Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct grammar (past simple for childhood), and clarify unclear phrase like "It's sent to the Nan." Also limit to 3–4 sentences and use simple linking words if needed.

예시: Yes, I did. I learned to ride a bike when I was eight, and I still enjoy biking today. For example, I often cycle in the park on weekends because it helps me relax and stay fit.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, reduce hesitations, and support your point with one specific reason or example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" and finish the thought (avoid trailing off). Use more precise vocabulary such as "promote", "reduce pollution", and "motorbikes".

예시: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular because the government promotes cycling to reduce air pollution. For example, they have built more bike lanes and run campaigns encouraging people to choose bicycles instead of motorbikes.

× Yes I had I I was able to to ride on a bike when I was 8 years old and until now I I love biking. It's sent to the Nan.

✓ Yes, I had one. I learned to ride a bike when I was eight years old, and I still love biking now.

Multiple issues: repetition and filler words should be removed for clarity. 'I had' needs an object - 'one' clarifies 'a bike' (singular/plural reference). 'Was able to to ride' is awkward; use 'learned to ride' or 'could ride' in past tense. 'Until now I I love biking' mixes past and present; use 'I still love biking now' to express a habit continuing to the present. Also spell out numbers under ten in formal speech (eight). Overall keep tense consistent: past for when learned, present for current habit.

× It's sent to the Nan.

✓ It was sent to the man.

The original phrase is unclear and likely contains mispronunciation 'Nan' instead of 'man' and incorrect tense or verb choice. Use 'It was sent to the man' if referring to something sent in the past. If the intended meaning is different, rephrase for clarity. This falls under sentence structure and word choice problems: choose correct subject and verb and ensure the object is correctly identified.

× Yes, because biking is umm, as one of the suggestions of our government to use bike instead of motorcycle to uh, to minimize the use of engines or.

✓ Yes, because biking is one of the suggestions from our government: they encourage using a bike instead of a motorcycle to minimize engine use.

Article and preposition issues: use 'one of the suggestions from our government' rather than 'of our government to'. Use 'a bike' or 'using bikes' for general reference; here 'a bike' is fine. 'To minimize the use of engines or.' is incomplete; remove filler and finish idea: 'to minimize engine use.' Also improve sentence structure by making subject clear ('they encourage') and removing hesitation fillers. Maintain present tense for general statements.