Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitation and repetition (e.g., remove extra “somewhat”). Also ensure details are relevant — the chapel comment is unclear and seems unrelated, so either explain it or omit it.

예시: Yes. I had a red bicycle as a child, and I remember it because it looked like the classic bikes often shown in Korean films. For example, it had a woven basket and chrome fenders, which made it easy to carry my school books.

제안: Organize into a clear topic sentence followed by two concise, specific reasons linked with connectors (e.g., “because” / “for example”). Reduce redundancy and correct grammar (use past/present appropriately, singular/plural agreement). Mention concrete evidence and one implication or result to enrich the answer.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, there are several bicycle shops in my neighborhood, and the government has installed bike lanes along major roads, which makes cycling safer and more convenient.

× Uh, yes. I had a bike when I was a child and as far as I can remember it was a red bike that's somewhat somewhat similar with the bike that was used in Korean movies.

✓ Uh, yes. I had a bike when I was a child and, as far as I can remember, it was a red bike that was somewhat similar to the bike used in Korean movies.

The sentence mixes correct past tense with awkward phrasing and incorrect preposition use. 'That's' is a contraction of 'that is' which is present tense; use 'that was' or simply 'that was somewhat similar' to keep past tense consistent. Also use the preposition 'similar to' rather than 'similar with'. Add commas around the introductory phrase 'as far as I can remember' for clarity. Remove the duplicated 'somewhat'. Suggestion: maintain past tense throughout and use 'similar to'.

× My mom and I went to Chapel.

✓ My mom and I went to church.

'Chapel' is a countable noun and usually does not need a capital letter unless it is a proper name; more natural in this context is 'church' to mean attending religious service. If you mean the building generically, use lowercase 'chapel' and include an article: 'went to a chapel' or 'went to the chapel'. Suggestion: use 'church' or 'went to the chapel' depending on meaning.

× I do believe that in our country bikes are really popular since I noticed that then our neighborhood or within our vicinity we have at least 2 bicycle stores and our government really take into consideration our bikers since they have implemented bike lanes around our main highway.

✓ I believe that bicycles are very popular in our country because I have noticed that in our neighborhood there are at least two bicycle stores, and our government really takes bikers into consideration, since they have implemented bike lanes along our main highway.

Several issues: use 'bicycles' or 'bikes' consistently and avoid the redundant 'do' in 'I do believe' unless emphasizing; 'since' used for reason is acceptable but 'because' is clearer. Number should be written as 'two' in formal writing. Subject-verb agreement error: 'government' is singular, so use 'takes' not 'take' (this is ID 27 but treated here as present tense/subject-verb). Use 'there are' to state existence (There be issue could apply, but 'there are' is correct present). 'Within our vicinity' is redundant with 'in our neighborhood' so remove. Use 'along' or 'on' rather than 'around' for lanes on a highway. Suggestion: keep present tense consistent, ensure subject-verb agreement, remove redundancy, and use appropriate prepositions.