Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use correct grammar and clearer details. Start with a topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct mistakes (e.g., "yellow bicycle", "two blue" unclear, "attached 2 sideways" → "training wheels"). Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases like "how to write."

예시: Yes, I had a yellow bicycle when I was a child. It had blue handlebars and I attached training wheels at first to learn balance. Because of that I quickly improved my grip and confidence, and I enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood every afternoon.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then support with a specific reason and example. Use correct collocations ("popular" not "quite popular" repeatedly) and fix grammar ("economic reasons" or "because they are economical"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

예시: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many workers and students use motorbikes to commute, as they save fuel costs and are easier to park in busy cities.

× Yes I had a bicycle, it was of yellow colour, had two blue but I had additionally attached 2 sideways with it.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle; it was yellow, with two blue wheels, and I had additionally attached two sidewheels to it.

Multiple past tense and sentence-structure problems: missing commas and connectors made fragments; 'was of yellow colour' is wordy — use 'was yellow'; 'had two blue' missing noun 'wheels'; '2' should be spelled 'two' in formal writing; 'sideways' is incorrect word choice — use 'sidewheels' or 'training wheels' and use preposition 'to it'. Suggest writing clear clauses, include nouns after adjectives, spell out small numbers, and use correct nouns and prepositions.

× It helped me in bicycling and learning the grip and how to write.

✓ It helped me learn to ride a bicycle and to develop my grip and writing skills.

Awkward verb forms and collocations: 'helped me in bicycling' is unnatural — use 'helped me learn to ride a bicycle'; 'learning the grip and how to write' mixes unrelated actions and uses 'grip' without context; 'how to write' likely refers to handwriting, so use 'writing skills'. Use infinitive forms after 'help' (help someone do something). Ensure parallel structure for multiple items.

× I enjoyed riding bike.

✓ I enjoyed riding my bike.

Missing determiner and slight register issue: 'riding bike' requires an article or possessive ('my bike' or 'riding a bike'). Add appropriate determiner to form a grammatical noun phrase.

× Gift bikes are quite important means of transportation.

✓ Bicycles are an important means of transportation.

'Gift bikes' is unclear and likely incorrect; use 'bicycles' or 'bikes'. Also use singular 'an important means' or plural 'important means' with article: choose 'an important means'. Ensure correct noun choice and article usage.

× In my country most of the people prefer riding bikes because of economic economically variable and it is quite popular.

✓ In my country, most people prefer riding bikes because of economic factors, and they are quite popular.

Multiple issues: 'most of the people' is wordier; use 'most people'. 'because of economic economically variable' is ungrammatical — likely intended 'economic reasons' or 'economic factors'. 'it is quite popular' mismatches plural subject; use 'they are quite popular' referring to bikes. Fix quantifier usage, choose correct noun phrase 'economic factors', and ensure subject-verb agreement.