Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar, avoid repetition and ensure logical flow. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Correct errors like 'I've have had' and 'some suggest interesting'.

예시: Yes, I often remember my dreams. For example, some are romantic and involve travel, while others are inspirational and motivate me to study more.

제안: Use correct articles and plurals, and avoid short fragments. Combine sentences with linking words and be specific about platforms or reactions. Replace vague phrases like 'girl from Chongqing' with 'a friend from Chongqing' and avoid sentence fragments starting with 'Because'.

예시: Yes, I often share my dreams on social media with a friend from Chongqing and sometimes tell my mother, because discussing them is fun and she gives interesting interpretations.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and connect ideas with linking words. Avoid vague claims like 'profound meaning' without explanation; give a concise example showing cause and effect. Fix tense consistency and natural phrasing.

예시: Yes, I think some dreams can be meaningful. For instance, after dreaming about studying foreign languages, I felt motivated and started spending more time learning vocabulary, so the dream influenced my behaviour.

제안: Answer directly and avoid unnecessary repetition. Use one or two supporting details that are realistic and relevant. Correct small errors like duplicate 'and' and awkward phrasing 'stranger girl who's very pretty'—use 'a stranger who was very pretty'.

예시: Yes, I would like to make my dreams come true, but I know some are unrealistic. For example, I once dreamed of being invited to dinner by a beautiful stranger in Shanghai, which was unlikely but inspiring.

× Yes, I often remember the dreams I've had. I've have had a lot of interesting dreams.

✓ Yes, I often remember the dreams I've had. I've had a lot of interesting dreams.

The sentence contains an extra auxiliary 'have' producing 'I've have had', which is ungrammatical. Use the correct present perfect contraction 'I've had' or 'I have had'. Suggestion: remove the redundant 'have' so the present perfect is formed correctly.

× Some are romantic and some are quite inspirational, while some suggest interesting and some are even poetic.

✓ Some are romantic, some are quite inspirational, some are intriguing, and some are even poetic.

The original uses 'suggest interesting' which is ungrammatical because 'suggest' requires an object or 'interesting' needs a noun; also the repeated 'some' and conjunctions make the sentence awkward. Replace 'suggest interesting' with an appropriate adjective like 'intriguing' and streamline conjunctions for clarity.

× Yes, I like to share my dream with girl from Chongqing on the social media and I sometimes like to share my dream with my mother as well.

✓ Yes, I like to share my dreams with a girl from Chongqing on social media, and I sometimes share my dreams with my mother as well.

Errors: 'my dream' should be plural 'my dreams' when speaking generally; 'girl' needs the indefinite article 'a'; 'the social media' is incorrect—use 'social media' without 'the'; repetition 'I sometimes like to share' is wordy so simplify. Suggest using plural for habitual actions and correct articles.

× Because sharing my dreams can be really fun.

✓ Because sharing my dreams can be really fun.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It is included to show it matches context and needs no correction.

× Yes, especially the inspirational dreams. They have a profound meaning in my opinion.

✓ Yes, especially inspirational dreams. They have a profound meaning, in my opinion.

Minor style: 'the inspirational dreams' implies specific dreams; when speaking generally omit 'the'. Also add a comma before 'in my opinion' for clarity. Grammar is otherwise acceptable.

× For example, I studied foreign languages in my dreams.

✓ For example, I study foreign languages in my dreams.

Talking about the content of recurring or present dreams fits present simple 'I study' or present habitual; 'I studied' suggests a past action which may confuse. Use present simple to describe actions that occur within dreams habitually.

× I try to be as studious as possible.

✓ I try to be as studious as possible.

This sentence is correct; no grammatical change needed. Keep as is.

× I think that's probably the result of my dream.

✓ I think that's probably the result of my dreaming.

'The result of my dream' is odd when referring to a habit or influence; 'my dreaming' or 'my dreams' is clearer. Use 'my dreams' or the gerund 'my dreaming' to refer to the general phenomenon.

× Yes, I'd like to make my dreams come true.

✓ Yes, I'd like to make my dreams come true.

This sentence is correct; modal contraction 'I'd like' is appropriate for expressing desire.

× Although some dreams are unlikely to be true.

✓ Although some dreams are unlikely to come true.

'Unlikely to be true' is understandable but 'unlikely to come true' is more natural collocation about dreams. Change improves idiomatic expression.

× For example, in one of my dreams I went to Shanghai and and I was invited to a meal by a stranger girl who's very pretty.

✓ For example, in one of my dreams I went to Shanghai and I was invited to a meal by a stranger who was very pretty.

Issues: double 'and and' is a typographical repetition; 'stranger girl' is incorrect order—use 'a strange girl' or better 'a stranger' with a relative clause 'who was very pretty'. Also, since the dream is described in past narrative, keep past tense 'was' rather than 'who's'. Suggest removing duplicate 'and', use 'a stranger who was very pretty'.