Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give the method and one brief reason. Use linking words and avoid repetition.

예시: Yes, I can remember many of my dreams now. A friend taught me to write them down immediately after waking, and this habit helps me retain details because memory fades quickly after sleep.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence then give two contrasting examples with linking words. Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (tense and word choice).

예시: It depends on the dream. If it is funny, I usually tell the person involved because it lightens the mood, but if it's a nightmare I keep it to myself since it's private and disturbing.

제안: Be careful with grammar and organization. Start with a clear opinion, then give a reason and a brief example or reference. Use accurate names and avoid fragmented sentences.

예시: I don't think every dream has a special meaning, but some probably do. For example, psychologists like Jung argue that dreams can reflect unconscious thoughts, so certain recurring dreams may reveal hidden worries.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence, then give specific steps or a short plan to show realism. Fix tense and phrasing for fluency.

예시: Yes, I want to make that dream come true. I plan to save money, look for job opportunities in New York, and improve my professional skills so my sister and I can move there within a few years.

× Yes I can, however I didn't use to remember my dreams but a friend of mine taught me a method and which really helped me remembering my dreams and the method is.

✓ Yes, I can; however, I didn't used to remember my dreams, but a friend of mine taught me a method which really helped me remember my dreams, and the method is: write your dreams right after you wake up.

Error: incorrect use of 'use to' and incorrect verb form after 'helped'. 'Did not use to' should be 'didn't used to' in informal speech, but more commonly 'didn't used to' is written as 'didn't use to'—however native usage prefers 'didn't used to' for past habitual absence. More importantly, 'helped me remembering' is incorrect; after 'help' the base form 'remember' is required. Also 'and which' is a misplaced relative pronoun; 'which' should directly follow the noun it modifies. Suggestion: use 'helped me remember' and restructure the sentence for clarity, add punctuation and replace 'when you wake up' with the more natural 'after you wake up.'

× Write your dreams right after when you wake up.

✓ Write your dreams down immediately after you wake up.

Error: missing particle and awkward phrasing. 'Write your dreams' should be 'write your dreams down' (phrasal verb). 'Right after when you wake up' is ungrammatical; use 'after you wake up' or 'as soon as you wake up.' Suggestion: use 'write your dreams down immediately after you wake up.'

× It helps remembering details.

✓ It helps to remember details.

Error: after 'helps' the infinitive 'to remember' or bare infinitive is required; 'remembering' (gerund) is not correct here. Suggestion: use 'It helps to remember details' or 'It helps me remember details.'

× Whenever I had a funny dream, umm especially about someone, I would like to share with that especially person.

✓ Whenever I have a funny dream, especially about someone, I like to share it with that person.

Errors: tense mismatch—use present simple 'have' and 'like' for habitual actions; awkward placement of 'especially' and 'with that especially person' is incorrect word order. Use 'share it with that person.' Suggestion: use 'Whenever I have a funny dream... I like to share it with that person.'

× But if I had a nightmare, I'd better keep it to myself and and not very. Eager to, uh, share it with anyone.

✓ But if I have a nightmare, I'd rather keep it to myself and not be eager to share it with anyone.

Errors: tense inconsistency—use present for typical behavior; 'I'd better' is used for advice, 'I'd rather' expresses preference. The phrase 'not very. Eager to, uh, share' is fragmented and incorrect word order. Suggestion: use 'I'd rather keep it to myself and not be eager to share it with anyone.' Remove fillers.

× Not all the dreams, but I do believe that some of them contains a deep and especially meanings, and I know that some specialists can interpret them.

✓ Not all dreams, but I do believe that some of them contain deep and special meanings, and I know that some specialists can interpret them.

Errors: 'Not all the dreams' should be 'Not all dreams' or 'Not all of the dreams'; subject-verb agreement: 'some of them contains' should be 'some of them contain'. 'Especially meanings' is incorrect; likely intended 'special meanings' or 'especially deep meanings.' Suggestion: use 'contain deep and special meanings.'

× Furthermore, some psychologists, such as Young have told that our dreams have. Relation to our unconsciousness.

✓ Furthermore, some psychologists, such as Jung, have said that our dreams have a relation to our unconscious mind.

Errors: punctuation and sentence fragmentation ('have.' and 'Relation ...'). The name likely 'Jung' not 'Young.' 'Have told that' is awkward; use 'have said that.' 'Unconsciousness' is a noun but 'unconscious mind' is more natural. Suggestion: restructure into one sentence and use 'a relation to our unconscious mind' or 'are related to our unconscious.'

× I always had a dream of living in New York City with my sister and I'm going to work really hard for it and put all my efforts in it and to make it come true someday.

✓ I've always had a dream of living in New York City with my sister, and I'm going to work really hard and put all my effort into making it come true someday.

Errors: tense and article issues—'I always had a dream' should be present perfect 'I've always had a dream' to express a continuing desire. 'Put all my efforts in it' is awkward; use 'put all my effort into making it come true.' Also combine clauses and remove unnecessary 'for it' and extra 'to.' Suggestion: use present perfect for ongoing states and 'put effort into making (something) come true.'