Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear and grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using correct tense and sentence structure. Avoid fillers (uh) and repetition. Link ideas with simple connectors (e.g., “and,” “when”) and correct number expressions (say “when I was six”).

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a bright red bike that my parents bought for me when I was six, and I learned to ride it in the park near our home.

제안: Answer directly and organize your points: give a clear opinion, then support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., “however,” “but,” “for example”). Use correct verb forms and avoid vague endings. Clarify what you mean by “symbol” if you use it.

예시: I think bikes are becoming more popular in my country, but they are still not very common among adults. However, many children have bikes now because parents want them to be active, and bicycles are also seen as a symbol of childhood and freedom.

× What a lovely, uh, my parent. Bought that buy for me on my 6.

✓ What a lovely bike. My parents bought that bike for me when I was six.

The original sentence has several pronoun and word-choice errors and sentence fragments. 'My parent.' is incorrect singular pronoun and fragments; use 'My parents' if both or 'My parent' with context. 'Bought that buy' repeats and misuses 'buy' instead of 'bike'. 'on my 6' is incorrect time expression; use 'when I was six'. Combine into two clauses: a comment and a full sentence. Also correct verb tense: 'bought' (simple past) is appropriate for a past event.

× To be honest, it is not that common in my country but uh, I saw many children bought it right now.

✓ To be honest, it is not that common in my country, but I see many children with bikes now.

The original mixes present and past incorrectly: 'I saw many children bought it right now' is ungrammatical. 'Right now' requires present tense ('see'), and 'bought' is unnecessary. Also 'it' is vague—replace with 'bikes' or 'with bikes'. Use present simple 'see' for current observations and 'now' for time reference. Maintain subject-verb agreement and correct noun plurality.

× It is a symbol and.

✓ It is a symbol of status.

The original is an incomplete sentence ending with 'and.' It lacks a complement after 'and' and unclear meaning. Replace with a complete noun phrase expressing likely intended idea (e.g., 'a symbol of status' or 'a symbol of freedom'). This fixes the fragment and clarifies the meaning.