Mirrors— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail with a linking word. Avoid repetition and minor grammar errors (e.g., 'looking at mirror' → 'looking in the mirror').

예시: Yes, I do — I look in the mirror almost every day. Over the past few years I’ve become more accepting of myself, so checking my appearance now boosts my confidence rather than causing anxiety.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give one clear, specific reason with a linking word. Reduce long compound sentences and correct small coherence issues (e.g., clarify why cats breaking mirrors is good).

예시: Yes, I have bought several mirrors. For example, I keep small mirrors on my desk, but because my cats sometimes break them, I now prefer inexpensive ones so I won't mind replacing them.

제안: Good direct answer and specific detail. To improve, vary vocabulary (e.g., 'touch up' instead of 'fix') and use a linking word to show purpose. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I usually carry a small compact mirror when I go out, because I like to touch up my lipstick and gloss to look fresh throughout the day.

제안: Organize the response: give a balanced opinion with one positive and one negative reason, using linking words ('however', 'but'). Correct grammar ('mirrors are') and avoid repetition ('magnificent touch' twice). Be specific about what 'strange things' means to clarify your point.

예시: Yes, mirrors can really enhance a room because they reflect light and make the space feel larger; however, I wouldn't use too many because excessive reflections can feel unsettling and create confusing images at night.

× I'd say that definitely yes, most likely because I started to accept myself.

✓ I'd definitely say yes, most likely because I have started to accept myself.

The original mixes past simple 'started' with present context 'I would say', causing tense inconsistency. Using present perfect 'have started' connects past change to the present situation. Also word order improved for naturalness.

× Before I used to kind of hate myself and didn't like my appearance.

✓ Before, I used to kind of hate myself and didn't like my appearance.

This sentence is mostly correct; a comma after 'Before' clarifies time reference. 'Used to' correctly expresses past habit; no tense change required.

× But after some time I gained some confidence which helped me to be better at everything I do and looking at mirror became constant.

✓ But after some time I gained some confidence, which helped me be better at everything I do, and looking at the mirror became constant.

Missing commas cause run-on and reduced clarity. 'Helped me to be' is acceptable but 'helped me be' is more natural. 'Looking at mirror' needs definite article 'the mirror'. Tense sequence is OK (past event 'gained' with present result 'I do').

× Yes, I've bought many mirrors in my life.

✓ Yes, I've bought many mirrors in my life.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It correctly uses present perfect to describe life experience.

× However, I have a lot of cats and they've broken my mirrors, which is actually a good thing sometimes because I buy small mirrors and place them by my desk where I work and that really distracts me because I tend to sometimes pick at my face or do makeup at unnecessary times.

✓ However, I have a lot of cats and they've broken my mirrors, which is sometimes actually a good thing because I buy small mirrors and place them by my desk where I work, and they really distract me because I sometimes pick at my face or apply makeup at unnecessary times.

Pronoun 'that' referred ambiguously; replace with 'they' (mirrors) for clarity. 'Sometimes' placement adjusted for natural flow. 'Do makeup' is non-idiomatic; use 'apply makeup'. Commas added to separate clauses.

× Yes, I always carry a small mirror with me whenever I go out somewhere.

✓ Yes, I always carry a small mirror with me whenever I go out.

'Go out somewhere' is redundant; 'go out' is sufficient. Present simple 'carry' correctly expresses habitual action.

× I like to fix my lips and apply lip pencil and gloss to look fresh every time.

✓ I like to tidy my lips and apply lip pencil and gloss to look fresh every time.

'Fix my lips' is awkward; 'tidy' or 'touch up' is more natural. Alternatively 'touch up my lipstick' could be used. The tense and structure are otherwise fine.

× Yes, I would love to because mirror are a magnificent touch, magnificent touch to your room and it really boosts up the decorative side of the room.

✓ Yes, I would love to because mirrors are a magnificent touch to a room and they really boost the decorative side of the room.

Use plural 'mirrors' to agree with 'are'. Remove duplicated phrase. Use indefinite article 'a room' for general statement and 'they' as plural pronoun. 'Boost up' simplified to 'boost' for naturalness.

× But overall, I don't like the appearance.

✓ But overall, I don't like their appearance.

Ambiguity: 'the appearance' needs a clear subject. 'Their appearance' specifies mirrors. Use present simple 'don't like' for current preference.

× If I have too much mirrors in my room, it kind of makes me afraid because you tend to see strange things there.

✓ If I have too many mirrors in my room, it kind of makes me afraid because you tend to see strange things in them.

'Too much mirrors' is incorrect quantifier use; 'too many mirrors' is correct for countable noun. 'It kind of makes me afraid' is acceptable, but specify 'in them' to refer to mirrors rather than 'there'.