Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, concise and use correct vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (remember, dream), avoid odd words (gym, taste). Keep to 2–3 sentences and add one specific detail. Use a linking word if adding detail.

예시: Yes, I can usually remember my dreams. For example, I often wake up remembering vivid adventures, so I sometimes write them down in a notebook to review later.

제안: Begin with a direct answer, then give a brief reason with a linking word. Correct phrasing (I enjoy listening to others; I tend to keep my own dreams private). Avoid filler words and repetition.

예시: I enjoy listening when other people describe their dreams because it’s interesting and can reveal personal concerns. However, I tend to keep my own dreams private since they feel personal.

제안: Answer directly and use accurate vocabulary (dreams, not gyms). Give a clear reason and one specific example or explanation. Use linking words like because or for example to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they sometimes reflect hidden thoughts or emotions. For example, dreaming about being chased might indicate anxiety about a real-life problem.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer and explain with specific reasons. Use correct grammar (it depends) and correct nouns (dreams). Avoid contradictions and vague words. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like however or for example.

예시: It depends on the dream. For realistic goals, I try to make them come true because they motivate me; however, for unrealistic fantasies I accept them as harmless imagination.

× Generally I can because I feel like Remember the gym is a good adventure for me especially. I probably could write them down and taste them.

✓ Generally I can, because I feel like remembering my dreams is a good experience for me. I could probably write them down and record them.

Multiple errors: 'Remember the gym' is incorrect word choice and capitalization; 'gym' should be 'dreams', and 'Remember' should be lowercase gerund 'remembering' (Grammar Problem Type ID 8: Verb + -ing form). 'adventure' is odd collocation; 'experience' fits better (Grammar Problem Type ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'taste them' is wrong verb choice; use 'record' or 'write them down' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Also sentence structure needed punctuation to separate ideas (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Suggestions: use 'remembering my dreams' and avoid literal verbs like 'taste' for non-sensory actions; choose collocations like 'a good experience'.

× Listening to the other one to talk about their dreams, it's a good like interesting activity for me, but for for my dreams I tend to keep it to myself.

✓ Listening to other people talk about their dreams is an interesting activity for me, but I tend to keep my own dreams to myself.

Pronoun use and phrasing issues: 'the other one' is vague; use 'other people' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12: Incorrect use of pronouns). Redundant 'to' and filler 'like' should be removed; correct clause order avoids dangling introductory phrase (Grammar Problem Type ID 26: Sentence structure errors). 'for for' is repetition. Suggestion: simplify to 'Listening to other people talk about their dreams is interesting, but I keep my own to myself.'

× I agree with that you because some special gyms might reveal your hidden thoughts and emotion which is extremely insightful for people.

✓ I agree with you because some special dreams might reveal your hidden thoughts and emotions, which can be very insightful.

Errors: 'agree with that you' incorrect word order and pronoun placement; correct is 'agree with you' (Grammar Problem Type ID 12). 'gyms' is wrong word; should be 'dreams' (vocabulary, treated here as incorrect adjective/word choice—Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match plural 'thoughts' (Grammar Problem Type ID 1: Singular and plural issue). 'which is extremely insightful for people' awkward; use 'which can be very insightful.' Also verb form and phrasing improved.

× It depend. It depends on all kinds of gems. For some unrealistic gem, I'm not gonna let it come to. For some dreams, it's so uplifting, which is really insignificant.

✓ It depends. It depends on what kind of dream it is. For some unrealistic dreams, I'm not going to try to make them happen. Some dreams are uplifting and important.

Multiple tense and agreement problems: 'It depend' should be 'It depends' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2: Third person singular issue). 'gems' and 'gem' are wrong words; should be 'dreams' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). 'I'm not gonna let it come to' is ungrammatical and informal; use 'I'm not going to try to make them happen' (Grammar Problem Type ID 4: Modal verb usage and Grammar Problem Type ID 26 sentence structure). Final sentence contradicts 'insignificant' while calling uplifting; corrected to consistent meaning 'uplifting and important' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13). Also plural agreement adjusted ('dreams' and 'them').