Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve accuracy, clarity and fluency. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid repetition and fillers, and correct basic word choices and grammar (e.g., 'had' not 'heard', use past simple: 'I loved' or 'I had'). Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences). Add one or two specific details (when you got it, who taught you, a memorable incident) and use linking words (for example, 'because', 'so', 'even though') to make the response coherent.

예시: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I got it when I was about seven and learned to ride with help from my older brother. Even though I fell off a few times, I practised every day because I wanted to ride to school. That experience made me confident and fond of cycling.

제안: Expand the answer with specific reasons and examples using linking words. Provide at least two supporting points (e.g., affordability, traffic, environment) and a short example or comparison to make the answer more informative and natural. Maintain clear sentence structure and avoid one-word replies.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use motorbikes to commute to work to avoid traffic, and in smaller towns bicycles remain a common way to run errands. As a result, cycling is an important part of everyday life for many people.

× Yes, I heard my bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'heard' (past tense of 'hear'), which is incorrect for possession. The correct verb is 'have' in past tense: 'had'. Use 'I had a bike' to express possession in the past. Suggestion: Replace 'heard' with 'had' when talking about owning something in the past.

× I love to ride bikes since I was in maybe second standard.

✓ I have loved riding bikes since I was in second grade.

The sentence uses 'since' to indicate a time from the past to the present, so present perfect tense is required ('have loved'). Also use the gerund 'riding' after 'love' when describing an activity in general. 'Second standard' is a non-native phrasing; use 'second grade'. Suggestion: Use present perfect ('have loved') with 'since' and use the gerund form for the activity.

× I fell out many times, but still I love to ride my bike.

✓ I fell off many times, but I still love to ride my bike.

The phrase 'fell out' is incorrect for falling from a bike; the correct phrasal verb is 'fell off'. Also place 'still' after the subject for natural word order: 'I still love...'. Suggestion: Use 'fell off' when referring to falling from a vehicle and keep correct adverb placement.

× I I think in my in my opinion, I feel like however, whenever we.

✓ I think, in my opinion, I feel like... (incomplete thought - provide a complete sentence such as 'I think, in my opinion, I feel like we used bikes a lot when we were children.' )

The original is disfluent and contains repetitions ('I I', 'in my in my'), contradictory discourse markers ('however, whenever') and an incomplete clause ('we.'). This is a sentence structure and cohesion problem. The speaker should remove repetitions, choose appropriate discourse markers, and finish the thought. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, use one discourse marker at a time, and complete the clause with a clear subject and verb (e.g., 'we used bikes a lot when we were children').