Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and article use (e.g., "a successful person," "go to a foreign country"). Avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: Yes. My main dream is to become a successful professional and make my family proud. For example, I want to study at a top university abroad so I can gain advanced skills and qualifications, and then work in my field to build a strong career.

제안: Organize your response: give a direct answer, then one specific supporting detail. Reduce hesitations and use linking words (because, so, and). Clarify who you share with and why. Use plural/singular correctly ("others," "family members").

예시: Yes, I often share my dreams with my family and close friends because they support me and give useful advice. For instance, my sister helps me plan study goals and my parents encourage me to apply for scholarships.

제안: Give a clear opinion and explain with a specific reason or example. Avoid unclear words and pronunciation errors ("grim"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: Yes, I believe dreams can have special meanings because they often show our hopes or fears. For example, dreaming about graduating might motivate someone to study harder in real life.

제안: Answer directly and support with concrete actions. Use correct verb forms and avoid repetition. Mention one or two specific steps you are taking and use linking words (so, therefore) to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true, so I am studying hard and gaining work experience in my field. For example, I take online courses and do internships to improve my skills and increase my chances of success.

× My dream is going foreign country and work hard, study hard in the best university and learning more educated skills, knowledge etcetera.

✓ My dream is to go to a foreign country, work hard, study at the best university, and learn more advanced skills and knowledge.

The original mixes singular/plural forms and verb patterns. 'Going foreign country' lacks infinitive and preposition: use 'to go to a foreign country'. 'Study hard in the best university' should be 'study at the best university' because we use 'study at' for institutions. 'Learning more educated skills' is incorrect word choice and form; use 'learn more advanced skills and knowledge'. Use parallel verb forms after 'My dream is to': 'to go', 'to work', 'to study', 'to learn'.

× I share my dream with other because, uh, because, uh.

✓ I share my dream with others because...

Use plural 'others' instead of singular 'other' when referring to people in general. Also 'because, uh' repetition is filler and can be reduced. Keep pronoun/noun agreement: 'with others'.

× I give some tips and tricks and I say about my dream in other like my family member to listening my dream they also say.

✓ I give some tips and advice and talk about my dream with others, like my family members; when I tell them about my dream, they respond positively.

Multiple pronoun and noun errors: 'other' should be 'others'; 'family member' should be plural 'family members' when speaking generally; 'to listening my dream' is ungrammatical—use 'when I tell them about my dream' or 'when they listen to my dream'. 'Tips and tricks' is acceptable but 'tips and advice' is more natural. Rephrase to make sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× I think Grim has a special meaning.

✓ I think a dream has a special meaning.

'Grim' is incorrect word choice; context requires 'dream'. Also include the article 'a' before the singular countable noun 'dream'. This fixes word choice and article usage.

× Like dream is the, uh, thing that can make, uh, someone life change Drives bit.

✓ For example, a dream is something that can change someone's life a little bit.

Original has word order and vocabulary errors: 'someone life' needs possessive 'someone's life'. 'Change Drives bit' is unintelligible; likely meant 'change a little bit' or 'drive change'. Reconstruct sentence using clear subject-verb-object order: 'a dream is something that can change someone's life a little bit.'

× Yeah I want to make my dream come true because I have give my all the best.

✓ Yes, I want to make my dream come true because I have given my best.

Tense and verb form error: 'have give' should be present perfect 'have given'. 'All the best' is awkward; 'given my best' or 'done my best' is natural. Use 'Yes' instead of 'Yeah' for a slightly more formal tone.

× I hope my dream will come true soon.

✓ I hope my dream will come true soon.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; keep as is. It correctly uses 'will' for future hope. No correction required but included here to indicate it's fine.

× I am working hard multi talented person, hard working person.

✓ I am a hardworking, multi-talented person.

Original repeats ideas and lacks articles and hyphenation. Use the article 'a' before a noun phrase and compound adjectives with hyphens: 'hardworking' or 'hard-working' and 'multi-talented'. Combine into a single concise phrase.

× I give my best for come my come my dream true my make my family member proud be a successful man.

✓ I give my best to make my dream come true and make my family proud by becoming a successful man.

Original is ungrammatical with repeated fragments and wrong verb forms ('come my come my dream true'). Use the infinitive 'to make' and correct sequence: 'to make my dream come true' and 'make my family proud'. Use 'family' without 'member' when speaking generally. Use 'by becoming a successful man' to indicate how pride will be achieved.