Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 答えは理解できるが、文法や語順、論理の繋がりに複数の誤りがあり、表現が冗長です。まず直接的なトピック文（例：Yes, I can remember some dreams from my childhood）で始め、続けて具体的な一つのエピソードを時制と語順を整えて述べてください。また、「first time and last time」の意図が曖昧なので明確に説明するか省略しましょう。接続語（for example, because, so）を適切に使って論理を示すと良いです。

예시: Yes, I can remember some childhood dreams. For example, when I was little I dreamed of becoming a doctor, which stuck with me because it was the only clear dream I had at that age.

제안: 主張は明確ですが、不自然な語彙選択（"lewd"など）と文法エラーが目立ちます。文化的理由を述べるときは、適切な単語（e.g. inappropriate, impolite）を使い、理由を一文でまとめ、必要なら具体例を加えましょう。接続詞で理由をはっきり示すと論理的になります。

예시: No, I usually don't share dreams. In my culture it is considered impolite to ask about someone's dreams because people often view them as private or linked to their future plans.

제안: 回答は一貫性に欠け、文法の誤りや比喩の使い方が不明瞭です（"homework"の例えが不自然）。まず明確なトピック文（No, I don't think dreams have special meanings.）を述べ、その理由を具体的に一つか二つ示してください。比喩を使うなら自然で分かりやすいものにし、接続語（because, therefore）で繋げましょう。

예시: No, I don't think dreams have special meanings. I see dreams as reflections of our wishes or daily thoughts rather than messages; for example, dreaming about exams might just mean you are worried about school.

제안: 答えが矛盾しており、否定の表現や意図が混乱しています（"I don't think I don't want"など）。まず簡潔に意見を示し、理由を明確に述べてください。もし現在具体的な夢がないなら、それを伝えつつ将来の希望（e.g. wanting to be wealthy）を明確に述べ、語彙は口語的すぎない語を使いましょう（"want to be rich"など）。

예시: Not at the moment; I don't have a specific dream to pursue. However, I do hope to become financially secure in the future, and I am working on practical steps like saving and improving my skills.

× I remember when I was a kid I wanted to be your doctor and I obviously remember that because that was my first time and last time to have a dream ever.

✓ I remember when I was a kid I wanted to be a doctor, and I clearly remember it because that was the first and last time I ever had that dream.

The original sentence mixes past tense forms and awkward phrasing. Use 'wanted' and 'remembered' consistently in past tense. 'Your doctor' is inappropriate in this context; 'a doctor' is correct. 'Obviously' is better as 'clearly' and 'that was my first time and last time to have a dream ever' should be rewritten as 'that was the first and last time I ever had that dream' for natural English. Suggestions: keep past tense verbs consistent, remove incorrect possessive 'your', and use natural collocations like 'had that dream.'

× No, I don't because in my country's culture it is not good thing to ask their dreams because some people don't want to talk about their futures.

✓ No, I don't, because in my country's culture it is not good to ask about people's dreams; some people don't want to talk about their futures.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'good thing', incorrect preposition 'ask their dreams' should be 'ask about people's dreams'. Also 'in my country's culture' is better as 'in my country's culture' or 'in my country'—kept but punctuation improved. Use possessive 'people's' rather than 'their'. Suggestions: use 'ask about' for asking topics, include articles where needed, and prefer 'people's' for general statements.

× So it's a kind of lewd thing.

✓ So it's considered inappropriate.

'Lewd' has a strong sexual meaning and is unlikely intended. Use 'inappropriate' or 'improper' to convey cultural disapproval. Also 'a kind of' is unnecessary. Suggestions: choose precise adjectives that match intended meaning; avoid words with unintended connotations.

× No, I don't. I think dream is are just achievement that they want to be real.

✓ No, I don't. I think dreams are just goals that people want to become real.

Errors: 'dream is are' mixes singular and plural. Use plural 'dreams are'. 'Achievement' is countable here and better replaced with 'goals'. 'They' is ambiguous; 'people' clarifies the subject. Use 'become real' instead of 'to be real' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb number agree, choose appropriate countable nouns, and clarify pronouns.

× So I think it's a type of homework from school because we need to achieve that task.

✓ So I think it's like homework from school because we need to work to achieve those goals.

Original has awkward metaphor and 'achieve that task' is unclear. 'Like homework' conveys similarity; plural 'those goals' matches earlier 'dreams/goals'. 'We need to work to achieve' clarifies action required. Suggestions: align metaphors and plural/singular forms, and use clearer verbs like 'work to achieve.'

× So it's, uh, similar with this.

✓ So it's, uh, similar to this.

The correct preposition collocation is 'similar to', not 'similar with'. Suggestions: learn common adjective + preposition combinations (similar to, different from).

× No, I don't actually. I don't have a dream for now, so I don't think I don't want to make my dream come true, but I think I wanna be a rich so.

✓ No, I don't, actually. I don't have a dream right now, so I don't want to make a dream come true, but I think I want to be rich.

Multiple errors: 'for now' -> 'right now' is more natural. Double negative 'I don't think I don't want' is incorrect; simplify to 'I don't want'. 'Wanna' should be 'want to' in formal speech. 'Be a rich' is ungrammatical; use 'be rich' or 'be a rich person'. Also maintain consistent present tense. Suggestions: avoid double negatives, use standard register ('want to' instead of 'wanna'), and correct noun/adjective forms ('rich' as adjective not 'a rich').