreams), use 'minds' instead of 'head', replace 'hideous' with 'hidden or unpleasant' for clarity, and make final clause complete: 'by looking into dreams you can learn about yourself.' This corrects sentence structure and coherence.

× Yes, I want my dreams come true.

✓ Yes, I want my dreams to come true.

When expressing desire for something to happen, use the infinitive 'to come' after 'want': 'want X to do Y.' Missing 'to' caused an incorrect verb form.

× Dreams also means a goal.

✓ Dreams also mean a goal.

Subject-verb agreement: 'dreams' is plural so verb should be 'mean' not 'means'. Alternatively, make subject singular ('a dream means a goal').

× So to achieve a goal, I have to work hard and concentrate to my daily work and eventually I could achieve my achieve the goal.

✓ So to achieve a goal, I have to work hard and concentrate on my daily work, and eventually I can achieve the goal.

Use 'concentrate on' not 'concentrate to'. Use 'can' rather than 'could' to express realistic future ability here. Remove repeated phrase 'achieve my achieve' and keep 'the goal' once. Add comma before coordinating conjunction for readability.

× The process is the process is rewarding and when I achieved the goal, I

✓ The process is rewarding, and when I achieve the goal I will feel satisfied.

Remove repetition 'The process is the process is'. Use present simple 'achieve' to discuss a planned future result and add a completion to the sentence; the original was an unfinished fragment. 'Will feel satisfied' completes the idea about the emotional result of achieving the goal.