Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms, reduce fillers (uh, yeah), and avoid unfinished phrases. Aim for 2–3 sentences, e.g. state how often you remember dreams and give a concrete example of what you recall.

예시: I sometimes remember my dreams, but not always. For example, I usually recall short fragments or emotions from a dream when I wake up, such as feeling scared or happy, but the rest fades quickly.

제안: Answer directly and use precise vocabulary. Begin with a clear statement about whether you share dreams, then explain why with a specific reason and an example. Reduce hesitations and choose correct nouns (e.g. 'other people's dreams' not 'authors dream'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

예시: I don't often share my dreams because I usually forget most of them. However, I enjoy listening to other people's dreams because their stories often inspire imaginative ideas for my own writing.

제안: Make your opinion clear and support it with specific reasons and an example. Avoid vague phrases and grammatical mistakes (e.g. 'dreams can be signs' not 'omens for everything'). Use linking words like 'however' to show contrast. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings. For example, positive dreams might lift someone's mood and motivate them, while recurring negative dreams could signal stress or anxiety and prompt someone to seek help.

제안: Give a direct response and explain with a specific plan or reason. Correct grammar (e.g. 'I sometimes dream of becoming a billionaire'). Replace vague phrases like 'do everything and then reply to the fullest' with concrete actions. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore'.

예시: Yes, I do want to make my dreams come true because they motivate me. For instance, I dream of building a successful business, so I plan to study management, gain work experience, and save money to start my own company.

× For me, it's really depends.

✓ For me, it really depends.

The auxiliary 'it is' (it's) should not be used with the verb 'depends' because 'depends' already conveys the present tense; the correct structure is 'it depends' or 'for me, it really depends.' Remove the extra 'is' to fix subject-verb structure and tense. Suggestion: Use 'it depends' when stating general present conditions.

× Uh, sometime I cannot remember the dreams that I had at night because yeah, when I wake up it's like I cannot remember anything.

✓ Sometimes I cannot remember the dreams I had at night because when I wake up I cannot remember anything.

Use 'Sometimes' (adverb) instead of 'sometime' and avoid redundant 'that' after 'dreams.' Also keep consistent tense: 'had' is acceptable for last night, but the clause 'when I wake up I cannot remember' should be simple present. Suggestion: Use 'Sometimes' and simplify clauses for clarity.

× But sometime I can remember just a few pieces in my dream and then but I can not understand when I wake up because it's very.

✓ But sometimes I can remember just a few parts of my dream, and then I cannot understand them when I wake up because they are very unclear.

Replace 'sometime' with 'sometimes'; 'pieces in my dream' is better as 'parts of my dream'; 'I can not' should be 'I cannot'; the sentence fragment 'because it's very.' is incomplete—replace with a clear adjective like 'unclear' and refer to 'them' (the parts) plural. Suggestion: Complete fragments and match pronouns and number.

× Sometime I cannot, uh, share my dreams with others because, uh, I cannot remember everything in my dream.

✓ Sometimes I cannot share my dreams with others because I cannot remember everything in my dream.

Use 'Sometimes' instead of 'Sometime' and remove filler 'uh.' The rest is grammatical; ensure consistent simple present tense. Suggestion: Say 'Sometimes I cannot remember all the details of my dream' for clarity.

× Instead of that, I want to, uh, to listen to authors dream because sometimes it's very interesting for me and then I can have a lot of imagine imaginative, uh, ideas when I do.

✓ Instead, I want to listen to other people's dreams because sometimes they are very interesting to me and give me many imaginative ideas.

'Instead of that' is awkward; 'others' should be 'other people' or 'other people's dreams' (possessive). Remove the extra 'to' after 'want'. 'Authors dream' is incorrect; likely 'other people's dreams.' 'Imagine imaginative' is redundant—use 'imaginative.' Also change 'when I do' to a clearer verb phrase like 'they give me.' Suggestion: Use 'other people's dreams' and avoid redundant words.

× I do think dreams have a very special meaning because, uh, sometime dream can be a things that uh, help people happier in their life because it's like a beautiful dream.

✓ I do think dreams have a very special meaning because sometimes a dream can be something that helps people be happier in their lives because it can be beautiful.

Use 'sometimes' not 'sometime'; 'dream' needs an article 'a dream' or plural 'dreams'; 'a things' should be 'something' or 'a thing'; verb agreement: 'helps' (not 'help') because subject is 'something'; 'happier in their life' should be 'happier in their lives.' Suggestion: Match singular/plural and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× But sometimes it's like an omens for everything because they have hard times in their life.

✓ But sometimes dreams can be like omens because people are going through hard times in their lives.

'An omens' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'an omen' or 'omens.' 'They have hard times in their life' should be 'people are going through hard times in their lives' to match plural pronoun with plural noun. Suggestion: Keep number agreement between articles, nouns, and pronouns.

× Definitely just because sometime I dream to be a billionaire.

✓ Definitely, because sometimes I dream of being a billionaire.

Use 'sometimes' and the correct verb pattern 'dream of doing/being' rather than 'dream to be.' Also use gerund 'being' after 'dream of.' Suggestion: Use 'dream of' + noun/gerund.

× So I think it is very important to dream something and then it will like you try hard to achieve it.

✓ So I think it is very important to have dreams because they will make you try hard to achieve them.

'Dream something' is unnatural; use 'have dreams.' The structure 'it will like you try hard' is incorrect; use 'they will make you try hard' (causative). Match plural 'dreams' with 'them.' Suggestion: Use 'make someone do something' and prefer 'have dreams'.

× And I think in my opinion we should do everything and then reply to the fullest to make your dreams come true.

✓ In my opinion, we should do our best to make our dreams come true.

'And I think in my opinion' is redundant; use one phrase. 'Do everything and then reply to the fullest' is unclear and ungrammatical; likely intended 'do our best' or 'try our hardest.' Also maintain consistent pronouns: use 'our' instead of mixing 'we' and 'your.' Suggestion: Use concise expressions like 'do our best' or 'try our hardest.'