Mirrors— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid repetition and exaggerated phrases like "every minute". Use linking words (for example, "usually" or "often") and give a realistic frequency and short reason.

예시: Yes, I do. I usually check myself in the mirror a few times a day, especially in the morning and before I go out, because I like to make sure my hair and clothes look tidy.

제안: Give a direct, complete response and avoid trailing off. Use one clear sentence to answer, then add a short reason or example. Correct basic grammar ("bought" not "brought") and avoid filler words like "uh."

예시: No, I haven't bought any mirrors. I usually receive them as gifts from friends or family, such as a decorative wall mirror I got for my birthday last year.

제안: This answer is fairly clear but can be made more concise and natural. Use a topic sentence, then a brief reason and a linking word. Avoid redundant words like "small tiny" and improve grammar: "carry with me" and "check it."

예시: No, I don't. I don't own a compact mirror, so I usually use my phone's front camera to check my appearance when needed.

제안: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Avoid vague or awkward phrasing like "something everyone loves to. Keep" and unnecessary gender comments. Provide one or two concrete benefits of using mirrors in decoration and link ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I would. Mirrors can make a room look bigger and brighter, so I would place a large mirror opposite a window to reflect light and create a more spacious feeling.

× Yes, I love looking at myself in the mirror and it's quite every minute or maybe every hour because I am kind of obsessed with myself and I actually love looking at myself because I think I'm so pretty.

✓ Yes, I love looking at myself in the mirror, and I do it almost every minute or maybe every hour because I am somewhat obsessed with myself, and I actually enjoy it because I think I'm very pretty.

The original sentence uses 'it's quite every minute' which is ungrammatical. This is a present tense habitual action, so use 'I do it' or 'I look' to indicate frequency. 'Kind of' is informal; 'somewhat' is clearer. 'Love looking at myself because I think I'm so pretty' is repetitive; change to 'enjoy it' and 'very pretty' for clarity. Also add commas to separate clauses for readability.

× No, as much as I remember I never have brought any mirrors, but uh, I really love receiving gifts, especially mirrors from others and one day my.

✓ No, as far as I remember I have never bought any mirrors, but I really love receiving gifts, especially mirrors from others.

The phrase 'as much as I remember' is incorrect; use 'as far as I remember'. 'Never have brought' misuses 'brought' (past participle of bring) when 'bought' (past participle of buy) is required. Also the sentence fragment 'and one day my.' is incomplete and should be removed. Use present perfect 'I have never bought' to indicate experience up to now.

× No, because I don't have a small tiny mirror to carry with myself so I just look at my front camera phone and if anything goes wrong I will check from that.

✓ No, because I don't have a small mirror to carry with me, so I just use my phone's front camera, and if anything looks wrong I will check it there.

The preposition 'with myself' is incorrect; use 'with me'. 'Small tiny' is redundant; choose one adjective. 'Front camera phone' is awkward; 'phone's front camera' is correct possessive form. 'Check from that' is ungrammatical; use 'check it there' or 'check it with that'. Also adjust tense/wording for naturalness.

× Yes I would. I would definitely love to use mirrors to decorate my room because it's something everyone loves to. Keep and moreover mirror is kind of thing that is really needed for girls and boys for both genders.

✓ Yes, I would. I would definitely love to use mirrors to decorate my room because many people like them. Moreover, mirrors are useful for both girls and boys.

The original mixes awkward phrasing and incorrect structure. 'It's something everyone loves to. Keep' is ungrammatical and unclear; replace with 'many people like them.' 'Mirror is kind of thing that is really needed for girls and boys for both genders' is redundant and awkward; use 'mirrors are useful for both girls and boys.' Maintain present tense and simplify wording for clarity.