Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct, concise and grammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds (“uh”) and contradictory tense ("I will" is incorrect here). Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I always wanted one because my friends rode bikes to the park, but my family couldn’t afford one at the time. As a result, I usually walked or took the bus to school.

제안: Give a clear opinion then support it with specific, well-linked details. Use correct grammar (e.g. "popular" not "so popular" is okay but avoid repetition). Replace vague phrases ("the low, low") with precise statements (e.g. "lower-income groups"). Use linking words like "for example" or "because" and avoid fillers and repetition.

예시: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient. For example, many students and workers ride bicycles to school or work to avoid traffic. However, they are more common among lower-income groups who cannot afford motorbikes or cars.

× Uh, no, unfortunately I didn't have any bike.

✓ Uh, no, unfortunately I didn't have a bike.

The noun 'bike' is a countable singular noun and should be used with the indefinite article 'a' after a negation with 'didn't'. 'Any' can be used in negative sentences but with plural nouns or uncountable nouns (e.g., 'didn't have any bikes' or 'didn't have any money'). Use: 'I didn't have a bike.'

× Uh, I will.

✓ Uh, I meant I would.

In this context the student is referring to a past desire rather than making a future offer or promise. The intended meaning is past-in-past or a reported desire: 'I would' or 'I meant to' fits better. Using 'will' incorrectly shifts the time frame to the future. Use 'I would' or 'I wanted to' to match the past context.

× I always wish to have a bike, but I couldn't have one.

✓ I always wished to have a bike, but I couldn't get one.

The verb 'wish' in reference to a past, unfulfilled desire should be in past form 'wished'. Also 'couldn't have one' is unnatural here; the correct verb is 'get' to express inability to obtain. Together they form a coherent past statement: 'I always wished to have a bike, but I couldn't get one.'

× Yeah, it's so popular in my country.

✓ Yeah, they're very popular in my country.

The pronoun 'it' refers to a singular subject but 'bikes' is plural. Use a plural subject pronoun 'they' or rephrase: 'Bikes are very popular in my country.' Also 'so popular' is informal; 'very popular' is more neutral.

× Mostly boys are using the bikes too much and and they use bike to go to school or some or works etcetera.

✓ Mostly boys use bikes a lot; they use bikes to go to school or to work.

The progressive 'are using' is awkward for habitual action; the simple present 'use' is correct for habits. 'the bikes' and 'they use bike' misuse articles—'bikes' (plural) without 'the' is appropriate. 'some or works' is ungrammatical; use 'to work' or 'for work'. Also remove the duplicate 'and' and 'etcetera' which is vague.

× Mostly boys are using the bikes too much and and they use bike to go to school or some or works etcetera.

✓ Mostly boys use bikes a lot; they use bikes to go to school or to work.

The phrase 'too much' can imply excessiveness; if the intended meaning is frequency, use 'a lot'. Also 'some or works' is incorrect; use 'to work'. The sentence needed better word choice and structure to convey habitual actions.

× But unfortunately it's for the low, low.

✓ But unfortunately they are too expensive for low-income families.

'It's for the low, low' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended meaning: bikes are unaffordable for people with low income. Use 'they are too expensive for low-income families' to express the contrast. This fixes pronoun reference, vocabulary ('low-income'), and sentence structure.