Bike— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use a clear topic sentence, correct grammar and tense, and avoid repetition. Start with a direct answer (e.g., “No, I didn’t”), give one or two specific reasons with correct verb forms, and use linking words to connect ideas. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because my mother was very protective. Consequently, she didn’t allow me to ride for fear that I might fall and get hurt. As a result, I learned to cycle much later when I was older.

제안: Give a direct answer then add specific supporting details and a linking word. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., “common,” “widely used”) and provide one concrete example or reason to show why bikes are popular (e.g., affordability, health, traffic). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, definitely — bicycles are very common in my country. For example, many people use bikes to commute short distances because they are cheap and convenient, and you can see children and adults cycling in parks and on dedicated bike lanes.

× When I remember when I back, uh, when I went, when I go back to my childhood, I can remember that I didn't have any bike because my mother was so protective, so she was afraid that I will fall down from my bike.

✓ When I think back to my childhood, I remember that I didn't have a bike because my mother was so protective; she was afraid that I would fall off a bike.

This sentence has multiple issues: incorrect verb forms and tense consistency (Grammar Problem Type IDs 6 and 5), incorrect modal usage for reported past fear (ID 4), sentence structure problems (ID 26), and word choice/article issues (ID 22 and 17). Problems include mixed present and past verbs ('remember', 'go back', 'went'), incorrect use of 'will' for a past-tense fear (should use 'would'), awkward phrasing 'any bike' (use 'a bike'), and 'fall down from my bike' (more natural: 'fall off a bike'). Correction explanation: use 'think back' or 'remember' consistently in past context, keep past tense for remembered facts ('I remember that I didn't have a bike'), use 'would' to express a past worry about a possible future event relative to that past ('she was afraid that I would...'), and use the article 'a' with singular countable noun. Also replace 'fall down from' with the idiomatic 'fall off'.

× Yes, absolutely. I see a lot of people riding a bike around my neighborhood and it is really famous among children and adults too.

✓ Yes, absolutely. I see a lot of people riding bikes around my neighborhood, and cycling is really popular among children and adults too.

This sentence contains subject-verb/article/plural issues (IDs 1, 27, 22) and a word-choice issue (ID 13). 'Riding a bike' after 'a lot of people' is awkward; use the plural 'bikes' or the gerund 'cycling'. 'It is really famous' is unnatural; 'popular' is the correct adjective for activities or items. Also add a comma before 'and' to join clauses. The correction uses plural 'bikes' to match 'a lot of people' and replaces 'famous' with 'popular' for correct meaning and register.