Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, clarity and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, correct verb tenses, and give a brief specific detail about a memorable dream. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and avoid unclear phrases like "be a daughter" — probably you meant a specific profession or role. Use a linking word if you add more detail.

예시: Yes, I can remember some dreams from my childhood. For example, when I was little I dreamed of becoming a teacher because I liked helping classmates. However, now I feel it would be difficult because I don’t have the necessary training. Still, I sometimes imagine teaching as a hobby.

제안: Make the response more natural and specific. Start with a clear yes/no, then explain who you share with and why. Correct short grammar errors and add linking words for coherence. Give a concrete example of what your parents said or how sharing helps you.

예시: Yes, I often share my dreams with my parents because they are supportive. For instance, when I told them about my career goals, they encouraged me to study hard and offered practical advice. As a result, I feel more relaxed and confident.

제안: Clarify your opinion and support it with a reason or brief example. Use correct grammar (e.g., "special" not "specials", "people" vs "person"). Avoid vague phrases like "very cool" — explain why big dreams matter. Use a linking word when adding a reason.

예시: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect a person’s hopes or fears. For example, someone who dreams about speaking on stage might secretly want more confidence. Therefore, big dreams can motivate people to set goals and work harder.

제안: Be specific about the dream and give concrete steps or reasons. Correct grammar ("a kind person" not "a kind people"). Start with a clear statement, then explain why and how you plan to achieve it using linking words. Keep it concise and include one specific example of behavior you’ll adopt.

예시: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true. Specifically, I hope to be a kind person like my mother because she always helps others. To achieve this, I try to volunteer at local charities and practice listening carefully to friends. This helps me become more compassionate in daily life.

× When I was a child, I want to be a daughter, but now I think it is difficult for me to learn it.

✓ When I was a child, I wanted to be a doctor, but now I think it is difficult for me to learn it.

The original mixes past time marker 'When I was a child' with present tense 'want'; this is a tense consistency error. Use past tense 'wanted' to match 'was'. Also 'daughter' and 'learn it' are incorrect in context: likely intended 'doctor' and 'learn it' refers to studying the profession. Suggestion: keep past tense for past desires and use correct nouns for roles or skills. Note: change 'daughter' to the intended noun (e.g., 'doctor') and keep verbs consistent.

× Yes I do. I share my dream with my parents and they said do a good job. It makes me relaxed.

✓ Yes, I do. I share my dreams with my parents and they say 'do a good job.' It makes me feel relaxed.

Problems: missing comma after 'Yes'; 'dream' should be plural if referring generally; reported speech 'they said do a good job' is incorrect - present reporting uses 'say' and needs quoting or rephrasing; 'It makes me relaxed' is unnatural — use 'makes me feel relaxed.' Suggestion: use correct verb tense for reporting speech, pluralize when appropriate, and use 'feel' with adjectives describing emotion.

× Yes, because everyone has different dreams. They are all specials and I think if a people has a big dream it is very cool.

✓ Yes, because everyone has different dreams. They are all special, and I think if a person has a big dream, it is very cool.

Errors: 'specials' is incorrect plural form; use adjective 'special' to modify 'dreams.' 'a people' is incorrect — 'people' is plural; use 'a person' or 'people' depending on number. Also missing comma before 'and' and after 'dream.' Suggestion: use correct adjective form and appropriate singular/plural nouns.

× Yes, I do. To be honest, I want to be a kind people because my mother is very kind. I want to be a person like her.

✓ Yes, I do. To be honest, I want to be a kind person because my mother is very kind. I want to be a person like her.

Error: 'a kind people' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'people.' Use singular 'person.' Tense 'want' is fine in present because desire is current. Suggestion: use 'person' for one individual and keep consistent vocabulary.