Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar, tense consistency and clarity. Start with a direct topic sentence in past tense (because question asks about childhood), then add one brief supporting detail. Keep answers natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words for clarity and avoid conflicting time references.

예시: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. For example, I received it as a birthday gift when I was eight, and I used it every day to ride to the park. However, by the time I was a teenager it became broken and I stopped using it.

제안: Make your opinion clear and use correct tense and connectors. Begin with a direct opinion sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words (e.g., because, however). Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like "the radical" or incomplete clauses.

예시: I think bikes used to be quite popular in my country, but their use declined after the pandemic. For example, many people switched to private cars and motorbikes because public transport changed and some cycling paths were removed, so fewer people now commute by bicycle.

× Yes, I have a bike. Actually I have a bike last year, but it's already wrecked.

✓ Yes, I had a bike. Actually I had a bike last year, but it's already wrecked.

The student mixes present tense 'have' with a time expression 'last year' that requires past tense. Use past simple 'had' for possession in the past. Suggestion: match tense to time expressions (e.g., 'last year' → 'had').

× Actually I have a bike last year, but it's already wrecked.

✓ Actually I had a bike last year, but it was already wrecked.

The clause 'but it's already wrecked' uses present tense ('it's') while the rest of the sentence refers to last year. To maintain consistent past-time reference, change to past 'it was already wrecked' or use present perfect if speaking about a state up to now ('it has been wrecked'). Suggestion: keep tense consistency across clauses about the same time period.

× I think it was popular, but after the pandemic, uh, the radical and they also taking the transportation.

✓ I think it was popular, but after the pandemic, people became more radical and they also took other forms of transportation.

Multiple issues: 'I think it was popular' is acceptable if speaking about past popularity. 'the radical' is not a correct noun phrase; likely intended 'people became more radical' or 'the attitude changed'. 'they also taking' mixes auxiliary with -ing incorrectly; past simple 'took' matches 'after the pandemic'. Use clear subject 'people' and correct past tense verb 'took'. Suggestion: use proper nouns/phrases and correct past tense verbs for events after the pandemic.

× I think it was popular, but after the pandemic, uh, the radical and they also taking the transportation.

✓ I think it was popular, but after the pandemic, people became more radical and they also took other forms of transportation.

The phrase 'the radical' is not a correct noun and 'they' lacks a clear antecedent. Replace with 'people' to provide a clear subject. Also ensure pronoun refers unambiguously to a noun mentioned earlier. Suggestion: use explicit nouns like 'people' or 'many people' before pronouns.