Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear, concise direct response then support it with one or two specific reasons. Avoid contradictions (saying you prefer history but then mentioning higher grades in science) and unnecessary phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and keep to 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I don't like science very much because I find history more engaging and meaningful. For example, I enjoy learning about past events and people, which feels more relevant to my interests than studying science.

제안: Answer directly with a clear time reference and one brief detail about how you learned it. Avoid formal or unusual verbs like 'commenced' and remove filler words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'when' for coherence.

예시: I started learning basic science when I was about three years old, mostly through simple experiments and children's programs. Later at school, I learned more structured science lessons which built on those early experiences.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence naming the subject, then add a specific reason why you find it interesting. Avoid vague expressions like 'by the consequence of high grade' and focus on concrete aspects of the subject.

예시: Physics is the most interesting science subject to me because I enjoy understanding how things move and why they behave that way. For example, I liked experiments with forces and motion in school because they made abstract ideas feel real.

제안: Be specific about the activities, describe one clearly and explain what you learned or why it was interesting. Use past tense correctly and avoid ambiguous phrasing like 'cut it out' and 'find something about moving.'

예시: I once did a simple biology experiment where I dissected a fish to learn about its muscles and how they help movement. It was interesting because I could see directly how the parts worked together to swim.

제안: Start with a clear short answer, then give a specific reason and an example. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'conducive to my historical basic research.' Keep it natural and concise, 2–3 sentences.

예시: No, I usually prefer history TV programs because they help me learn more about past events and the context behind them. For instance, I often watch documentaries about ancient civilizations to support my own reading and projects.

제안: Answer directly and provide a clear reason or example. Avoid long uncertain statements and filler words. Use correct vocabulary (e.g. 'science museums') and explain who visits and why in one or two sentences.

예시: Yes, many Chinese families visit science museums, especially on weekends, because they are educational and fun for children. For example, parents often take their kids to hands-on exhibitions so they can learn about technology and nature.

× No, I'm not very interested in science. I've always preferred history rather than science because I find it more engaging and so stirring, and I tended to get higher grades in science, but the consequence of the importance in subject.

✓ No, I'm not very interested in science. I've always preferred history to science because I find it more engaging and more stimulating, and I tended to get higher grades in science, but that was due to the way subjects were emphasized.

Errors: 'preferred history rather than science' is incorrect collocation; use 'prefer X to Y' (Grammar problem type 6 Present tense issue applies because 'I've always preferred' needs correct preposition). 'so stirring' is informal/awkward; use 'more stimulating' (adjective use). 'the consequence of the importance in subject' is ungrammatical and unclear; rephrase to 'that was due to the way subjects were emphasized' to convey cause. Suggestion: use 'prefer A to B', choose precise adjectives, and rephrase unclear noun phrases into clear clauses.

× I commenced to learn about science from an early age. It was about 3 years old.

✓ I began learning about science at an early age. It was when I was about three years old.

Errors: 'commenced to learn' is formal but awkward in speech; 'began learning' is more natural (Grammar problem type 5 Past tense issue). 'It was about 3 years old' is ungrammatical because 'it' has no referent and age needs 'when I was'. Use 'when I was about three years old'. Suggestion: use natural past-tense verbs and correct subject for age expressions.

× When I was three years old, I started to learn about science By the consequence of uh subjects in school, I have had to learn about science to improve my.

✓ When I was three years old, I started to learn about science. As a result of school subjects, I have had to study science more to improve my understanding.

Errors: run-on/fragment and unclear phrase 'By the consequence of uh subjects in school' (Grammar problem type 26 Sentence structure errors). 'I have had to learn about science to improve my.' is incomplete—what to improve? Add 'understanding'. Suggestion: split into two sentences, replace awkward phrase with 'as a result of school subjects', and complete the idea.

× Well, from my standpoint, physics is the most amusing to me.

✓ Well, from my standpoint, physics is the most interesting to me.

Error: 'amusing' implies entertainment; for academic interest 'interesting' is appropriate (Grammar problem type 13 Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Suggestion: choose adjectives that match meaning; use 'interesting' or 'fascinating' for intellectual appeal.

× By the consequence of high grade, it can bring me a lot of advantage in science so that I'm able to be praised by my teachers.

✓ Because of my high grades, I gained many advantages in science, such as being praised by my teachers.

Errors: 'By the consequence of high grade' is ungrammatical; use 'Because of my high grades' (Grammar problem type 12 Incorrect use of pronouns overlaps but core is ungrammatical phrase). 'it can bring me a lot of advantage' wrong subject and awkward 'a lot of advantage' — use 'I gained many advantages'. 'I'm able to be praised' unnatural; use 'such as being praised'. Suggestion: use clear causal connectors and correct noun phrases.

× Well, there are a lot of things I have done with science. I for instance, once I have done an experiment, it's about a fish. So I cut it out and find something about moving. It's quite interesting to do so.

✓ Well, there are a lot of things I have done with science. For instance, once I did an experiment with a fish: I dissected it to study its movement. It was quite interesting to do.

Errors: tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms (Grammar problem type 8 Verb + -ing form and 5 Past tense issue). 'I for instance, once I have done' is ungrammatical — use 'For instance, once I did'. 'cut it out' is awkward when describing dissection; use 'dissected'. 'find something about moving' should be 'study its movement'. Suggestion: keep past tense for past events, use precise verbs, and use noun phrases like 'its movement'.

× No. Is that I'm a big fan of watching history TV programs because it's conducive to my historical basic research. So I always tend to watch history TV programs rather than watching science TV.

✓ No. I'm a big fan of watching history TV programs because they are useful for my basic historical research. So I always tend to watch history programs rather than science programs.

Errors: 'Is that I'm' is ungrammatical; use 'I'm' (Grammar problem type 6 Present tense issue). 'it's conducive to my historical basic research' has wrong word order and agreement—use 'they are useful for my basic historical research'. Avoid repeating 'watching' unnecessarily. Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement and natural word order.

× Well, personally, yes, many Chinese people do often visit science music to, uh, tell their children to, uh, learn and apprehend more and more uh, into their debt. They must, uh, keep studying.

✓ Well, personally, yes, many Chinese people often visit science museums to encourage their children to learn and understand more. They feel children must keep studying.

Errors: 'science music' is a mispronunciation; should be 'science museums' (Grammar problem type 14 Incorrect use of quantifiers partly but primarily vocabulary). 'do often' acceptable but 'often' alone is better. 'apprehend more and more into their debt' is nonsensical; 'understand more' is correct. 'They must, uh, keep studying' unclear subject — clarify that parents feel children must keep studying. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary, simplify adverb placement, and clarify subjects.