Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 문장이 자연스럽고 정확하게 연결되도록 어순과 시제, 관사, 복수형 등을 교정하세요. 주제 문장(‘My dream is to be a pianist’)을 먼저 말한 뒤, 이유와 구체적 배경(언제부터 연주했는지, 얼마나 좋아하는지)을 2~3문장으로 덧붙이세요. 중복 단어(I, I)와 문법 오류를 피하고, 길이는 3문장 이내로 유지하세요.

예시: My dream is to be a pianist. I have been playing the piano since I was seven, and I really enjoy practicing difficult pieces. Because of that long experience, I hope to perform in concerts one day.

제안: 질문에 직접 답하고 ‘공유하는지’ 여부를 명확히 밝히세요. 문법(시제, 어순, 동사 형태)과 단어 선택을 고쳐야 합니다. 예를 들어 ‘Yes, I often tell others about my dream’으로 시작한 뒤, 구체적 예시(누구에게, 어떻게 공유했는지)를 연결어(so, because, for example)를 사용해 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes, I often share my dreams with friends and family. For example, I told my classmates that I want to be a math teacher, and I sometimes help them with homework to practise teaching skills.

제안: ‘꿈이 특별한 의미가 있다고 생각하느냐’는 질문에 대해 의견을 먼저 분명히 말하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하세요. 연결어(so, because, therefore)를 사용해 논리를 보여주고, 중복 표현을 줄이며 시제를 일치시키세요.

예시: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our goals or fears. For instance, my dream of becoming a math teacher motivates me to study and practise teaching, so I spend time solving problems and explaining concepts to others.

제안: 의도(‘꿈을 이루고 싶은가’)에 대한 명확한 긍정/부정을 먼저 말한 뒤, 구체적인 목표와 계획(어떤 시험을 통과해야 하는지, 어떤 준비를 하는지)을 1~2문장으로 설명하세요. 불필요한 중복(‘MMM’)과 문장 미완성을 피하고, 문장을 완성하세요.

예시: Yes, I definitely want to make my dream come true. My goal is to become a certified math teacher, so I am studying for the teacher qualification exam and gaining experience by tutoring students.

× My dream is pianist because I I play piano when I was seven years old.

✓ My dream is to be a pianist because I started playing the piano when I was seven years old.

Original sentence omits the infinitive 'to be' after 'dream' and repeats 'I'. It also uses 'play' with a past time expression, so past simple 'started playing' or 'have played' is needed; 'the piano' is the correct noun phrase. Suggestion: use 'My dream is to be a pianist' and 'I started playing the piano when I was seven.'

× Playing piano is my favorite things.

✓ Playing the piano is my favorite thing.

Count noun agreement error: 'things' (plural) does not match singular subject 'Playing the piano'. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'piano'. Suggestion: use singular 'thing' with 'my favorite' or say 'one of my favorite things.'

× I was interest in teacher math teacher because I'm I was good at math so I have teached with my classmates.

✓ I was interested in becoming a math teacher because I was good at math, so I taught with my classmates.

Multiple issues: 'interest' should be past participle 'interested' after 'was'; word order 'teacher math teacher' is incorrect—use 'becoming a math teacher' or 'a math teacher'; 'I'm I was' is repetition; 'have teached' is wrong past form—use 'taught'. Suggestion: 'I was interested in becoming a math teacher because I was good at math, so I taught with my classmates.'

× Yes, I think dreams have special meaning. Umm my dream is math teacher so I practicing. I am practicing math study.

✓ Yes, I think dreams have special meanings. Umm, my dream is to be a math teacher, so I am practicing. I am studying math.

'Meaning' should be plural 'meanings' when speaking generally. 'My dream is math teacher' needs 'to be a' before the profession. 'I practicing' misses auxiliary 'am'. 'I am practicing' is vague; use 'I am studying math' for clarity. Suggestion: ensure correct articles and auxiliary verbs ('am practicing', 'studying math').

× Yes, I want MMM my dream is to be a math teacher so I hope to pass my.

✓ Yes, I want my dream to come true. My dream is to be a math teacher, so I hope to pass my exams.

Original is fragmented and contains 'MMM' filler. 'I want my dream is to be...' is ungrammatical; use 'I want my dream to come true' or 'My dream is to be...'. 'I hope to pass my' is incomplete—likely 'exams' or 'courses' needed. Suggestion: remove filler sounds and complete the object, e.g., 'pass my exams.'