Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Avoid spelling errors (dream, time) and unnecessary hesitation. For example, say whether you usually remember dreams and give a specific frequency or example.

예시: Yes, I can remember some of my dreams. For instance, I often recall dreams I had last week, especially when they are vivid or emotional.

제안: Speak clearly and organize your answer: state whether you share dreams, then give a concrete reason and one clear example. Avoid unclear words (deem, Aryan) and gender references that don't match. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

예시: Yes, I often share my dreams with friends because we enjoy discussing unusual ideas. For example, last month I told a friend about a dream involving aliens and we talked about what it might mean.

제안: Answer directly and give a clear reason and a specific example. Use past tense correctly and avoid confusion of pronouns and words (deem → dream, fate → details). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I think some dreams can have personal meaning because they reflect our emotions. For example, I once dreamed my father, who passed away years ago, which made me realize I still miss him.

제안: Give a direct statement about whether you want to achieve your dreams, then add a specific plan or reason. Use precise vocabulary (dream vs. dream come true) and avoid trailing off. Keep it to one clear supporting detail with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

예시: Yes, I want to make my dream come true because I plan to move to Australia to study and work. For example, I am saving money and looking into university programs there.

× I can remember my team a few time, however almost I forget about.

✓ I can remember my dreams a few times, but I almost forget them.

The student used 'team' instead of 'dreams' (likely a word choice error) and 'time' should be plural 'times' for repeated occurrences. Also pronoun/reference and conjunction needed correction: 'however almost I forget about' is ungrammatical; use 'but I almost forget them.' Use plural for countable repeated occurrences and match pronoun to plural noun.

× Yes I do. For example, uh, when I deem about alien or God, I tend to share with my friend because we are interested about Aryan, Yes, I like to share her.

✓ Yes, I do. For example, when I dream about aliens or God, I tend to share with my friends because we are interested in such topics. Yes, I like to share them.

Multiple pronoun and reference errors: 'my friend' should be 'my friends' to match 'we'. 'We are interested about' should be 'interested in'. 'Aryan' appears to be an incorrect word choice; replaced with 'such topics'. 'I like to share her' misuses the pronoun 'her' for dreams; use 'them' for plural noun 'dreams'. Also corrected verb 'deem' to 'dream' and pluralized 'aliens'.

× Yes I do for example umm many years ago I deemed about my father she part away many year.

✓ Yes, I did. For example, many years ago I dreamed about my father; he passed away many years earlier.

Tense and verb form errors: use past tense 'did' to respond about past events. 'Deemed' is wrong; correct past of 'dream' is 'dreamed' (or 'dreamt'). 'She part away' is incorrect pronoun and verb; use 'he passed away'. Also pluralize 'years'.

× I can't remember fate exactly. Is my team very special meaning for?

✓ I can't remember it exactly. Does my dream have a special meaning?

Original sentences are ungrammatical and unclear. 'I can't remember fate exactly' likely intended 'it' not 'fate'. Rephrase question to 'Does my dream have a special meaning?' to use correct subject-verb order and noun phrase. Ensure pronoun 'it' refers to 'dream'.

× Yes, I want to make my dream come to uh, for example, uh, currently I deem about Australia many time because I want to go Australia and I.

✓ Yes, I want to make my dream come true. For example, currently I dream about Australia many times because I want to go to Australia.

Idiomatic expression is 'make my dream come true' not 'come to'. Use correct verb 'dream' (not 'deem') and plural 'many times'. Also include preposition 'to' before place names: 'go to Australia'. Removed incomplete trailing 'and I'.