Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammatical accuracy, word choice and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct singular/plural and adjective forms, and avoid contradictory or wrong words (e.g., use 'unsettled' instead of 'unscathed'). Keep to 2–3 sentences and add one specific example to be more relevant.

예시: I usually don't remember most of my dreams. Occasionally I have a vivid nightmare — for example, once I dreamed I was being chased — and when I wake up I feel very anxious and unsettled.

제안: Work on grammar, word forms and linking words. Begin with a direct topic sentence, use correct verb patterns (e.g., 'I'm quite interested in other people's dreams'), use plural forms, and tighten vocabulary ('reveal hidden fears or desires'). Include one clear example and a linking phrase like 'for instance' or 'for example.'

예시: I'm quite interested in other people's dreams because I think dreams can reflect the subconscious and reveal hidden fears or desires. For instance, a recurring dream about falling might indicate that someone feels insecure about a particular situation in their life.

제안: Correct collocations and word choice and make the answer concise. Use one clear topic sentence, then provide a specific cultural example with correct words (e.g., 'special significance', 'upcoming good luck' or 'good fortune'). Avoid vague or incorrect phrases like 'upcoming ground'.

예시: Yes. In Vietnamese culture dreams often have special significance. For example, dreaming of a white snake is commonly believed to herald good fortune, so people often feel hopeful after such a dream.

제안: Finish sentences and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct noun forms ('good academic results'), and contrast ideas with linking words like 'however' then complete the negative clause (e.g., 'I wouldn't want purely fantastical dreams to come true'). Keep to 2–3 sentences and give a brief specific example of an unrealistic dream you wouldn't want.

예시: It depends on the dream. If it is a positive, realistic goal — for example, achieving good academic results or securing financial stability — I would want it to come true because it would improve my future prospects; however, I wouldn't want purely fantastical or harmful dreams to become reality.

× Occasionally I have vivid nightmare and when I wake up I feel very anxious and unscathed.

✓ Occasionally I have vivid nightmares and when I wake up I feel very anxious and unsettled.

The noun 'nightmare' should be plural 'nightmares' to match 'Occasionally I have' which implies multiple occurrences. 'Unscathed' means 'not hurt' which contradicts 'anxious'; the intended adjective is 'unsettled' meaning disturbed. Suggestion: use plural nouns when referring to repeated events and choose adjectives that match the intended meaning.

× I quite interest in other people dream because I think dream are a reflection of the subconscious and can reveal heated fear or desires.

✓ I am quite interested in other people's dreams because I think dreams are a reflection of the subconscious and can reveal hidden fears or desires.

Several pronoun and related form issues: 'I quite interest' is incorrect; the correct passive/adjective form is 'I am quite interested'. 'Other people dream' requires possessive 'other people's' and 'dream' should be plural 'dreams' to match general reference. Also 'dream are' needs subject-verb agreement to 'dreams are'. 'Heated' is the wrong adjective; contextually 'hidden' fits. Suggestion: use 'be + past participle' for feelings (interested), use possessive for 'other people's', ensure noun plurality for general statements, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× For example, a rescue dream about falling might show that people feel insecure for about a situation in their life.

✓ For example, a recurring dream about falling might show that people feel insecure about a situation in their life.

'A rescue dream' is likely a misuse; 'recurring dream' fits common meaning. Remove the extra preposition 'for' before 'about'. No plural issue other than choosing the correct modifier; the core correction addresses word choice and redundant preposition. Suggestion: replace uncommon word 'rescue' with 'recurring' when referring to repeated dreams and avoid double prepositions.

× In Vietnamese culture, dreams often have simply significance.

✓ In Vietnamese culture, dreams often have simple significance.

'Simply' is an adverb but a noun 'significance' requires an adjective 'simple'. Use 'simple significance' not 'simply significance'. Suggestion: ensure correct part of speech when modifying nouns—use adjectives, not adverbs.

× For example, dreaming of a white snake is commonly thought to represent good fortune or upcoming ground, so people might feel hopeful after such a dream.

✓ For example, dreaming of a white snake is commonly thought to represent good fortune or upcoming good events, so people might feel hopeful after such a dream.

The phrase 'upcoming ground' is incorrect; likely intended 'upcoming good fortune' or 'upcoming good events'. 'Ground' is not an appropriate noun here. Suggestion: choose a noun that fits the context, e.g., 'good events' or 'good fortune'.

× If the dream is a positive, realistic world such as achieving good academic result or securing financial stability, I would definitely want it to become true because it would improve my future prospects.

✓ If the dream is positive and realistic, such as achieving good academic results or securing financial stability, I would definitely want it to come true because it would improve my future prospects.

'Is a positive, realistic world' is awkward; better 'is positive and realistic'. 'Achieving good academic result' needs plural 'results'. 'Want it to become true' is less natural than 'want it to come true'. Also maintain parallel structure. Suggestion: use parallel adjectives and pluralize countable nouns like 'results'.

× However, I wouldn't want unreal, unrealistic or.

✓ However, I wouldn't want unreal or unrealistic dreams to come true.

The original sentence is incomplete and has redundant adjectives 'unreal, unrealistic'. It ends abruptly with 'or.' Complete the thought by specifying 'dreams' and cleaning redundancy. Suggestion: avoid leaving sentences unfinished and remove redundant synonyms; state the negative condition clearly.