Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (e.g., "potentially", "I think" repeated), and correct verb forms. Use one linking phrase to explain why lucid dreaming helps your memory and give a brief specific example.

예시: Yes, I usually remember my dreams because I often have lucid dreams. For example, when I realise I am dreaming I consciously focus on events, which makes the details easier to recall after I wake up.

제안: Organise your response: start with a clear yes/no then give two concise reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and improve grammar (e.g., "others' dreams", "I am interested in others' dreams"). Provide a short specific example of the type of dream you'd share.

예시: It depends — I only share dreams that feel meaningful. For instance, I once dreamed about helping a stranger, and because it reflected my values I told a close friend. Conversely, I usually don't share bizarre or private dreams.

제안: Avoid fillers ("uh") and be more precise. State your position clearly, then give a reason and a brief example or comparison. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and replace informal phrases like "believes in magic" with clearer phrasing if you mean intuition or symbolism.

예시: Yes, I believe some dreams have symbolic meanings because they often reflect my emotions or concerns. For example, dreaming about being late usually signals anxiety about upcoming deadlines.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain with one or two clear reasons and a specific real-life goal that relates to your dreams. Avoid repetition and emotional filler words.

예시: Yes, I do want to make some of my dreams come true, especially the ones about becoming a writer. For instance, I often dream about finishing a novel, so I am working on a daily writing routine to turn that dream into reality.

× I mostly am lucid dreaming, so I think that makes it a lot more easier for me to remember my dreams.

✓ I am mostly lucid dreaming, so I think that makes it a lot easier for me to remember my dreams.

Word order: place adverb 'mostly' before the verb phrase 'am lucid dreaming'. Also 'a lot more easier' is ungrammatical; use 'a lot easier' or 'much easier' because 'more easier' is a redundant comparative. Suggestion: Move 'mostly' before 'am' and replace 'a lot more easier' with 'a lot easier' or 'much easier'.

× It depends what kind of dream I want to share with them because a lot of my dreams are weird which do not have any meaning but some of them are pretty meaningful.

✓ It depends on what kind of dream I want to share with them, because a lot of my dreams are weird and do not have any meaning, but some of them are pretty meaningful.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'depends'. Use of 'which' is incorrect for non-restrictive clause here; better to join with 'and' or use 'that'. Also sentence needs commas to separate clauses for clarity. Suggestion: Add 'on' after 'depends', replace 'which' with 'and' or restructure the clause, and add commas to separate ideas.

× So I think I do want to share some of my dreams with people and I however I am interested in others dream as well so I want to know what kind of people they actually are.

✓ So I think I do want to share some of my dreams with people; however, I am interested in others' dreams as well, so I want to know what kind of people they actually are.

Redundant conjunctions ('and I however') and punctuation errors. Possessive missing: 'others dream' should be 'others' dreams'. Use a semicolon or period before 'however' and add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Remove the extra 'and I', make 'others' possessive, and use proper punctuation around 'however'.

× Yes, in my perspective, I think they do have some special meanings because I'm a person who, uh, believes in magic, so it is really not surreal for me to think that they have a special meaning.

✓ Yes, from my perspective, I think they do have some special meanings because I'm a person who believes in magic, so it is not strange for me to think that they have special meanings.

Use 'from my perspective' rather than 'in my perspective'. Remove filler 'uh'. 'Not surreal' is unnatural here; 'not strange' or 'not surprising' is clearer. Keep plural 'special meanings' for consistency. Suggestion: Replace 'in' with 'from', remove fillers, and use a more natural adjective such as 'strange' or 'surprising'.

× Yes, it is really has been one of my dream to make my dream come true because, uh, most of my dreams are really interesting.

✓ Yes, it has really been one of my dreams to make my dreams come true, because most of my dreams are very interesting.

Unclear auxiliary verb order: 'it is really has been' is incorrect; correct form is 'it has really been' or omit 'it'. 'One of my dream' must be plural 'one of my dreams'. Remove filler 'uh' and use 'very' instead of repeated 'really' for style. Suggestion: Use 'it has really been one of my dreams' or 'it has always been one of my dreams', pluralize 'dreams', and remove filler words.

× I just want to live in them and I never want to get out.

✓ I just want to live in them and never want to get out.

Redundant subject 'I' in the second clause is acceptable but omitting it makes the sentence smoother. Tense and meaning are correct; this change improves style. Suggestion: Remove the second 'I' for conciseness: '...and never want to get out.'

× And it's just so it feels so, so real when I dream about things that I want the most in my life.

✓ It just feels so, so real when I dream about the things I want most in my life.

Redundant words 'it's just so it feels so' create confusion; reduce to a single clause. 'Want the most' is better as 'want most'. Article use before 'things' is optional; adding 'the' clarifies. Suggestion: Remove redundancy and simplify to 'It just feels so, so real when I dream about the things I want most in my life.'

× And they are mostly in my dreams.

✓ And they are mostly in my dreams.

This sentence is grammatically correct as is; it matches meaning and tense. No change needed. Suggestion: None.