Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, avoid redundant words like “literally,” and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words if adding details.

예시: Yes. I clearly remember a childhood dream: I wanted to be a basketball player in the NBA because it is the best league. For example, I used to practice daily at the local court so I could improve my shooting and teamwork.

제안: Answer directly and fix grammar and word order. Use one clear reason with a linking word (because/so) and avoid repetition. Mention who you share with and why, and give a brief example.

예시: Yes, I often share my dreams with my close friends because they understand my goals and encourage me. For example, when I told them I wanted to play professionally, they helped me find a coach and training sessions.

제안: Make the opinion clear, correct tense and phrasing, and support it with a specific reason. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid vague statements. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I do, because positive dreams gave me motivation as a child. For example, imagining success in sports pushed me to study time management and practice regularly, which improved both my grades and confidence.

제안: Respond directly with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons. Correct collocations (e.g., “win something for my family”) and avoid awkward phrasing. Include a short example of what you would do to achieve the dream.

예시: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because I want to become more confident and make my family proud. For example, I plan to join a competitive team and train regularly so I can improve my skills and compete in tournaments.

× I dreamed become a basketball player in the NBA, which is the best league in the world.

✓ I dreamed of becoming a basketball player in the NBA, which is the best league in the world.

The verb 'become' after 'dreamed' requires the preposition 'of' and the gerund 'becoming' to form 'dreamed of becoming'. Use 'of' + gerund for this pattern; 'becoming' correctly expresses the ongoing idea of becoming a player.

× I want to be a famous player and I can win the final games.

✓ I want to be a famous player and I can win the final game.

Use the singular 'final game' when referring to the decisive match; 'final games' is unclear. Also 'can win' is acceptable but using 'hope to win the final game' would be more natural. Here the main correction is number agreement for 'final game'.

× Actually I literally share my dreams with my friend because my friend can understand me what I dream which is my favorite things I want to do.

✓ Actually I often share my dreams with my friend because my friend can understand what I dream about, which are my favorite things I want to do.

Replace 'literally' with 'often' for natural meaning; the clause 'understand me what I dream' is ungrammatical — correct structure is 'understand what I dream about'. Also 'which is my favorite things' must agree: 'which are my favorite things' since 'things' is plural.

× I think share it with my my friend is a good way to me.

✓ I think sharing it with my friend is a good thing for me.

Use the gerund 'sharing' after 'think' to form a noun phrase. Remove duplicated 'my'. Use 'for me' not 'to me' in this context and 'a good thing' is more natural than 'a good way' here.

× When I was a child I think a good dream can push me in my study and a dream mean a lot of to a child.

✓ When I was a child I thought a good dream could push me in my studies and a dream meant a lot to a child.

Tense must be consistent for past time: change present 'think' to past 'thought', 'can' to 'could', and 'mean' to 'meant'. Use 'studies' (plural) and remove extra 'of' after 'a lot'.

× It can make you hardworking and become outgoing person.

✓ It can make you hardworking and help you become an outgoing person.

Parallel structure needed: add 'help you' before 'become' and include the article 'an' before 'outgoing person'. 'Hardworking' describes you directly; 'become an outgoing person' needs 'an'.

× Yes, I really want to make my dreams come true because I want to be a outgoing person and I want to win something to me and my family.

✓ Yes, I really want to make my dreams come true because I want to be an outgoing person and I want to win something for me and my family.

Use the article 'an' before words starting with a vowel sound like 'outgoing'. Replace 'to me and my family' with 'for me and my family' which correctly expresses benefit.

× My family member really want to make me feel happy and successful.

✓ My family members really want to make me feel happy and successful.

Use plural 'family members' when referring to more than one person, and use 'want' -> 'want' must agree with plural subject 'members'. Also 'really' placement is fine; ensure subject-verb agreement.