Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 内容方面：回答有主题句（想当警察），但细节不够连贯，时间表达和语法错误较多，影响理解。 表达方面：句子过长且包含多处语法错误（动词时态、主谓一致、冠词和代词使用），需要用更自然的连接词和更准确的句子结构。 改进建议：用一到两句简单清晰地交代想当警察的原因，然后补充一两句具体细节（比如祖父穿制服的样子、当时的感受），控制在不超过5句，注意时态一致和主谓一致。

예시: When I was a child I wanted to be a policeman because my grandfather once picked me up from kindergarten wearing his police uniform. I remember everyone in class was excited to see him, and I felt proud and fascinated by his uniform and stories.

제안: 内容方面：回答没有直接清晰地回应问题（是否分享他人或对他人梦想感兴趣），表达模糊且情感极端。 表达方面：存在多处语法错误（主谓一致、时态、否定结构），缺少连接词与具体细节，句子过于绝对化。 改进建议：先明确回答“通常不分享/不太关心他人梦想”，然后给一两个具体原因或例子（例如忙于工作或现实压力），并用连接词使逻辑清晰，保持语法正确。

예시: I don't usually share my dreams with others because I prefer keeping them private. Also, I am quite busy with work and family, so I rarely have time to discuss dreams with friends.

제안: 内容方面：观点模糊且带有主观情绪，未直接回答“是否有特殊意义”，而是讨论实现可能性。 表达方面：语法问题明显（不定式、从句结构、词序），缺少具体论证和连接词，细节不充分。 改进建议：首先明确回答（例如：有时有，有时没有），然后用一到两个理由支持观点（比如文化背景、个人经历），并举例说明，保持句子简洁并注意语法。

예시: I believe dreams can have special meanings sometimes, because they reflect our hopes and fears. For example, when I kept dreaming about work stress, it made me realize I needed to change my routine.

제안: 内容方面：回答直接且连贯，表达了愿望和现实感知，但细节还可以更具体。 表达方面：存在语法和词汇搭配问题（例如“have a lot of money”可更自然，“real unrealistic”重复），建议用具体计划或障碍来丰富回答，使用连接词表达转折。 改进建议：明确表达愿望，然后说明为什么觉得难实现和为实现所做的努力或可能的步骤，用一两句具体细节来增强说服力，句子控制在5句内并注意语法。

예시: Yes, I still want to make my dreams come true. I would like to live abroad and improve my financial situation, although I know it will be difficult. To work towards it, I am saving money and learning English to increase my chances of finding a job overseas.

× When I was a kid, I wanted to be a policeman 'cause Once Upon a time my grandfather took me from my kindergarten.

✓ When I was a kid, I wanted to be a policeman because once upon a time my grandfather took me from my kindergarten.

句子中應使用過去式敘述童年經歷（wanted, took 都正確），但原句有標點與大小寫錯誤（'cause 非正式縮寫且 Once Upon a time 不應大寫每個詞）。建議使用 because 或 because 的縮寫口語形式，並將 once upon a time 小寫以保持書寫一致性。

× He wear a his police uniform.

✓ He wore his police uniform.

此處描述過去發生的事，主語 He 與過去式動詞需一致。原句用現在式 wear，不符合時態，也多了一個不必要的冠詞 a。正確為過去式 wore，並去掉多餘的 a。

× Everybody in my class was thrilled and they excited.

✓ Everybody in my class was thrilled and they were excited.

原句中前半句使用過去式 was thrilled，後半句缺少動詞 were，使結構不完整。應在 they 與形容詞 excited 之間加上系動詞 were，與主語數一致且時態匹配。

× If I remember rightly is not rare thing to do.

✓ If I remember rightly, it's not a rare thing to do.

原句缺少主語和助動詞，語序混亂。應使用固定結構 If I remember rightly, 主從句用逗號分開，後半句需要 it as subject and 's 或 is，並加不定冠詞 a。

× I doesn't care about others dream and my dream is fading out so far away.

✓ I don't care about others' dreams and my dream is fading away.

主語 I 與否定助動詞應為 don't 而非 doesn't；others dream 應為 others' dreams 表示所有格且數應為複數；短語 fading out so far away 語序與用法不自然，常見表達為 fading away（逐漸消失）。

× I'm a middle-aged man, I'm living a reality world so I can't dream.

✓ I'm a middle-aged man; I'm living in the real world, so I can't dream.

living a reality world 語法錯誤，應為 living in the real world 表示處於現實世界。加入分號或連詞改善句子連接及停頓。同時 real 比 reality 在此作形容詞更自然。

× I think for the most people it can't be come true because we are living in China.

✓ I think for most people it can't come true because we are living in China.

be come true 是錯誤搭配，正確用法為 come true（夢想實現）。此外 for the most people 應為 for most people，定冠詞 the 不需要。

× There's we have struggle and strive to survive.

✓ We have to struggle and strive to survive.

原句中 There's we have 是錯誤結構；使用 We have to struggle and strive to survive 更符合語法並清楚表達“我們必須奮鬥以求生存”。可以根據語氣選擇 must 或 have to。

× It's not that easy to have a dream.

✓ It's not that easy to have a dream.

句子本身語法正確；可能的問題是語義上的 quantifier 不需要修改。如果想更自然，可說 It's not that easy to hold on to a dream（更貼切地表達堅持夢想不易）。

× nowadays my dream is living overseas and have a lot of money, but that's real unrealistic.

✓ Nowadays my dream is to live overseas and to have a lot of money, but that's really unrealistic.

原句中 my dream is living overseas 用法不自然，應使用不定式 to live 表示願望；have 需與主語一致加 to；real unrealistic 應為 really unrealistic（用副詞修飾形容詞）。此外 nowadays 常用於現在時，但表達願望仍可使用。

× I know it's hard to come true, but I still have the dream.

✓ I know it's hard for it to come true, but I still have the dream.

短語 hard to come true 需要明確主語，可用 for it to come true 或把句子改為 It's hard to make it come true。原句缺少介詞短語導致結構不夠清晰。