Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 많이 중단되고 어색한 말하기가 반복됩니다. 문장 구조를 단순화하고 주제 문장을 먼저 말한 뒤 구체적인 세부사항(시간, 장소, 행동)을 연결어로 자연스럽게 덧붙이세요. 예를 들어 말 머뭇거림을 줄이고 현재/과거 시제 일치를 신경쓰며 문장을 2~4개로 유지하세요.

예시: Yes, I can remember some of my dreams. Usually I dream about staying at home, resting and watching TV. Sometimes the dreams become strange, and I find myself flying high above the sky. These flying scenes always feel vivid and exciting.

제안: 의견을 분명하게 제시한 뒤 이유를 논리적으로 연결하세요. 문법(주어-동사 일치, 조동사 사용)과 시제에 유의하고, 연결어(so, because, but)를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 만드세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

예시: I am interested in other people's dreams and I would like to share mine sometimes. However, I often can't remember my dreams unless someone else mentions them, so I don't usually share them. If a dream is memorable, I might tell a close friend about it.

제안: 의견을 간결히 말하고 그 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 전문 용어를 사용해도 좋지만 간단하고 명확한 문장으로 연결하세요. 연결어(for example, because, therefore)를 사용해 논리를 정리하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

예시: I don't think dreams have special mystical meanings because they are usually a mix of recent experiences and my unconscious thoughts. For example, if I watch a scary movie, I might dream about monsters, so the dream reflects what I have seen or felt.

제안: 명확한 주제문과 이유를 간결히 제시했고 내용도 적절합니다. 더 자연스럽게 들리도록 어순과 관사 사용을 다듬고, 한 두 문장으로 요약하세요. 감정을 나타내는 표현(terrifying, unpleasant)을 사용하면 어휘가 풍부해집니다.

예시: No, I don't want my dreams to come true because many of them are weird and scary. For instance, I often dream about ghosts or Dracula, which is terrifying, so I wouldn't want those dreams to happen in real life.

× I just sit around my home and I just rest and watching TV.

✓ I just sit around my home, rest, and watch TV.

The verb after 'and' should be in the base form 'watch' to match the coordinated verbs 'sit' and 'rest'. Use parallel structure: 'sit, rest, and watch'.

× I remember that dream they appear umm just uh user date.

✓ I remember that dream; it appears just like everyday events.

The original uses 'they' which does not agree with the singular 'dream' and contains unclear fragments. Replace 'they' with 'it' for singular agreement and clarify the meaning. Also use proper clause punctuation.

× There are ways of flying over the sky, so I.

✓ Sometimes I dream of flying over the sky.

The original fragment 'There are ways of flying over the sky, so I.' is incomplete and awkward. Use 'dream of flying' where 'flying' is a present participle correctly following 'dream of'. Also complete the sentence to convey the idea.

× I want to share my dreams with others and I also very interested in others dream or actually I cannot remember the dreams until I met another person so I actually doesn't share my dreams.

✓ I want to share my dreams with others, and I am also very interested in others' dreams. Actually, I cannot remember my dreams until I meet another person, so I usually don't share them.

Multiple issues: 'very interested' requires a linking verb 'am'; 'others dream' should be the possessive 'others\' dreams'; tense consistency requires present tense 'meet' and 'don't' not 'met' and 'doesn't'; 'doesn't' mismatches subject 'I'. Also use 'usually' to make meaning clear.

× I don't think so 'cause dream is just a combination of my life and conscious and unconscious brain activating and this is not more than just of.

✓ I don't think so because a dream is just a combination of my life and my conscious and unconscious mind activating, and it is nothing more than that.

Subject-verb agreement: use 'a dream is' for singular. 'conscious and unconscious brain activating' is ungrammatical; use 'my conscious and unconscious mind activating'. 'this is not more than just of' is incorrect; replace with 'it is nothing more than that'.

× Actually no, because my dreams have a lot of weird and scary moments like ghosts and Dracula that scares me, so I don't want my dreams come true.

✓ Actually no, because my dreams have a lot of weird and scary moments, like ghosts and Dracula, which scare me, so I don't want my dreams to come true.

Relative clause must agree: 'which scare me' (plural subject 'ghosts and Dracula' or treat as plural). Also the construction 'want my dreams come true' needs the infinitive 'to come true'.