Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Старайтесь говорить более грамотно и избегать пауз и повторов. Начинайте с четкого тематического предложения, затем добавляйте 1–2 поддерживающие детали с переходными словами. Исправьте времена (past simple) и согласование (taught, I didn’t like it).

예시: Yes. My parents taught me to share my belongings when I was a child. At first I didn’t like it, but over time I realised that sharing creates a friendlier atmosphere and helps people get along.

제안: Сократите повторения и используйте связки для структуры. Укажите конкретные примеры вместо общих фраз и используйте правильные формы множественного числа и артикли.

예시: I enjoy sharing knowledge and life experiences with my friends. For example, I often recommend films and explain why I liked them, which usually leads to interesting discussions.

제안: Говорите ясными предложениями без неверных слов и повторов. Используйте специфические примеры и простую структуру: утверждение + перечисление + причина. Исправьте лексику (personal information, keep private).

예시: I think personal information should not be shared. For example, bank cards, passwords and personal devices like phones or laptops should be kept private to avoid theft or fraud.

제안: Избегайте грамматических ошибок в настоящих и прошедших временах и повторов. Дайте одну-две конкретные детали и используйте связующие слова (for example, recently).

예시: Yes. Recently I often shared books and useful items with my friends. For example, I lent a novel to a classmate last week and recommended a new movie to another friend.

제안: Сократите паузы и дублирование, используйте связки для объяснения причины (because, so). Дайте полное, грамматически правильное предложение и одну причину.

예시: I would share good news with my mother because she is very supportive and always celebrates my achievements. She is the first person I think of when something good happens.

제안: Избегайте повторов и стройте ответ с темой и 2–3 конкретными примерами. Используйте связки (for example, such as) и правильные формы множественного числа.

예시: I usually share both personal and general news with my friends. For example, I tell them about my achievements, future plans and current events that interest us.

× Yeah, when I was a child, my parents, uh, teach me, uh, to share my belongings.

✓ Yeah, when I was a child, my parents taught me to share my belongings.

The verb should be in the past tense to match 'when I was a child'. 'Teach' is present; use past 'taught'. Use consistent past tense for completed past actions. Suggestion: Use simple past for actions completed in the past (subject + past form of verb).

× And at first time, I don't, uh, I, I didn't like it, but over time I realized it said sharing creates a better atmosphere and helps people get along.

✓ At first, I didn't like it, but over time I realized that sharing creates a better atmosphere and helps people get along.

Mixed tense and awkward phrasing. 'At first' is correct phrase; 'didn't' is past. Remove 'it said' and add 'that' to introduce the clause. Keep present tense in 'creates' and 'helps' because they are general truths. Suggestion: Use 'that' to introduce reported content and keep general statements in present simple.

× I, I really enjoy sharing, uh, sharing my knowledge, uh, life experiences and recommendation about movies, films, uh, with my friends and I really like it, uh, to share.

✓ I really enjoy sharing my knowledge, life experiences, and recommendations about movies with my friends, and I really like doing that.

Use plural 'recommendations' for countable items. Avoid repeating 'sharing'; use gerund 'sharing' once and then 'doing that' to avoid repetition. 'Films' and 'movies' are redundant; choose one. Suggestion: Use gerund once and pluralize countable nouns.

× I I think Adam said containing personal information are not suitable, suitable for sharing and for example, bank cards, passwords, phone and laptop, uh, should, uh, should remain provide provide.

✓ I think items containing personal information are not suitable for sharing; for example, bank cards, passwords, phones, and laptops should be kept private.

Sentence has pronoun/word errors and word repetition. 'Adam said' seems wrong; likely 'I think items containing...'. Use plural nouns and correct verb 'kept' for passive idea. 'Remain provide' is incorrect; use 'kept private'. Suggestion: Use clear subject 'items' and correct verb phrases like 'are not suitable' and 'should be kept private'.

× Yes I yes I often sharing my things with my friends and such as book, books and other useful useful things.

✓ Yes, I often share my things with my friends, such as books and other useful items.

Use base verb 'share' after subject for present simple habitual action, not 'sharing'. Remove duplicate words and use plural 'books' and 'items'. Suggestion: For habits use present simple (I share) and avoid repetition.

× And sometimes I recommended recommendation about movie.

✓ And sometimes I recommend movies.

Use present simple 'recommend' for habitual actions. 'Recommended recommendation' is redundant and wrong form; 'movie' should be plural or 'a movie'. Suggestion: Use simple structures: 'I recommend movies' or 'I recommend a movie'.

× Umm, the, uh, the first person, uh, I would like to, to share my, uh, good news, uh, with my mother and because, uh, it, uh, because she is very supportive and supportive and uh, I believe, uh, I believe she's genuinely happy for.

✓ The first person I would like to share my good news with is my mother because she is very supportive and I believe she is genuinely happy for me.

Awkward word order and repetition. Place 'the first person' with complement 'is my mother'. Remove repeated words and complete the phrase 'happy for me'. Suggestion: Use 'The first person I would like to share my good news with is...' and avoid double words.

× I usually share both personal and general news with my friends and for example, I tell I tell them about my achievements, future plans, goals and other current events.

✓ I usually share both personal and general news with my friends; for example, I tell them about my achievements, future plans, goals, and current events.

Remove repeated 'I tell'. Use present simple 'share' and 'tell' for habitual actions. Use commas for list and remove redundant 'other'. Suggestion: Keep present simple for regular actions and avoid repetition.