Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct small grammar errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repeating words (e.g., "dreams that I had"). Use correct tense and articles ("in the early morning", "I dreamt I had successful exams").

예시: I usually remember my dreams when I wake up in the early morning. For example, last week I dreamt I passed all my exams, which made me feel very happy and motivated to study.

제안: Fix grammar and hesitations, and make the answer more fluent and structured. Use a clear topic sentence, then give one concrete example and a linking phrase (e.g., "for instance"). Remove filler sounds like "umm."

예시: Yes, I am interested in my friends' dreams. For instance, when a friend describes a dream about a relationship, I ask what happened and what they hoped for, because that helps me understand their feelings and offer supportive advice.

제안: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar ("bachelor's degree", "that goal is"). Use a linking phrase to connect your opinion and example, and be more specific about how the dream influences you.

예시: Yes, I do. I believe dreams can reflect our goals and passions. For example, dreaming about passing my bachelor's degree reminds me of that goal and motivates me to study more consistently.

제안: Avoid tense inconsistency and repetition. Begin with a concise topic sentence, then provide a concrete, specific example and a linking word such as "for example". Correct grammar: "it motivates me and pushes me to work harder" and remove duplicate words.

예시: Yes, definitely. My dreams motivate me and push me to work harder; for example, imagining a career in design encouraged me to take practical projects and extra courses to build my portfolio.

× Yes, I often remember dreams that I had when I wake up in early morning.

✓ Yes, I often remember dreams that I have when I wake up early in the morning.

The original mixes past ('had') with a habitual present context; use present simple 'have' for recurring events. Also 'in early morning' is unidiomatic; use 'early in the morning'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for habitual actions and use natural time expression.

× Some dreams are so fascinating that I really want to share them with my friends and my family.

✓ Some dreams are so fascinating that I really want to share them with my friends and family.

Redundant article 'my' before 'family' is unnecessary; omission makes the phrase more natural. Tense is fine (present simple) for general statements.

× And last week I dreamed that I had successful examinations and I'm very happy for that.

✓ And last week I dreamed that I had successful examinations and I was very happy about that.

The sentence mixes past ('dreamed') with present 'I'm very happy'; change to past 'I was' to match the past-time frame. Also 'happy for that' is non-idiomatic; use 'happy about that'.

× Yes, I'm often interested in my friends dreams.

✓ Yes, I'm often interested in my friends' dreams.

Missing possessive apostrophe to show ownership: 'friends' dreams' should be 'friends' dreams' (plural possessive). Use the apostrophe to indicate the dreams belong to friends.

× When they tell me about dreams involving their romantic relationships, they umm.

✓ When they tell me about dreams involving their romantic relationships, I listen carefully.

Original sentence ends abruptly with 'they umm' which is incomplete and ungrammatical. Replace with a complete clause describing the speaker's reaction. Ensure subject and verb form a full sentence.

× I usually ask them to explain what happened and what they hope for because this helps me understand their feelings and give better advice.

✓ I usually ask them to explain what happened and what they hope for because this helps me understand their feelings and give them better advice.

Parallel structure and object clarity: 'give better advice' is acceptable but adding 'them' clarifies the indirect object. Also maintain parallel infinitive forms 'to explain' and 'to give' or use gerund form consistency; here adding 'them' improves clarity.

× Dreams often reflect our goals and passions.

✓ Dreams often reflect our goals and passions.

Sentence is correct; present simple correctly describes a general truth. No change needed.

× For example, I dream of passing my bachelor degree exam and when I dream that I am successful, it reminds me of how important that's gone is and motivates me to study harder.

✓ For example, I dream of passing my bachelor's degree exam, and when I dream that I am successful, it reminds me how important that goal is and motivates me to study harder.

Multiple issues: use possessive form 'bachelor's degree' and add comma before 'and' to join clauses. 'that's gone is' is incorrect; intended phrase is 'that goal is'. 'Reminds me how important that goal is' is the correct word order. These corrections fix article/possessive and word choice errors.

× Yes, definitely. Whenever I imagined achieving my goals or pursuing my passions, it motivates me and push me to work harder for for example, dreaming about a future career in design encouraged me to study more and take practical projects.

✓ Yes, definitely. Whenever I imagine achieving my goals or pursue my passions, it motivates me and pushes me to work harder; for example, dreaming about a future career in design encouraged me to study more and take on practical projects.

Tense inconsistency and subject-verb agreement: 'Whenever I imagined' (past) conflicts with general present meaning—use 'imagine'. Also 'it motivates me and push me' must be 'pushes' to agree with singular subject. 'For for example' has a duplication; remove one and add punctuation. 'Take practical projects' is improved to 'take on practical projects' for correct collocation.