Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar (use past tense and articles), make answer more concise and natural, and add a brief specific example. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes. My mother taught me to share when I was a child because she believed sharing shows care. For example, she encouraged me to lend toys to classmates so we could play together and learn to cooperate.

제안: Fix grammar and sentence flow, avoid repetition, and be specific about reasons. Use linking words to contrast what you do and do not share.

예시: I usually share electronic devices like my laptop or phone with close friends when they need them. However, I don’t share clothes for hygiene reasons, because personal items can be uncomfortable to lend.

제안: Use correct plural and articles, expand slightly with a reason and one more example, and connect ideas with a linking word.

예시: I think clothes are generally not suitable for sharing for hygiene reasons. Also, personal care items like toothbrushes or razors should never be shared to avoid infections.

제안: Make the sentence more natural and add a brief condition or context for sharing (when or why). Keep it concise and use past tense correctly.

예시: Yes. My father gave me a MacBook for my last birthday, and I’m happy to lend it to classmates when they need it for school projects.

제안: Use natural phrasing and simpler structure, avoid redundancy (repeat "share" and "firstly"), and give a short reason why you tell her first.

예시: I would tell my mother first because she’s very supportive and I always discuss important things with her. For instance, I called her right away when I passed my exams.

제안: Organize answer with a topic sentence and specific examples; correct phrasing ("trends on the Internet"). Use linking words to list types of news.

예시: With friends I share everyday news about our lives, plus academic updates and popular trends on the Internet, such as viral videos or new apps we’re using.

× When I was kid, my parents especially my mother teach me to share things because it shows our caring gesture.

✓ When I was a kid, my parents, especially my mother, taught me to share things because it shows our caring gesture.

Missing article 'a' before 'kid' is a singular/plural issue; 'teach' should be past tense 'taught' to agree with the past time reference 'When I was a kid.' Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a kid' and change verb to past tense when referring to past events.

× Apart from that, she believed that sharing is caring.

✓ Apart from that, she believed that sharing was caring.

The main clause 'she believed' is in the past, so the reported clause should also use past tense ('was') to maintain sequence of tenses. Suggestion: shift present 'is' to 'was' when reporting past beliefs.

× So yes, my mother taught me.

✓ So yes, my mother taught me.

This sentence is already correct; 'taught' correctly uses past tense. No change needed.

× I like to share my electronic things such as my laptop, my mobile phone to my with my friends.

✓ I like to share electronic items such as my laptop and my mobile phone with my friends.

'Electronic things' is awkward—use plural 'items'; remove extra 'my' and change 'to my with my friends' to 'with my friends.' Ensure parallel structure 'laptop and mobile phone.' Suggestion: use 'electronic items' and 'with my friends.'

× Apart from that I would definitely not.

✓ Apart from that, I definitely would not share other things.

Original fragment 'I would definitely not.' is incomplete and lacks an object; this is a sentence structure error. Provide the verb 'share' and object 'other things' to complete the thought. Suggestion: complete fragments by including the verb and object.

× I will not share my clothes for hygiene purpose.

✓ I will not share my clothes for hygiene reasons.

'Hygiene purpose' is incorrect collocation; use plural 'reasons' or the phrase 'for hygiene purposes.' Also 'will not' is acceptable for future refusal. Suggestion: use 'for hygiene reasons' or 'for hygiene purposes.'

× I think that cloth is not suitable for sharing because of hygiene purpose.

✓ I think that clothes are not suitable for sharing because of hygiene reasons.

Use plural 'clothes' rather than singular 'cloth' when speaking about garments; adjust verb agreement to 'are.' Replace 'hygiene purpose' with 'hygiene reasons.' Suggestion: use plural nouns and correct collocations.

× Yes, I have my latest MacBook which my father gifted me on my last birthday, so definitely I will share that.

✓ Yes, I have my latest MacBook which my father gifted me on my last birthday, so I will definitely share it.

Move adverb 'definitely' to a natural position and replace demonstrative 'that' with pronoun 'it' referring to MacBook. Tense usage is fine. Suggestion: place adverbs before main verb and use correct pronoun.

× I will share my good news with my mother like firstly I will inform her what good thing happened to me because she is my friend and I share everything with her.

✓ I will share my good news with my mother; first, I will inform her about the good thing that happened to me because she is my friend and I share everything with her.

Use 'first' instead of 'firstly' for spoken sequence; add preposition 'about' and relative structure 'that happened to me.' Replace comma splice with semicolon or separate sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'first' and 'inform her about' and correct relative clause order.

× We generally talk about our day-to-day life.

✓ We generally talk about our day-to-day lives.

Use plural 'lives' when referring to the day-to-day experiences of multiple people. Suggestion: pluralize nouns that refer to multiple subjects.

× Apart from that there are like in news we share about our academic things or any special trend that's going on Internet.

✓ Apart from that, we also share news about our academic work or any special trends that are going on on the Internet.

Original sentence is disfluent and has structural problems: 'there are like in news' is ungrammatical. Rephrase to 'we also share news about our academic work' and pluralize 'trends.' Add article 'the' before 'Internet' or 'on the Internet.' Suggestion: simplify and reorder to a clear subject-verb-object structure and use correct prepositions ('on the Internet').