Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct and relevant but very brief and repetitive. To improve, provide a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., who gave it to you, what kind of bike it was, how you used it). Use a linking phrase if adding details. Keep it natural and stay within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for my seventh birthday and it was a small red bicycle with training wheels. I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon, which helped me become more independent.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but is awkwardly phrased and a bit repetitive. Improve by giving a clear topic sentence (yes/no or partly), then add concise, specific reasons or examples using linking words (for example, however, but, because). Avoid unnecessary words like “wherein” and correct pronoun agreement.

예시: Bikes are not very popular across the country, although they are used locally where I live. For instance, our city park offers bike rentals and a dedicated cycling path, so many people ride there for leisure at weekends.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

No correction needed. The sentence correctly uses past tense to describe a past state. Keep as is.

× I think it is not quite popular in our country, but from the city where I live in, we have a park where you can ride or rent a bike wherein you can ride on it.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country, but in the city where I live we have a park where you can rent bikes and ride them.

Multiple issues: incorrect pronoun/reference, awkward word order, redundant or incorrect prepositions and word choices. According to the list, this mainly concerns present tense and sentence structure. The original mixes 'it' with plural 'bikes' and uses awkward phrases like 'from the city where I live in' (redundant preposition) and 'wherein you can ride on it' (incorrect use of wherein and redundant 'on it'). The correction uses present simple 'don't think' to express opinion, matches plural 'bikes' with 'are', removes redundant prepositions ('in the city where I live' not 'from...in'), and replaces 'wherein you can ride on it' with 'where you can rent bikes and ride them' for clarity and correct pronoun agreement. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree in number, choose correct prepositions ('in' not 'from...in'), avoid archaic or formal connectors like 'wherein' in speech, and avoid redundant phrases like 'ride on it' when 'ride them' suffices.