Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve clarity and grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating whether you remember dreams, then give one specific dream with concise supporting details. Use correct tense, prepositions and word order, and avoid redundant fragments. Keep it to 2–4 sentences and link ideas with simple connectors (for example, “for example,” or “also”).

예시: Yes, I can remember some dreams. For example, I often dream that I am standing on the roof of a beautiful building in a Thai city, looking over the streets. I enjoy these dreams because the view feels peaceful and comfortable.

제안: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a direct statement, then explain who you share dreams with and give a brief specific example of a conversation. Use linking words such as “because” or “so” to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I do. I usually share my dreams with close friends because we like comparing our experiences. For example, last week I told a friend about a dream I had and she said she had a very similar dream, which led to a long conversation about what the dreams might mean.

제안: Clarify and refine the reasoning. Provide a clear opinion and one or two concise reasons with a linking word like “because” or “for example.” Avoid informal contractions and incorrect grammar. Be specific about what kinds of meanings you think dreams have.

예시: Yes, I think dreams can have special meanings because they often reflect our thoughts and emotions. For example, if you worry about an exam you may dream about failing, while thinking positively about a goal might lead to pleasant dreams that motivate you.

제안: Provide a clearer structure: state your desire directly, explain why, then add a realistic comment about obstacles and a hopeful closing. Use complete sentences and avoid informal phrasing like “gonna.” Be specific about which dreams are realistic and which seem distant.

예시: Yes, I want to make my dreams come true because they represent important goals for me. However, some of my dreams, such as moving abroad, feel quite distant because of money and time constraints. Despite that, I hope to achieve them step by step by saving and improving my skills.

× I remember the theme that I had is I on the beautiful building in the city of Thailand.

✓ I remember the dream I had: I was on a beautiful building in a city in Thailand.

The sentence mixes wrong tense and structure. Use past simple 'was' for a past dream (present tense 'is' is incorrect) and correct word order 'I was on a beautiful building' and preposition 'in a city in Thailand'. Also 'theme' is better as 'dream' here. Suggestion: use past tense verbs for past events and place modifiers after the noun.

× I really like the city.

✓ I really like that city.

The original is grammatically acceptable but adding 'that' clarifies which city is meant (the one in the dream). This improves specificity and cohesion with previous sentence.

× How see we lie how the comfy.

✓ It was so beautiful and comfortable to see.

The original is ungrammatical and unclear. Rephrase using clear subject and verb: 'It was so beautiful and comfortable to see.' Use past tense 'was' to describe the dream and proper adjective order. Suggestion: form complete clauses with subject + verb + complement.

× Yes I do, I always share my dream with other friends that quite close for to me so we have exchange conversation like how the conversation to exchange about our dream and my close friend also have the same dream with.

✓ Yes, I do. I always share my dreams with close friends, so we exchange conversations about our dreams. One of my close friends also had the same dream.

Multiple issues: plural 'dreams' fits habitual action (Grammar problem type 1), incorrect pronouns and relative clause ('that quite close for to me' -> 'close friends'), wrong prepositions ('with' placement), and sentence fragments. Use 'exchange conversations about' and past simple 'had' for a specific dream match. Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, use plural nouns for habitual actions, and correct prepositions and verb tenses.

× I think dreams have special meanings because when you think a lot about something, you will dream about that as well.

✓ I think dreams have special meanings because when you think a lot about something, you will dream about it as well.

Use pronoun 'it' rather than 'that' for clarity and naturalness in this context. Tenses are acceptable (present general truth), so only correction is pronoun choice. Suggestion: use 'it' after 'about' to refer to the previously mentioned thing.

× So if you think a lot about the good thing, your dream gonna happen with the good dream.

✓ So if you think a lot about good things, you are more likely to have positive dreams.

Informal contraction 'gonna' is inappropriate; replace with 'are more likely to'. Use plural 'good things' for generality and 'positive dreams' is clearer. Also change awkward 'your dream happen with the good dream' to a natural expression. Suggestion: avoid slang, use 'more likely to' for probability and pluralize when speaking generally.

× Yes I do, because I always dream about the good thing for me, so I really want my dream come too.

✓ Yes, I do, because I always dream about good things for me, so I really want my dreams to come true.

Use plural 'dreams' for recurring dreams, and the correct infinitive construction 'to come true' instead of 'come'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'to come true' for expressing desire that dreams become reality.

× But I don't know some of my dream really far away.

✓ But I know some of my dreams are really far away.

Use present simple 'are' to describe the state, plural 'dreams' for multiple items, and correct word order. The original 'I don't know' is awkward here; change to 'I know' with 'are really far away' to express distance or improbability. Suggestion: choose verbs that match intended meaning and use plural nouns for repeated items.

× But I hope it's gonna happen one day.

✓ But I hope it will happen one day.

Replace informal 'gonna' with the correct future form 'will'. 'It will happen' is the standard future tense. Suggestion: avoid slang in formal speech and use 'will' or 'may' depending on certainty.